The Rongtern Mansion

Rongtern Mansion By M. Taha Effendi (Verse Libre) The front door of the mansion mysteriously creaks open, I freeze. Hoping to hear a welcoming voice, But all I hear is the wailing of the cold wind, The pitter-patter of rain outside, And the roar of lightning, The room reeks of damp, decayed wood and dusty furniture, I enter. The hall is dark, I can only make out countless ornate mirrors glittering on the walls all around, And a tiny candle that flickers on a table at the far end of the hall, An old telephone sits beside it, Squinting around nervously for any sign of life, Groping through the darkness, I reach the table, An ornate frame is perched on the wall there, An old man, balding, with a heavily creased face, firm jaws, and blood shot eyes, bearing a somewhat sinister smile, Looks back at me from it, A strange macabre feeling suddenly engulfs me, I pick up the cold receiver with a trembling hand, holding it to my ear, about to dial, When suddenly with a flash of lightning, I catch the smile of the old man in the portrait falter, And hear the sobs of a little girl on the phone, "H-h-h-hide me f-from d-d-daddy... H-hide m-me f-from d-daddy," Terrified, a cold shudder trickles down my spine, fogging my mind and senses, The phone slips from my grasp and hits the floor with a thud, And instantly the echoes of the girl's sobs get louder, They seem to be coming from behind a closed oak door a few steps away, As I reluctantly make my way towards it, The constant howl of the wind seems like an evil cackle, I can't help but feel that someone is breathing down my neck. I swallow a nervous whimper, Finally I am at the door, I turn the knob, It is locked. Just then I hear a floor board creak inside the room, Confused, I crouch and peep through the keyhole, I see nothing but darkness, But I wait, Perhaps my eye will adjust to the dark, It does, And what it beholds makes the very blood in my veins curdle, From the other side of the keyhole was peeping, A bloodshot eye... Winner of contest: "A Creepy, Scary Haunted House Poem, Please" by Constance - My Dear Heart

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Date: 3/16/2016 11:42:00 PM
Mohammad Taha, Enjoyed the way you expressed every line. Please keep writing and sharing you're poetry. LOVE LINDA
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Date: 3/26/2015 6:01:00 PM
Beautiful pen Mohammad! Wow this one is so very effective, you chose the right words and atmosphere to make it stand out and give one the shivers reading it, dear friend. Excellent piece! Perfect title! Truly enjoyed!Thank you for visiting my pages and reading commenting on my work. A 7 from me! Thanks for sharing! Wishing you a very wonderful day! In his light! God bless you! :-) D.
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Date: 5/18/2012 12:00:00 PM
Creepy. Your adjectives make this special.
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Date: 3/16/2012 8:59:00 AM
Just checking in to see how you are and what you are doing. You must be having a dry spell like me but your poems are always good to read many times. Hope all is well with you! :)
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Date: 1/6/2012 6:14:00 AM
This is Extraordinary :D ! I Really Enjoyed this Piece of writing :D You have a really beautiful style of writing :) , Louzana.
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Date: 12/21/2011 8:16:00 PM
Hey, this reminded me of the ghost tales we told that seemed really scary and then at the very end we would say something funny like this bloodshot eye. GREAT atmospheric writing here. Sorry for the belated congrats. I see it won Constance's contest from a long while back. I sure miss her contests and HER.
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Date: 11/14/2011 6:55:00 PM
Made the hair stand up on the back of my neck Taha. You have many different sides to your poetry and all of them are wonderful So glad you were a winner with this! :)
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Date: 11/10/2011 6:39:00 PM
A very well written horror poem -scary, indeed. Congrats on your well deserved win. Thanks also for your heart warming comments on my poem 'I Love You'
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Date: 11/9/2011 10:36:00 PM
EXCELLENT! Reminded me a bit of Poe. This was great! Always, Laura
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Date: 9/25/2011 3:02:00 PM
Congratulations on your win in Dear Heart Constance's "A Creepy, Scary, Haunted House" contest Taha. Love, Carol
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Date: 9/23/2011 10:43:00 AM
This one gave me shivers. Well written and definately spooky. Congratulations Taha
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Mohammad Taha Effendi
Date: 9/24/2011 8:10:00 AM
Then my objective has been achieved I suppose:) Thank you for showing so much interest in my poetry Bob. I am grateful to you for your support and encouragement.
