Muhammad Imtiaz Poet Couplet

The Real Winner

Walking all around in the sun and grass
Happy i was to get a job of high class

I worked hard and proved, with men , we are at par.
Now anxious to get reward, waiting for our annual scorecard

"This a big test, me looking kinda shocked
either I get promoted , or I get dropped"

Some one cheated away my rights
with a glowing face and dress dark bright.

The shocking score cut me to the core
The old lady said," the real winner is you if you cry no more"


(thanks to Susan Baquie)

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David Smith September 3, 2021 at 2:49 AM Excellent message in form of poem. Hope you are Ok and will have some more for us this year. Regards David in NZ Muhammad Imtiaz October 1, 2021 at 4:46 AM Thanks David for your precious words. I am fine alhamdolillah thank you. How about you. Hope you are doing well and good.

Darlene De Beaulieu June 4, 2018 at 12:45 PM Hello Muhammad, you did well with this poem. I look forward to reading more of your poetry. have a nice day my friend.

Debbie Duncan March 15, 2018 at 6:26 PM Great write, thank you for your nice comments always :) Muhammad Imtiaz March 16, 2018 at 1:02 PM Thanks Debbie

Leanne Lovejoy-Burton March 3, 2018 at 1:39 AM Imtiaz..."distinct"/"unique"...and that you very much are...I found reading your poem a discourse into intrigue;the comments and responses enlightening. Muhammad Imtiaz August 13, 2020 at 10:41 AM i found Goethe in your writings. May God bless you Muhammad Imtiaz March 3, 2018 at 5:39 AM Thanks Leanne.............for lovely and sincere comments.. and thanks for writing the meaning of my name.

Marc Acrich March 2, 2018 at 7:24 AM (:::, nice job

Richard Lamoureux February 25, 2018 at 10:03 AM Thanks for accepting my suggestion. It is a strong man who is able to hear others. Muhammad Imtiaz February 25, 2018 at 10:11 AM Thanks . yes Man should always be open to reasonable change in any field of life.............it is my practice and faith to accept the reason whether it is against my current belief..............

Bee Cee February 25, 2018 at 4:10 AM Beautiful Muhammad Imtiaz February 25, 2018 at 4:23 AM thanks Bhavini

Barbara Barry-Nishanian February 25, 2018 at 12:00 AM Sad humans often feel have to work hard to prove on par with other imperfect humans.So glad my God, and creator is not partial , nor his son. Thanks for visiting me, you mention you're from Norway, hope to hear from you again soon . Thanks again bbn Muhammad Imtiaz February 25, 2018 at 1:02 AM thanks BBN, i really like your poems because they have some message. I am not from Norway but i have some friends from Norway and it is a beautiful land. Thanks a lot for being here .welcome again

S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri February 24, 2018 at 11:46 PM A very nice poem indeed , interesting and joyful. Thumbs up. Pleez do comment my newest poem too. Muhammad Imtiaz February 24, 2018 at 11:57 PM Thanks S.Z.K I am pleased for you be here on my page. Yes sure i would like to see your work as well. thanks for comment

Eve Roper February 24, 2018 at 1:54 PM I love your theme.. well expressed.. I would change the form to Free Verse or Couplets like Janice suggested. Muhammad Imtiaz February 24, 2018 at 2:05 PM Hi Eve thanks a lot for visiting my page and am pleased to have your beautiful comments. yes i will change it to couplet... Many thanks

Faraz Ajmal February 24, 2018 at 1:10 PM It s a really beautiful written poem and the message in it was great, this is how it goes, everyone has his/her choice and that s not always the right one, good luck and thanose for reading my poems Muhammad Imtiaz February 24, 2018 at 1:14 PM Thanks dear

Richard Lamoureux February 24, 2018 at 1:01 PM Hello Muhammad, man's favor is temporary. I like the shifting of perspective in this piece. In the last line consider changing "are" to "is" as the subject is singular not plural. Muhammad Imtiaz February 24, 2018 at 1:08 PM Thanks Richard thanks for your lovely feedback and correction . i really appreciate it..thanks a lot...

Janice Canerdy February 24, 2018 at 10:42 AM These are great couplets, Muhammad! Janice Muhammad Imtiaz February 24, 2018 at 11:20 AM Thanks Janice for making a beautiful comment . It is great pleasure to have comments from great poets

Joseph May February 24, 2018 at 7:53 AM No more tears..Very nicely penned .. Muhammad Imtiaz February 24, 2018 at 11:19 AM thanks Janice for nice comments.........it is the crux of the poem..."No more tears" It is very pleasurable moment to have such nice comments from experienced people.

Maria Williams February 23, 2018 at 8:02 PM I am not comfortable with the word "Whore" either, and had you used it I would not have commented on this. That being said I highly commend you for not using that word. you have again penned an excellent poem. Well done Muhammad....Maria Muhammad Imtiaz February 23, 2018 at 11:45 PM Thanks Maria..........yes when you do something which you feel wrong , you should avoid it , you should change it , so as i . i feel something bad about it so i changed it and Susan helped me change it. Thanks to you for great words of appreciation.

Silent One February 23, 2018 at 3:40 PM You expressed this very well Imtiaz.. Muhammad Imtiaz February 23, 2018 at 11:47 PM Hello Silent , thanks a lot for coming to my page and giving a lovely feedback... have a nice day,,, BR Imtiaz

Anne-Lise Andresen February 23, 2018 at 1:04 PM - I wish you good luck, Muhammad ... be a winner! - You can do it :) - hugs from Norway :) Muhammad Imtiaz February 23, 2018 at 11:52 PM Hello sunshine smile, how are you, hope you are doing well. i am really thanks ful for you sincere comments and a beautiful hug from Norway.........and thanks for beautiful wishes also. A warm hug from me too.......... have a nice day too

Muhammad Imtiaz February 21, 2018 at 5:59 AM Hi I want you to suggest me a replacement for the word whore the in the last verse. Becuase i am not comfortable with this word but i am not able to rhyme it with some soft word. Please suggest me some soft word. Highly apprecaited The shocking score make me cry more The old lady said," the real winner are you not the whore." Susan Baquie February 21, 2018 at 3:20 PM The word " core" rhymes - feeling "cut to the core" is a way of saying you are badly hurt. I hope that helps.