Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart Poet Narrative

The Raindrop

Fool's gold
What should have been green
The county so dry was painful to see

Waited a whole year for this trip
Our Perseids date
The first thing we did
Was run into the lake

It was all we could do

We danced

An all out splash dance
Praying to seed the clouds with our spray

And to our dismay the rains came

We missed the shooting stars
But got our wish
And will always relish
The night we banished the drought


Doing The Raindrop

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Jeff Connelly March 15, 2019 at 1:15 PM I think that because this was from the heart is why it rings so true. I read it like a mesmerized moose caught on a car's head lights. (Do moose do that? 'round here deer do it all the time.)

Jeff Connelly March 15, 2019 at 11:34 AM How much more perfect can you get. I've read this over and over Maureen. First read in the mind; and then out loud, and then over and over as many times as I wish. It's so perfectly balanced on the page. The sonoric sounds change but all the more in a way that gives you a sound poem. Truly a piece of art. Thank you Maureen. Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart March 15, 2019 at 12:39 PM Thank you so much Jeff! This one's close to the heart, inspired by a contest prompt but not entered. It was an unforgettable day. xomo

Mark Elam November 21, 2018 at 3:32 PM Beautifully expressed Maureen. Loved it.

Craig Cornish November 19, 2018 at 2:59 PM Gifted thoughts truly poetically shared - thanks Maureen Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart November 20, 2018 at 6:48 AM Thank you Craig, that means a lot. xomo

Jan Allison November 18, 2018 at 4:14 PM the imagery made me smile on many levels Mo:-) hugs Jan xx Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart November 19, 2018 at 7:47 AM Thank you Jan, xomo :)

Carole Duet November 17, 2018 at 3:39 PM Love this! I can just see y'all dancing and the excitement of seeing it rain afterwards. Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart November 18, 2018 at 7:46 AM Thank you Carole :)) xomo

Mike Hauser November 17, 2018 at 8:31 AM So moving thinking of the fires in California Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart November 17, 2018 at 8:48 AM Eef, didn't think about that. :( xomo

Jennifer Proxenos November 17, 2018 at 6:46 AM Hi Maureen, A poem with a heart felt message. Cape Town had a severe drought which lasted a couple of years, it was becoming an absolute disaster but fortunately this year, came to a halt with sudden and frequent thunderstorms. Thorough enjoyed this write and especially your splash dance! xoxo, Jennifer. Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart November 17, 2018 at 8:12 AM I can only imagine the devastation. Thank goodness the rains came. I'm so glad this piece resonated with you :) thank you! xomo

Bernard Chan November 16, 2018 at 8:12 PM My brain hasn't yet woken up from the wine and beers last night, so it's really hard right now for me to express what I like about this poem. It has sort of a relaxed magic realism to it, if I'm making any sense. Anyway, love it. Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart November 16, 2018 at 10:28 PM ...mixing the beer & wine, ooh ouch ;) Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart November 16, 2018 at 8:34 PM That makes total sense, it was real, and it was magic. Well, it was at least magical, we don't "really" believe it was our rain dance that made it rain, we couldn't be 'that' powerful... gotta watch those hippy chicks ;) xomo!

Lawrence Sharp November 16, 2018 at 7:26 AM Another very charming poem, brief but so expressive. Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart November 16, 2018 at 7:51 AM Thank you Lawrence :) xomo

Connie Marcum Wong November 15, 2018 at 5:49 PM I love this ode to the rain Mo. We need the rain like we need the sun. Beautiful! : ) Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart November 16, 2018 at 7:46 AM We absolutely do! :) thank you! xomo

Michelle Faulkner November 15, 2018 at 1:21 PM Great playful rhythm and also evocative introspection, the two opening lines so creative! Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart November 16, 2018 at 7:45 AM Thank you Michelle! :) xomo

Heidi Sands November 15, 2018 at 11:58 AM This is great Maureen! 'Doing the Raindrop'. Love it :) Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart November 16, 2018 at 7:45 AM Thank you Heidi :))) xomo!

Chris Green November 15, 2018 at 10:57 AM This was really cool my friend. I watched a program last night on the feathered serpent god and how he was responsible for ending the drought, but I like your idea better. No human sacrifices needed to dance. :) Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart November 15, 2018 at 11:09 AM Thank you! :) it was a lot of fun, girls getaway weekend. xomo!