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The Raindrop

Fool's gold What should have been green The county so dry was painful to see Waited a whole year for this trip Our Perseids date The first thing we did Was run into the lake It was all we could do We danced An all out splash dance Praying to seed the clouds with our spray And to our dismay the rains came We missed the shooting stars But got our wish And will always relish The night we banished the drought Doing The Raindrop

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Jeff Connelly

Date: 3/15/2019 1:15:00 PM

I think that because this was from the heart is why it rings so true. I read it like a mesmerized moose caught on a car's head lights. (Do moose do that? 'round here deer do it all the time.)

Jeff Connelly

Date: 3/15/2019 11:34:00 AM

How much more perfect can you get. I've read this over and over Maureen. First read in the mind; and then out loud, and then over and over as many times as I wish. It's so perfectly balanced on the page. The sonoric sounds change but all the more in a way that gives you a sound poem. Truly a piece of art. Thank you Maureen.

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 3/15/2019 12:39:00 PM

Thank you so much Jeff! This one's close to the heart, inspired by a contest prompt but not entered. It was an unforgettable day. xomo

Mark Elam

Date: 11/21/2018 3:32:00 PM

Beautifully expressed Maureen. Loved it.

Craig Cornish

Date: 11/19/2018 2:59:00 PM

Gifted thoughts truly poetically shared - thanks Maureen

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 11/20/2018 6:48:00 AM

Thank you Craig, that means a lot. xomo

Jan Allison

Date: 11/18/2018 4:14:00 PM

the imagery made me smile on many levels Mo:-) hugs Jan xx

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 11/19/2018 7:47:00 AM

Thank you Jan, xomo :)

Carole Duet

Date: 11/17/2018 3:39:00 PM

Love this! I can just see y'all dancing and the excitement of seeing it rain afterwards.

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 11/18/2018 7:46:00 AM

Thank you Carole :)) xomo

Mike Hauser

Date: 11/17/2018 8:31:00 AM

So moving thinking of the fires in California

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 11/17/2018 8:48:00 AM

Eef, didn't think about that. :( xomo

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 11/17/2018 6:46:00 AM

Hi Maureen, A poem with a heart felt message. Cape Town had a severe drought which lasted a couple of years, it was becoming an absolute disaster but fortunately this year, came to a halt with sudden and frequent thunderstorms. Thorough enjoyed this write and especially your splash dance! xoxo, Jennifer.

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 11/17/2018 8:12:00 AM

I can only imagine the devastation. Thank goodness the rains came. I'm so glad this piece resonated with you :) thank you! xomo

Bernard Chan

Date: 11/16/2018 8:12:00 PM

My brain hasn't yet woken up from the wine and beers last night, so it's really hard right now for me to express what I like about this poem. It has sort of a relaxed magic realism to it, if I'm making any sense. Anyway, love it.

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 11/16/2018 10:28:00 PM

...mixing the beer & wine, ooh ouch ;)

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 11/16/2018 8:34:00 PM

That makes total sense, it was real, and it was magic. Well, it was at least magical, we don't "really" believe it was our rain dance that made it rain, we couldn't be 'that' powerful... gotta watch those hippy chicks ;) xomo!

Lawrence Sharp

Date: 11/16/2018 7:26:00 AM

Another very charming poem, brief but so expressive.

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 11/16/2018 7:51:00 AM

Thank you Lawrence :) xomo

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 11/15/2018 5:49:00 PM

I love this ode to the rain Mo. We need the rain like we need the sun. Beautiful! : )

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 11/16/2018 7:46:00 AM

We absolutely do! :) thank you! xomo

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 11/15/2018 1:21:00 PM

Great playful rhythm and also evocative introspection, the two opening lines so creative!

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 11/16/2018 7:45:00 AM

Thank you Michelle! :) xomo

Heidi Sands

Date: 11/15/2018 11:58:00 AM

This is great Maureen! 'Doing the Raindrop'. Love it :)

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 11/16/2018 7:45:00 AM

Thank you Heidi :))) xomo!

Chris Green

Date: 11/15/2018 10:57:00 AM

This was really cool my friend. I watched a program last night on the feathered serpent god and how he was responsible for ending the drought, but I like your idea better. No human sacrifices needed to dance. :)

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 11/15/2018 11:09:00 AM

Thank you! :) it was a lot of fun, girls getaway weekend. xomo!