The Scenic View

falling rain, droplet by droplet
pane pain pane
sipping on leaves
fall falling
failing to see

leaves livestock
lumbering, conceited
between the pages
their veins throbbing
as a moppet scribbles

over their bones
with primary colors
heavy-fisted, fat crayons
that melt

into the whirligig
cheek flames
and bright eyes
follow the track

jump into the raked
leaves piled high
aww, rains leaking
inside…pane…pain

child leaves it all behind
the grown kid rounds
Louisiana, not impressed
until Autumn leaves

remind and reminisce
stopping the automobile
in real time…real smooth
New Orleans beckons

but the scenic view
having said, howdy-do
is left behind with the pain
of slippery rain
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Rolland Avatar
November 16, 2024 at 11:28 PM
exquisite poetry, enjoyed the atmosphere of rain dropping and the lovely "pane pain" thanks poet Kim
Rodrigues Avatar
November 17, 2024 at 10:28 AM
Thank you, Yann!
Hind Avatar
November 15, 2024 at 6:33 PM
I can picture this. I see you frozen in the car, coming to stop- eyes on the pane- remembering...all growing up and the pain...now, too; do we ever truly grow up? I love "heavy-fisted, fat crayons that melt"- Hugs, <3
Rodrigues Avatar
November 15, 2024 at 7:59 PM
Thank you, Paige, for letting me know what you liked. Sometimes I can really feel and visualize what I’m writing about.
Tor Avatar
November 15, 2024 at 3:57 PM
Wow what an effort in this one Kim. Thanks for posting...
Rodrigues Avatar
November 15, 2024 at 5:07 PM
Thank you, Mike!
Jones Avatar
November 15, 2024 at 3:45 PM
Wow! This is beautiful! I love the way you put this together Kim. It has grace and a lovely yet somber strength!
Rodrigues Avatar
November 15, 2024 at 5:08 PM
Thank you so much, Karen!
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