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I intended to put this poem in the contest. However I see that the contest filled up fast and is now closed. I found this contest to be quite challenging.

The Prime of Life

I was in the prime of my life on paper, I had
a lot to live for.

I came from a loving family,  that were educated
I myself graduated with honors from Harvard.

I had an amazing fiance that I adored very
much,

However I was a phenomenal actress that
was very sick.

I had bipolar disorder and I hid it from everyone
including my family.

When I was high I was high, but when I was low
I was extremely low.

I thought about death every second and hour
of day.

I couldn't shake it , did I want to die?

Of course not but I felt like I had no choice
It was something that I had to do.

I planned the whole thing, I even picked
out my theme music on that melancholy 
day.

I craved death and I was thirsty for it,

I wanted my death to remembered as
something beautiful.

Boy was I in for a rude awakening and a
big dose of reality.

When my loving man found my lifeless
body he wailed and convulsed,

He caused me to see that love does
not die.

But I didn't plan what he did next

He went and got the gun we had for 
protection and took his own life.

I replay that scene over and over in my 
head.

For I am stuck in between life and death,

It is pure hell and it is torture and far 
worse than it was when I was alive.

Inspired by the “Death” contest



5-17-18
Copyright © | Year Posted 2018


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Date: 9/1/2018 10:53:00 AM
Such a dark beauty of a poem, Alexis. You really outdid your already stylish pen self w/this heart-wrenching, sad romantic tale. Loved it tho'. Such a creative free-flow poem. Aurora bright write. Love and joy always.
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Date: 6/10/2018 6:11:00 PM
Hello Alex, oh my goodness! Your loving man shocked me, to do something like that. Wow! It would shock me as well. What a horrible thing to live through. have a nice evening my friend.
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Date: 6/5/2018 8:23:00 PM
Hello Alexis, Tough. Despite what we show to the outside world we all have inner demons that haunt and torment us. Excellent poem and thanks for sharing this. Oliver
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Date: 5/30/2018 5:48:00 AM
This poem had me from the opening line...WOW! So powerfully written. Too bad you couldn't enter it into the contest. It would have done well. Hugs, dear.
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Date: 5/27/2018 4:38:00 PM
Geeze! That will make you think!!! Compelling and most creative piece. I hope it's not true cause I enjoyed it. :)
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Date: 5/26/2018 9:07:00 AM
What a creative write Alexis. You had me from start to finish with the gripping details. Truly enjoyed....Maria xxx
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Date: 5/26/2018 8:36:00 AM
Wowzer, this is truly impressive story telling. To bad it couldn’t be entered. I’m sure it would have done well.
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Date: 5/26/2018 2:46:00 AM
oh my gosh, it feels so real. What a tragic tale you wove. Sorry you missed the contest.
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Date: 5/23/2018 12:47:00 PM
You write with so much emotion, it is like a real life situation... Hope you are well..
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Date: 5/22/2018 8:28:00 PM
A very gripping, sad, well written write Alexis; would have been a great one for the contest!~Che :)
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Date: 5/22/2018 7:05:00 PM
sad but strong one, i say i don't know if there's hope, but i hope for hope. that can keep us all carrying on and not giving up. my life has been quite bittersweet too. focus on the sweetness. have a good summer. from daniel schack
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Date: 5/22/2018 1:35:00 PM
Fortunately a fiction otherwise would be too tragic for human standards! So powerfully written, so convincing and so poetic dear, Alexis! Bravo!
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Date: 5/21/2018 10:24:00 AM
VERY, VERY CREATIVE WRITING MY FRIEND. I was captivated from start to brilliant finish. A fav..
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Date: 5/21/2018 10:23:00 AM
VERY, VERY CREATIVE WRITING MY FRIEND. I was captivated from start to brilliant finish. A fav..
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Date: 5/20/2018 9:04:00 PM
Wow, Alexis, this was such a gripping story, i found it difficult to read. You write emotion well. John
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Date: 5/18/2018 11:40:00 PM
Your clever pen held me captive to the end. And what an ending it was. Well done, Alexis!
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Date: 5/18/2018 1:03:00 AM
A tragic well written story Alexis, sometimes we have to count our blessings in life for sure. Tom.
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Date: 5/17/2018 9:04:00 PM
A powerful and sad tale Alexis..An all too real tragedy..
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Date: 5/17/2018 3:33:00 PM
what a sad sad story which could be oh so true - I wasn't expecting the twist at the end.:-( hugs jan xx
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Date: 5/17/2018 3:22:00 PM
WOW! Quite a story you wrote Alexis...sad , yet powerful in depicting what sickness can do to people. I didn't foresee that ending. Best for a win!
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