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The Ravishing Rain

Drizzling, dazzling
splinters of diamond
          Shards of crystal
or  liquidized glass!
      Transparent drops
from a translucent sky. 

       Ooh, that lucid lustre:
No wonder they say,
there's something sexy about the rain
Atleast it does seem to drive
      dripping lovers insane. 

       And then as if frenzied, suddenly excited 
the drizzle converts into a heavy downpour
         as thunders bellow and thunders roar
    as rivers swell and rivers soar. 

Rain battering our rooftop
       like needless war drums
or heedless bass drums
     The heavens having opened
to announce a cloud burst
Till it's said to be raining cats and dogs
or more realistically, fishes and frogs! 

               O' God bless the nimbus
Those soaking cotton wool puffs in the sky
 Those candy floss rainclouds sailing by.

Copyright © S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri | Year Posted 2023

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Line Gauthier Date: 7/21/2025 5:04:00 AM lovely imagery ~ Login to Reply

Jessica Thompson Date: 5/13/2025 4:25:00 PM Such a very whimsical write. I quite enjoyed the fancy feast of play. Keep writing, my friend. Have a great one! Login to Reply

Ann Peck Date: 1/3/2024 3:09:00 PM This is lovely, S. Zaynab! I live in the US desert southwest so rain is magnificent! I especially love your last stanza. Take care. Login to Reply

Beryl Edmonds Date: 1/1/2024 4:03:00 PM There’s something special about ravishing rain, especially when it dances on the window pane. A lovely write… Belle Login to Reply

Linda Alice Fowler Date: 12/29/2023 8:00:00 AM Love watching and hearing the rain. Something magical about it and your words fit perfectly with the image. Very nice Zaynab! :) Login to Reply

Duke Beaufort Date: 12/29/2023 5:46:00 AM There is definite excitement in watching rain fall and hearing the accompanying musical segment. I enjoy it personally and your poem captures the feeling perfectly. Login to Reply

Jennifer Proxenos Date: 11/25/2023 8:12:00 AM Congratulations dear friend on your inclusion of your awesome poetry in Poetry Soups third Anthology - Reflections on the Important Things. Blessings, Jennifer. Login to Reply S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri Date: 12/28/2023 11:41:00 AM Warmest thanks dear.

Karen Jones Date: 9/23/2023 5:51:00 PM I too love the rain. Great poem! Login to Reply S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri Date: 10/12/2023 9:31:00 PM Warm thanks , nice to know.

Karen Croft Date: 9/2/2023 5:15:00 PM Beautifully written! Enjoyed reading Login to Reply S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri Date: 10/12/2023 9:30:00 PM Warm thanks for feedback dear,

Tom Woody Date: 8/9/2023 11:12:00 AM I see this did quite well for you. Nicely done Login to Reply S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri Date: 8/11/2023 7:31:00 AM Um it hasn't that many views. I get more reads on other international sites . Thanks for comment,

The Situation Date: 7/30/2023 4:27:00 PM They have purpose mist and monsoons. Login to Reply S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri Date: 8/11/2023 7:30:00 AM Yep everything has a purpose, thanks for your comment,

Robert Lindley Date: 7/28/2023 5:12:00 AM My friend, this is a superbly crafted poem. Imagery, flow and beauty all tops. Your great talent put to the purpose of writing excellently born poetry! Definite fav for my list. God bless. Login to Reply S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri Date: 8/11/2023 6:21:00 AM Thanks soo much for that engaging comment fine poet yourself,

M. L. Kiser Date: 6/18/2023 11:47:00 AM Another fun read, I haven't enjoyed the rain this much, since I was a kid playing in it; very nicely done. Login to Reply S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri Date: 8/11/2023 6:20:00 AM Im glad you enjoyed. Warmest thanks for great feedback,

Juliet Ligon Date: 6/10/2023 5:31:00 PM I love the energy in this and your appreciation of the rain. Beautiful descriptions, such as "splinters of diamond," "shards of crystal," and "candy floss rainclouds." Login to Reply S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri Date: 8/11/2023 6:19:00 AM Warmest thanks for the gorgeous comment,

