The Poet and His New Discerning Maid

The poet was in love; as was his wont, he took his lovely lady to the dell, a place of solitude, his favorite haunt, where two could go. . . and this is what befell: With images of pleasure in his mind, he led the fresh and beautiful young maid through nature’s Eden. . . Soon they were reclined upon a blanket in a secret glade. the murmur of a stream, the trill of birds accompanied him as he then intoned his well-rehearsed and flowery sweet words when unexpectedly, the maiden groaned. . . “Please cut this short. Your jumbled verse is stale, and tell me in that basket there’s some ale!” Feb. 24, 2014 for the Angel of Odd Contest.
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Babcock Avatar
May 14, 2014 at 10:48 PM
Here I thought that is was going somewhere else. lol A silly tale of a would be romance. love phyl
Davis Avatar
May 11, 2014 at 12:58 PM
Andrea This is both humorous and interesting at the same time. A charming and silly tale that captivates the reader. Thank you for the great and silly comment on my Men and puppies poem. Hugs
A  Avatar
March 15, 2014 at 10:28 AM
Another nice win Andrea.... SKAT
Kendrick Avatar
March 14, 2014 at 1:18 PM
Ahh!! Great quality poetry!! Way to go with this win..Congrats..Sara
Jerden Avatar
March 10, 2014 at 3:40 PM
Never date another poet, eh? (Especially one better than you.) Congratulations! I liked this a lot.
Flach Avatar
March 10, 2014 at 12:29 PM
Haha. Just cut to the chase, girl!! And let's get drunk!! Yes, us poets can sometimes let our words interfere with what it is we are writing about. Good job! Fun and funny and, definitely, ODD! Joe
Stephens Avatar
March 10, 2014 at 5:24 AM
Hi Andrea, You are doubly gifted to incorporate both visual images of olden days and a funny delightful twist ending. Bravo! an enjoyable read Congrats Regards Theresa xx
Harper Avatar
March 9, 2014 at 5:05 PM
lol, Andrea, what a charming date she had, what a poet! Congratulations on your win, enjoyed reading it.
May Avatar
March 5, 2014 at 4:30 PM
Lol...Very nice write ...I enjoyed the read....hugs
Bordner Avatar
March 2, 2014 at 1:25 PM
Yeah, Andrea sometimes hunger has a short attention span, how bout sum honey whiskey and fleshy vocab. Cool write. J.A.B.
Horne Avatar
March 2, 2014 at 10:30 AM
LOL, great last lines and a beautiful sonnet
Loveless Avatar
March 1, 2014 at 10:59 AM
This made me laugh :) Beautifully written too my dear
Maverick Avatar
March 1, 2014 at 2:13 AM
Well isn't life surprising Andrea..' L O L next you'll e telling us she had wicked way with the poor guy.! hope this goes well in the latest contest, the egg-writes.' yes they are a sort of result of seeing the different nature of peoples interaction here on soup hope you can find something in them maybe of your own experience's take care Joe..
Austin Avatar
February 28, 2014 at 9:18 AM
I;ll tell ya one thing - this guy was no Browning, Romeo either. Love his womanly tale. Love, daver
Gasun Avatar
February 28, 2014 at 7:33 AM
;)))) This is another beautiful poem of yours my dear friend Andrea. I love it and so enjoyed reading tonight. Thank you so much for sharing and the smiles. Biggest hugs! love lots always & forever, Leonora
Sirak Avatar
February 28, 2014 at 7:26 AM
I love the twist of innocent lass going from being manipulated to being in control.
Horne Avatar
February 27, 2014 at 2:23 PM
LOL, had a chuckle here. Will catch up with your poems, my friend - I have sooo much catching up to do
Hunter Avatar
February 26, 2014 at 1:10 PM
haha...yeah, he shoulda got her drunk first....ooops!...did I say that?
Lamoureux Avatar
February 26, 2014 at 8:41 AM
Ha ha, this feels a bit like a limerick.
Devnath  Avatar
February 26, 2014 at 8:41 AM
Sweet smiling words accompanied with hahaha...... Is it joke or reality? Loved the sonnet of dream of lovers. Good luck in the contest. Loved always, bl
Hamilton Avatar
February 26, 2014 at 7:02 AM
what a fantastic pen Andrea I love the ending twist hugs
Johnson Avatar
February 25, 2014 at 9:04 PM
Cut the chatter and pass me a beer. :):):) I don't know what the hell you think we're doin' here. Gosh, I guess it's time for the poet to get a sense of humor. :) A very entertaining inspirational take from the story. Enjoyed! Good luck in the contest. Peace. :)
Bauer Avatar
February 25, 2014 at 8:55 PM
brilliant and hilarious! you really nailed this one, andrea!
Anish Avatar
February 25, 2014 at 6:27 PM
You can't please everyone with your verse. Do you know the song by Rick Nelson which goes"You can't please everyone so you've got to please yourself?" Good luck in the contest! Peace & Love Matthew Anish
Watson Avatar
February 25, 2014 at 3:41 PM
Let me take you to the Yorkshire Dales, Share a glass or two of our finest ale . Then whisper sweet words that never fail. My lady of Shalott , lol Loved it as usual princess.
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