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The Scenic View

falling rain, droplet by droplet pane pain pane sipping on leaves fall falling failing to see leaves livestock lumbering, conceited between the pages their veins throbbing as a moppet scribbles over their bones with primary colors heavy-fisted, fat crayons that melt into the whirligig cheek flames and bright eyes follow the track jump into the raked leaves piled high aww, rains leaking inside…pane…pain child leaves it all behind the grown kid rounds Louisiana, not impressed until Autumn leaves remind and reminisce stopping the automobile in real time…real smooth New Orleans beckons but the scenic view having said, howdy-do is left behind with the pain of slippery rain

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Date: 11/16/2024 11:28:00 PM
exquisite poetry, enjoyed the atmosphere of rain dropping and the lovely "pane pain" thanks poet Kim
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 11/17/2024 10:28:00 AM
Thank you, Yann!
Date: 11/15/2024 6:33:00 PM
I can picture this. I see you frozen in the car, coming to stop- eyes on the pane- remembering...all growing up and the pain...now, too; do we ever truly grow up? I love "heavy-fisted, fat crayons that melt"- Hugs, <3
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 11/15/2024 7:59:00 PM
Thank you, Paige, for letting me know what you liked. Sometimes I can really feel and visualize what I’m writing about.
Date: 11/15/2024 3:57:00 PM
Wow what an effort in this one Kim. Thanks for posting...
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 11/15/2024 5:07:00 PM
Thank you, Mike!
Date: 11/15/2024 3:45:00 PM
Wow! This is beautiful! I love the way you put this together Kim. It has grace and a lovely yet somber strength!
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 11/15/2024 5:08:00 PM
Thank you so much, Karen!

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