Linda Alice Fowler Date: 6/9/2023 12:08:00 PM Evocative and explosive write Zanab. Nicely done! :) Login to Reply S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri Date: 8/11/2023 6:18:00 AM Rain bom like they say, yeahh. Warm thanks for comment,

Suzanne Delaney Date: 6/9/2023 11:51:00 AM Lovely poem with all the sound effects. Nothing like listening to rain when you are cozy and dry inside. Congrats on your POTD win, too. Thanks for pointing me your way. SuZ Login to Reply S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri Date: 8/11/2023 6:17:00 AM Warmest thanks for beautiful feedback dear,

Karen Jones Date: 6/7/2023 3:36:00 PM My favorite lines as thunders bellow and thunders roar as rivers swell and rivers soar. Your words lift off the page and perfectly paint wonderful images. Love this! Login to Reply S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri Date: 6/8/2023 8:26:00 AM I like to read of poet's favourite lines of my poem, warmest thanks for super comment

Paul Callus Date: 6/6/2023 1:29:00 AM You offer us excellent imagery accompanied by striking onomatopoeia, Zaynab. I always find rain to be inspiring; you have been doubly inspired, I must say! ~ Best regards // paul Login to Reply S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri Date: 6/6/2023 10:07:00 AM Hello poet Paul, thanks soo much for great comment, nice to know there was onomatopoeia yayy. Cheers n best wishes,

Warren Doll Date: 6/5/2023 7:56:00 AM Beautiful poem and highly descriptive Just wonderful! Well done~ Warren Login to Reply S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri Date: 6/5/2023 11:07:00 AM Hii poet Warren so nice to see you again on my poem. Cheers!

Jack Horne Date: 6/5/2023 5:09:00 AM lovely write - very pleased to see it was POTD Login to Reply S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri Date: 6/5/2023 7:13:00 AM Thanks soo much for congratz wishes and feedback,

Regina Mcintosh Date: 6/4/2023 3:18:00 AM Love this. Beautiful. God bless you and Congrats on POTD. Love, Gina Login to Reply S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri Date: 6/5/2023 3:38:00 AM Warmest thanks for lovely comment and congratz wishes, take care,

Alexis Y. Date: 6/3/2023 10:41:00 PM Hi Zaynab, I’m just coming back to say congratulations on getting the poem of day. Have a great evening:-) Alexis Login to Reply S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri Date: 6/5/2023 3:37:00 AM Warm thanks for congratz wishes, nice to see u again.

Kelly Deschler Date: 6/3/2023 6:57:00 PM Such a brilliant poem and so fun to read, just like dancing in the rain itself! Keep up the excellent writing, my friend :) Login to Reply S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri Date: 6/3/2023 9:53:00 PM Hii Kelly, long time no see, hreat to see you again on my poem. Warm , warm thanks for that dancing comment, now i feel like waltzing in the rain. :)

Darlene De Beaulieu Date: 6/3/2023 10:16:00 AM Hello S.Zaynab, I like the rainy days. I like the drizzle of raindrops. I like to walk in the drizzle. Or when it lightly rains.I like the sound of thunder and lightening. I will not be out in a thunder storm. Hugs. /Darlene\ Login to Reply Darlene De Beaulieu Date: 6/5/2023 3:10:00 PM Hello S.Zaynab, It is safer to watch a thunder storm from the inside. Warmth wishes You are welcome. Hugs./Darlene\ S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri Date: 6/3/2023 1:58:00 PM Yeah me too dont like going out in thunderstorms, just luv watching rain from windows. Warmest thanks for your refreshing comment. S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri Date: 6/3/2023 1:58:00 PM Hugs and take care dear, Darlene De Beaulieu Date: 6/3/2023 10:21:00 AM Hello S.Zaynav, Congratulations on the POTD Hugs. /Darlene\

Kim Rodrigues Date: 6/3/2023 9:44:00 AM Wrapping myself in your rainy day cloud burst… there's something sexy about the rain Atleast it does seem to drive dripping lovers insane. Congratulations on POTD! Login to Reply S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri Date: 6/3/2023 1:54:00 PM Warmest thanks for visiting with your comment as cheery as cloudburst, and your congratz wishes yayy.

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