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The Scenic View

falling rain, droplet by droplet
pane pain pane
sipping on leaves
fall falling
failing to see

leaves livestock
lumbering, conceited
between the pages
their veins throbbing
as a moppet scribbles

over their bones
with primary colors
heavy-fisted, fat crayons
that melt

into the whirligig
cheek flames
and bright eyes
follow the track

jump into the raked
leaves piled high
aww, rains leaking
inside…pane…pain

child leaves it all behind
the grown kid rounds
Louisiana, not impressed
until Autumn leaves

remind and reminisce
stopping the automobile
in real time…real smooth
New Orleans beckons

but the scenic view
having said, howdy-do
is left behind with the pain
of slippery rain

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Date: 11/16/2024 11:28:00 PM
exquisite poetry, enjoyed the atmosphere of rain dropping and the lovely "pane pain" thanks poet Kim
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 11/17/2024 10:28:00 AM
Thank you, Yann!
Date: 11/15/2024 6:33:00 PM
I can picture this. I see you frozen in the car, coming to stop- eyes on the pane- remembering...all growing up and the pain...now, too; do we ever truly grow up? I love "heavy-fisted, fat crayons that melt"- Hugs, <3
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 11/15/2024 7:59:00 PM
Thank you, Paige, for letting me know what you liked. Sometimes I can really feel and visualize what I’m writing about.
Date: 11/15/2024 3:57:00 PM
Wow what an effort in this one Kim. Thanks for posting...
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 11/15/2024 5:07:00 PM
Thank you, Mike!
Date: 11/15/2024 3:45:00 PM
Wow! This is beautiful! I love the way you put this together Kim. It has grace and a lovely yet somber strength!
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 11/15/2024 5:08:00 PM
Thank you so much, Karen!

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