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The Runaway

Scorned because it was true her boyfriend said we're through Mom and Dad couldn't believe their little girl had conceived disgrace written on their face she grabbed her packed suitcase waiting on the station platform overhead many dark clouds formed slow chugging of the train tears camouflaged by the rain 3-6-18

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Line Gauthier

Date: 4/9/2018 10:04:00 PM

A very endearing poem, Cheryl. Congrats.

Cheryl Hoffman
Date: 4/10/2018 8:29:00 AM

Thanks so much for very kind congrats and visit Line; really appreciate it!~Che :)

Gregory Richard Barden

Date: 3/30/2018 5:15:00 AM

Blessings and sincere congratulations on your fine win, Cheryl - all the best to you, my friend! :-)

Cheryl Hoffman
Date: 3/30/2018 8:12:00 AM

Thanks so much for very kind congrats and visit Gregory; really appreciate it! All the best to you too poet friend!~Che :)

Lu Loo

Date: 3/21/2018 6:46:00 AM

great poem sweet Cheryl thank you and congrats :)-luloo

Cheryl Hoffman
Date: 3/21/2018 8:26:00 AM

Thanks so much for very kind congrats and placement luloo; really appreciate it!~Che :)

Pat Adams

Date: 3/8/2018 10:27:00 PM

Very descriptive and really takes you there. Very well written my friend...80)

Cheryl Hoffman
Date: 3/9/2018 7:31:00 AM

Thanks so much for very kind comment and visit Pat; glad you liked it!~Che :)

Paulina Wodarz

Date: 3/6/2018 8:40:00 PM

Such a deep and realistic poem! Love the emotion embedded in this.

Cheryl Hoffman
Date: 3/7/2018 7:31:00 AM

Thanks so much for very kind comment and visit Paulina; glad you liked it!~Che :)

Susan Ashley

Date: 3/6/2018 8:05:00 PM

For some, such a sad but true reality expressed in your captivating poem, Che. What is it that's she really running from; something within or without her? Maybe she has a fear of commitment and intimacy.. maybe picking the same type of romantic partner, with similar lousy issues, with similar lousy results, therefore avoiding real commitment for obviously problematic reasons..? Che, your poem's really got me thinking, huh?! A fantastic but sad poem of repeated disconnection, my friend.

Susan Ashley
Date: 3/6/2018 8:23:00 PM

Is this the original version that's up now Che? It's tender and poignant.. I can see why you said tweeking it had changed it to a completely different story. Both versions are sad and compelling for different reasons - both are excellent!

Cheryl Hoffman
Date: 3/6/2018 8:11:00 PM

Hi Susan, I'm so glad you had liked my poem but I ended up tweaking it so much that its now an entire different story…maybe I should have left it the way it was especially after your wonderful comment on it! Sheesh, when will I learn if it ain't broke don't try to fix it! Anyway, thanks so much for very kind comment and visit Sue!~Che :)

Silent One

Date: 3/6/2018 10:11:00 AM

So many have been there...

Cheryl Hoffman
Date: 3/6/2018 6:52:00 PM

So very true Silent One; thanks so much for very kind comment and visit! Appreciate it!~Che :)

Tom Cunningham

Date: 3/6/2018 8:38:00 AM

Sadly things don't sometimes work out, we all deserve a little happiness in our lives. tom

Cheryl Hoffman
Date: 3/6/2018 9:41:00 AM

I agree Tom….thanks so much for very kind comment and visit; Appreciate it!~Che :)