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My room at the Hyatt Smelled like my ex-wife She didn't have oodles of class Or wasn't overly fancy So, it must be that aroma of Almost masking what had Taken place the night before We greeted each other with A welcoming suspicion The bathroom lighting flawless Standing in the mirror with Perfect tan and bright white A T-shirt Khaki slacks pulled high and Wise guy hair cut I wonder if Capone ever went to see The Cubbies play Beautiful sunny day, not too warm Plenty of room on the mezzanine At Wrigley A pleasantly safe distance from the Big middle aged guys with Some other man's name on their back ' s Exhaling brat breath And beer farts the Windy City loves their team

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Date: 6/11/2015 8:05:00 AM
Lol I like when you said " My room at the Hyatt smelled like my ex wife"
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Brian Martin
Date: 6/11/2015 12:40:00 PM
Thanx Abdeil, definately an attention getter. I checked the closet and pulled back the curtains, quite a riot!
Date: 5/25/2015 10:59:00 AM
I so love the way you describe details in your poem ,especially the smell of your room in Hyatt. Well done ! Welcome to poetry soup : )Charma.
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Brian Martin
Date: 5/26/2015 7:59:00 AM
Thank you for the compliment and welcome Charma! :)
Date: 5/18/2015 10:45:00 AM
Brian, nice one. Enjoyed stopping by to read your poem today. FOREVER **SKAT**
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Brian Martin
Date: 5/18/2015 3:10:00 PM
SKAT- Thank you.... you're so sweet! Brian