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The Runaway

Scorned because it was true
her boyfriend said we're through
Mom and Dad couldn't believe
their little girl had conceived
disgrace written on their face
she grabbed her packed suitcase
waiting on the station platform
overhead many dark clouds formed
slow chugging of the train
tears camouflaged by the rain






3-6-18

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Line Gauthier Date: 4/9/2018 10:04:00 PM A very endearing poem, Cheryl. Congrats. Login to Reply Cheryl Hoffman Date: 4/10/2018 8:29:00 AM Thanks so much for very kind congrats and visit Line; really appreciate it!~Che :)

Gregory Richard Barden Date: 3/30/2018 5:15:00 AM Blessings and sincere congratulations on your fine win, Cheryl - all the best to you, my friend! :-) Login to Reply Cheryl Hoffman Date: 3/30/2018 8:12:00 AM Thanks so much for very kind congrats and visit Gregory; really appreciate it! All the best to you too poet friend!~Che :)

Beautiful Scars Date: 3/21/2018 6:46:00 AM great poem sweet Cheryl thank you and congrats :)-luloo Login to Reply Cheryl Hoffman Date: 3/21/2018 8:26:00 AM Thanks so much for very kind congrats and placement luloo; really appreciate it!~Che :)

Pat Adams Date: 3/8/2018 10:27:00 PM Very descriptive and really takes you there. Very well written my friend...80) Login to Reply Cheryl Hoffman Date: 3/9/2018 7:31:00 AM Thanks so much for very kind comment and visit Pat; glad you liked it!~Che :)

Paulina Wodarz Date: 3/6/2018 8:40:00 PM Such a deep and realistic poem! Love the emotion embedded in this. Login to Reply Cheryl Hoffman Date: 3/7/2018 7:31:00 AM Thanks so much for very kind comment and visit Paulina; glad you liked it!~Che :)

Susan Ashley Date: 3/6/2018 8:05:00 PM For some, such a sad but true reality expressed in your captivating poem, Che. What is it that's she really running from; something within or without her? Maybe she has a fear of commitment and intimacy.. maybe picking the same type of romantic partner, with similar lousy issues, with similar lousy results, therefore avoiding real commitment for obviously problematic reasons..? Che, your poem's really got me thinking, huh?! A fantastic but sad poem of repeated disconnection, my friend. Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 3/6/2018 8:23:00 PM Is this the original version that's up now Che? It's tender and poignant.. I can see why you said tweeking it had changed it to a completely different story. Both versions are sad and compelling for different reasons - both are excellent! Cheryl Hoffman Date: 3/6/2018 8:11:00 PM Hi Susan, I'm so glad you had liked my poem but I ended up tweaking it so much that its now an entire different story…maybe I should have left it the way it was especially after your wonderful comment on it! Sheesh, when will I learn if it ain't broke don't try to fix it! Anyway, thanks so much for very kind comment and visit Sue!~Che :)

Silent One Date: 3/6/2018 10:11:00 AM So many have been there... Login to Reply Cheryl Hoffman Date: 3/6/2018 6:52:00 PM So very true Silent One; thanks so much for very kind comment and visit! Appreciate it!~Che :)

Tom Cunningham Date: 3/6/2018 8:38:00 AM Sadly things don't sometimes work out, we all deserve a little happiness in our lives. tom Login to Reply Cheryl Hoffman Date: 3/6/2018 9:41:00 AM I agree Tom….thanks so much for very kind comment and visit; Appreciate it!~Che :)