Voahanitriniaina Rabary-Andriamanday Poet Shape

The Rose, a Questionku

o                                                 $orrow$ 
                                       o         <> As                                   o<>$orrow$
                                           o   $          the flows                /               $orrow$
                                o           <>                     o              /                $orrow$
                                o       o                             from her /                 $orrow$
                                      o      O                        sorrows                    $orrow$
                          o      o                                     drew                    $orrow$
                         o             o                              the veil                 o<>
                      o   o      o            O                                              o<>o
                    o  o    o  o      o                         from their eyes,   <>o
                   o o  o                o         O                     /             o
                  o o  o           o                                     /
                 o          o                             O          Died
               o  o   o                                             The
               o  o                  o                           Rose
             o  o                                                 /
             o                                                  from
                               o                              their
              o                                              blows
                                                                !
                                                           O  and   o O   Oo  
                   o                                 O         the    o O  O  O
                                                  O              hail      o  Oo  O  
  Pearls are pouring,                   O                     !        o O  OO  
                                             O                      in        o O  OO 
                                             O                     their  o  O  OO
  Like dew on The Rose:              O                 lies    o  O.Oo
  Who's hailing her sorrows?                O        O      O   O

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Richard Lamoureux February 13, 2013 at 6:17 PM Hello Irfana just dropped by to say hello. I hope you are well. I haven't heard from you in a while. Voahanitriniaina Rabary-Andriamanday February 16, 2013 at 8:52 AM Irfana??? Work and family have kept me away for a while and I'm trying to give some more time to poetry today! Wrote a shape Questionku even! Check it out some time! Happy there are true friends who won't forget me!:) Love, Hanitra

Debbie Duncan January 10, 2013 at 12:07 AM very nicely worded,,, nice flow to it, have a great day ;}

Harry Horsman January 9, 2013 at 5:04 AM this is so profound,, not many can write so intense in such short poetry.. you have indeed a wonderful talent,, long may your pen rule....

James Marshall Goff January 4, 2013 at 1:55 PM Aye, Hanitra.....the weary warrior! jimbo

Sara Kendrick January 2, 2013 at 5:46 PM Very clever play on words and ideas..Enjoyed reading this eve..Thanks for stopping by..Sara

Richard Lamoureux December 16, 2012 at 8:43 AM Hello Hanitra, it has been a while since we have spoken. What do you celebrate during this time of year? Whatever it is I hope you are truly blessed. Your Canadian friend Rick

Richard Lamoureux December 8, 2012 at 10:53 AM me again, I hope this greeting finds you healthy and happy. Voahanitriniaina Rabary-Andriamanday January 2, 2013 at 7:47 AM Sorry, Rick! Not much time to write but I'm reading my friends on the soup as often as possible! Congratulations for all the big challenges you 've been taking since! I'm very proud of our friendship! Big success for Questionku! And now, already stepping forward to Understepping! You're really amazing! And such a big heart as always! Lots of hugs! Hanitra

Richard Lamoureux November 27, 2012 at 9:37 AM Hello Hanitra I miss visiting with you. I hope this greeting finds you well. Voahanitriniaina Rabary-Andriamanday November 28, 2012 at 12:15 PM So nice of you, I'm very well, Rick! I hope you too! Thank you for stopping by The Rose. You're blessed to have so much inspiration: your poems are so great and these new forms are pretty exciting!

Poet Destroyer A November 21, 2012 at 7:47 PM Loving this one once again,,, V R-A,Stopping by to greet you and every other soup poet, with a special thank you comment, during this wonderful Thanksgiving season. Hope you do not mind the time I am taking to express my sincere appreciation for any support you have offered during the years, or time you have been here on the soup. I am deeply thankful and extend to you my best wishes for a happy and healthy Poetic Magical Thanksgiving Day. *Always & Forever, the Poet Destroyer; -* Voahanitriniaina Rabary-Andriamanday November 25, 2012 at 12:05 AM So nice of you, dear PD; and you have chosen a great sign for your new profile! Wonderful idea, indeed! Proud to be a Souper Trooper, izn'it!? (^_^) And once more, congratulations for all the visitors to your "Public Enemy - The Haiku" poems! It is a well deserved success! Keep on enlighting our days, dear PD! Love, Hanitra

Robert Johnson November 21, 2012 at 8:55 AM Talk about a critique, Richard below summed it up completely. Awsome writes from both of you.

Poet Destroyer A November 17, 2012 at 7:53 PM Another thought ,, a very deep image and gift you have here... thank you for the kind words in my poem...pd Voahanitriniaina Rabary-Andriamanday November 18, 2012 at 12:21 PM Thank you so much!

Joseph May November 14, 2012 at 4:11 PM wonderful write Hanitra...enjoyed Voahanitriniaina Rabary-Andriamanday November 18, 2012 at 12:21 PM Thanks, Joseph!

Richard Lamoureux November 12, 2012 at 7:52 AM I guess the Rose was to delicate to survive the salty tears that had turned into hail, Because of a heart that was hardened by all those lies. You have created a lot of images for me. Well done Hanitra Voahanitriniaina Rabary-Andriamanday November 18, 2012 at 12:22 PM Thank you, Rick!