Date: 9/23/2011 7:15:00 AM
Congratulations on the win in the contest of Constance, Taha
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Mohammad Taha Effendi
Date: 9/24/2011 8:08:00 AM
Thank you for your kind words of appreciation, sir. Thank you!
Date: 9/23/2011 12:15:00 AM
Congrats Taha on first place win with beautiful poetry luv..
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Mohammad Taha Effendi
Date: 9/23/2011 2:16:00 AM
Thank you Linda for your encouragement, support and love.
Date: 9/22/2011 11:15:00 PM
Congrats on the win, Taha. The bloodshot eye just cracked me up! Very Nancy Drew! Neat take. Cyndi
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Mohammad Taha Effendi
Date: 9/23/2011 2:18:00 AM
I can not thank you enough for your interest in my poetry. Really, it is so overwhelming to have spent so little time here and made such caring friends. Thank you loads, Cyndi. Love and blessings, Taha.
Date: 9/22/2011 9:35:00 PM
I would never have stayed around to peep. Great story and scary. Congratulations on your win. Love, Joyce
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Mohammad Taha Effendi
Date: 9/23/2011 2:29:00 AM
Thank you for your kind words Joyce. Your support and admiration is a source of tremendous encouragement for me. Peace and blessings, Taha.
Date: 9/22/2011 8:25:00 PM
ohhh yeah! scooby dooby do where are YOUUUUUU!!! gotta scream at the blood shot eye balls!!! we used to peel grapes at halloween and put them in a bowl and call them eyeballs!! congrad's light & love
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Mohammad Taha Effendi
Date: 9/23/2011 2:36:00 AM
Hahaha... I remember skipping dinner to watch Scooby Doo on Cartoon Network when I was a kid. Good ol' times those were. Scooby Doo is a universal phenomena, isn't it? Thank you so much for liking my work. I'm so overwhelmed right now. Than kyou. Peace and blessings, Taha.
Date: 9/22/2011 7:37:00 PM
Taha, This write is completely up my alley....Scooooooby Doooby Doooo! Where are YOU!? The bloodshot eye is completely hysterical bc I was expecting a blood squirting ending! ha ha ha . Very goood stuff and very kid friendly. This is my first exposure to your work. I will look for you in the future. Scooooby Dooooby DOOOOO!!! Gwendolen
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Mohammad Taha Effendi
Date: 9/23/2011 2:27:00 AM
Hahaha! Thank you so much Gwen. You inspire me. And I suppose Scooby Doo is a universal phenomena with the love and admiration that I have received:p I can not thank you enough for your kind words. Oh thank you! Peace and blessings, Taha.
Date: 9/17/2011 7:39:00 PM
Well, well. I was quite disappointed at the end of the poem. I actually was looking for more. How dare you finish, what is such an intriguing story. One I was so engulfed in. Great, no, Excellent work. Keep it coming. Jew@Smalling
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Mohammad Taha Effendi
Date: 9/23/2011 2:22:00 AM
Thank you so much for your interest in my poetry. I can not thank you enough Joy. I'm really overwhelmed. Peace and blessings upon you, Taha.
Date: 9/16/2011 7:57:00 AM
entertaining write which held me to the end, i assume part two will folow eventually. good stuff this
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Mohammad Taha Effendi
Date: 9/16/2011 1:26:00 PM
Thanks Steven. I'd write again if another contest demands it:)
Date: 9/16/2011 6:34:00 AM
Spooky! You sure that wasn't my bedroom door you were trying to break into? lol Good write
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Mohammad Taha Effendi
Date: 9/16/2011 1:23:00 PM
Thanks bro, lol! Was that your idea of an anti-encroachment sysytem? It sure worked splendidly:) Blessings, Taha.
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