The Rafters and the Watchers

Living is a carnival ride down a cataract
on a raft made of wicker and bone,
each gray boulder holding ripples of
heartache - joy- togetherness and alone.
Amidst the froth, like minded others join in 
navigating through concussion and confusion-
Along the shore are watchers-never jumping in for a sip, 
never tasting sweet or sour on their lips
walking in the same direction, toward the falls
but they're already dead without a doubt.

The water path has steepened
the rafters have been thinned
the falls are just beyond the final bend
shooting over the unknown edge, 
air born and terrified but wholly alive-
Splashing down into the silvery violence
flecks of loved ones and strangers
dead and alive tumbling in front of your eyes- 
   
Popping to the surface of tranquility pool
bloodied-broken-yet peacefully cool
the clouds whispering, "the game ended in a tie".
The watchers arrive along the fringe of the fray,
heads down, garments pristine
losing at a game they never played.

All of us liberating their last tear and hobbled faith-
the buzzards move in taking rafters and watchers for a stroll
behind the waterfalls lined with misty angels and elephant bones.


 




 
                      2/4/19

Copyright © | Year Posted 2019



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Date: 2/6/2019 8:40:00 PM
An interesting write! Congratulations on your win!
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Anthony Biaanco
Date: 2/7/2019 6:22:00 PM
Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed my poem
Date: 2/6/2019 2:25:00 PM
Just stopping back with congratulations on your big win, Anthony! Chuckled reading your comment about the caffeine. Perhaps that's what's missing for me. Best wishes, Carolyn
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Date: 2/6/2019 1:10:00 PM
I agree with Carolyn on this poem, such deep story telling and you take the reader on your personal journey.. Congratulations on your first place in the contest..
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Anthony Biaanco
Date: 2/7/2019 6:23:00 PM
Thank you for the words of encouragement. Anthony
Date: 2/4/2019 8:48:00 AM
This is deep and thought-provoking, Anthony. In areas of life where we feel confident, we jump in. In more challenging pursuits, we sometimes hesitate and watch. Your poem can pertain to many aspects of life and I guess those who only watch feel "already dead." Awesome poem!
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Anthony Biaanco
Date: 2/4/2019 9:43:00 AM
Hi C.D. I'm glad you enjoyed this poem- It came about during a caffeine rush-I still have to hone down the barbs and the bubbles. Anthony
Date: 2/4/2019 7:00:00 AM
I love the watchers! There are so many of them. "Along the shore there are the watchers never jumping in to see what it is all about they're heading in the same direction they are already dead". This truly reminds me of the TV watchers, who are living vicariously through the pretend lives of others. Guilty I am too. Hand raised. A thought provoking missive, my friend.
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Anthony Biaanco
Date: 2/4/2019 9:40:00 AM
Thanks for popping by c.k. your responses to my poems are always full of life and much appreciated. Anthony
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