The Redline

My room at the Hyatt 
Smelled like my ex-wife
She didn't have oodles of class
Or wasn't overly fancy
So, it must be that aroma of 
Almost masking what had
Taken place the night before
We greeted each other with
A welcoming suspicion 
The bathroom lighting flawless 
Standing in the mirror with
Perfect tan and bright white A
T-shirt
Khaki slacks pulled high and
Wise guy hair cut
I wonder if Capone ever went to see
The Cubbies play
Beautiful sunny day, not too warm
Plenty of room on the mezzanine
At Wrigley 
A pleasantly safe distance from the
Big middle aged guys with
Some other man's name on their back ' s
Exhaling brat breath
And beer farts 
the Windy City loves their team
Copyright © | Year Posted 2015


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Date: 6/11/2015 8:05:00 AM
Lol I like when you said " My room at the Hyatt smelled like my ex wife"
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Brian Martin
Date: 6/11/2015 12:40:00 PM
Thanx Abdeil, definately an attention getter. I checked the closet and pulled back the curtains, quite a riot!
Date: 5/25/2015 10:59:00 AM
I so love the way you describe details in your poem ,especially the smell of your room in Hyatt. Well done ! Welcome to poetry soup : )Charma.
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Date: 5/26/2015 7:59:00 AM
Thank you for the compliment and welcome Charma! :)
Date: 5/18/2015 10:45:00 AM
Brian, nice one. Enjoyed stopping by to read your poem today. FOREVER **SKAT**
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Brian Martin
Date: 5/18/2015 3:10:00 PM
SKAT- Thank you.... you're so sweet! Brian
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