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The Red Train

From an aerial view, the sight of a beautiful red train chugging along down the railway track takes my breath away;
One moment I am watching a funnel shaped smoke stack sending puffs, up towards the white cottony clouds then disappearing, and the next I am hearing the sound of a whistle blowing. A melodious voice is heard as a conductor enounces, "tickets please," Out of my pocket I produce an admission ticket that was long overdue ... With one cotton white glove he presses the ticket between his fingers then holds it up to his gold monocle and smiles , "welcome aboard then !" He traipses over to supposedly important passengers that I cannot see and leaves me sitting there, wondering about our destination. How I got so lucky as to enter this magical snow train I have no idea, but the scent of this leathery Kirlian man, still clings to my thoughts like a revenant moment from a long forgotten past. To Be Continued...

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Date: 11/18/2023 1:05:00 AM
Oh my goodness, I cannot wait for the next part of your story, I adore watching, reading about and riding on trains so much. I love this!
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Date: 11/9/2023 11:15:00 PM
Gosh dear Rose … how enchanting and delightful is this read! What a wonderful storyteller you are. I was sat with you excitedly on the train- all aboard! Love how you have gone into such wonderful descriptive detail including with the conductor. Right- must fly a minute as I want to catch the next part …
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Date: 11/6/2023 4:34:00 PM
Great hook, my friend, I'm in for the whole ride! :-) Sara and I have been talking about a train ride vacation next year ... your poetry will have us excite to take it. Thaks for sharing your thoughts through your fine poetry, Vie. A poet friend in Texas, Bill
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Date: 11/6/2023 4:12:00 PM
Rose, Your storytelling prowess is truly exceptional! The seamless progression of your lines is captivating, and the conclusion has left me yearning for more. Your undeniable talent in this craft is commendable.
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Date: 11/6/2023 12:52:00 AM
You were always good at storytelling. We look forward to the next part. Blessings.
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Mystic Rose Rose
Date: 11/6/2023 3:59:00 PM
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Date: 11/5/2023 2:08:00 PM
thus far, a compelling and engaging story. You've created interest for me...looking forward to the next 'verse.' Enjoy your evening, creative spirit that you are, Sara
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Mystic Rose Rose
Date: 11/6/2023 3:59:00 PM
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5drgsoPmH60
Date: 11/5/2023 7:35:00 AM
Brilliant storytelling! I love the flow of your lines and also that ending left me wanting to read the next part. You really are good at this. Pleasure reading as always!
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Mystic Rose Rose
Date: 11/6/2023 4:00:00 PM
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Date: 11/5/2023 6:45:00 AM
One of Tom Hank's best...sorry I sold mine picked up at thrift store -- oh well, perhaps someone is loving it as much as its memory revived by your precious journey poem -- we pass from miracle into ever greater miracle, never to be bored. Life has wonders unlimited, beyond any singular imagination.
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Joe Dimino
Date: 11/6/2023 4:34:00 PM
Very nicely done, Vie; Going Home...ready for rest. Wish I had done more. Blessings my friend.
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Date: 11/6/2023 4:00:00 PM
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5drgsoPmH60

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