The Poet and His New Discerning Maid

The poet was in love; as was his wont, he took his lovely lady to the dell, a place of solitude, his favorite haunt, where two could go. . . and this is what befell: With images of pleasure in his mind, he led the fresh and beautiful young maid through nature’s Eden. . . Soon they were reclined upon a blanket in a secret glade. the murmur of a stream, the trill of birds accompanied him as he then intoned his well-rehearsed and flowery sweet words when unexpectedly, the maiden groaned. . . “Please cut this short. Your jumbled verse is stale, and tell me in that basket there’s some ale!” Feb. 24, 2014 for the Angel of Odd Contest.

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Date: 5/14/2014 10:48:00 PM
Here I thought that is was going somewhere else. lol A silly tale of a would be romance. love phyl
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Date: 5/11/2014 12:58:00 PM
Andrea This is both humorous and interesting at the same time. A charming and silly tale that captivates the reader. Thank you for the great and silly comment on my Men and puppies poem. Hugs
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Date: 3/15/2014 10:28:00 AM
Another nice win Andrea.... SKAT
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Date: 3/14/2014 1:18:00 PM
Ahh!! Great quality poetry!! Way to go with this win..Congrats..Sara
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Date: 3/10/2014 3:40:00 PM
Never date another poet, eh? (Especially one better than you.) Congratulations! I liked this a lot.
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Date: 3/10/2014 12:29:00 PM
Haha. Just cut to the chase, girl!! And let's get drunk!! Yes, us poets can sometimes let our words interfere with what it is we are writing about. Good job! Fun and funny and, definitely, ODD! Joe
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Date: 3/10/2014 5:24:00 AM
Hi Andrea, You are doubly gifted to incorporate both visual images of olden days and a funny delightful twist ending. Bravo! an enjoyable read Congrats Regards Theresa xx
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Date: 3/9/2014 5:05:00 PM
lol, Andrea, what a charming date she had, what a poet! Congratulations on your win, enjoyed reading it.
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Date: 3/5/2014 4:30:00 PM
Lol...Very nice write ...I enjoyed the read....hugs
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Date: 3/2/2014 1:25:00 PM
Yeah, Andrea sometimes hunger has a short attention span, how bout sum honey whiskey and fleshy vocab. Cool write. J.A.B.
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Date: 3/2/2014 10:30:00 AM
LOL, great last lines and a beautiful sonnet
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Date: 3/1/2014 10:59:00 AM
This made me laugh :) Beautifully written too my dear
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Date: 3/1/2014 2:13:00 AM
Well isn't life surprising Andrea..' L O L next you'll e telling us she had wicked way with the poor guy.! hope this goes well in the latest contest, the egg-writes.' yes they are a sort of result of seeing the different nature of peoples interaction here on soup hope you can find something in them maybe of your own experience's take care Joe..
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Date: 2/28/2014 9:18:00 AM
I;ll tell ya one thing - this guy was no Browning, Romeo either. Love his womanly tale. Love, daver
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Date: 2/28/2014 7:33:00 AM
;)))) This is another beautiful poem of yours my dear friend Andrea. I love it and so enjoyed reading tonight. Thank you so much for sharing and the smiles. Biggest hugs! love lots always & forever, Leonora
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Date: 2/28/2014 7:26:00 AM
I love the twist of innocent lass going from being manipulated to being in control.
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Date: 2/27/2014 2:23:00 PM
LOL, had a chuckle here. Will catch up with your poems, my friend - I have sooo much catching up to do
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Date: 2/26/2014 1:10:00 PM
haha...yeah, he shoulda got her drunk first....ooops!...did I say that?
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Date: 2/26/2014 8:41:00 AM
Sweet smiling words accompanied with hahaha...... Is it joke or reality? Loved the sonnet of dream of lovers. Good luck in the contest. Loved always, bl
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Date: 2/26/2014 8:41:00 AM
Ha ha, this feels a bit like a limerick.
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Date: 2/26/2014 7:02:00 AM
what a fantastic pen Andrea I love the ending twist hugs
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Date: 2/25/2014 9:04:00 PM
Cut the chatter and pass me a beer. :):):) I don't know what the hell you think we're doin' here. Gosh, I guess it's time for the poet to get a sense of humor. :) A very entertaining inspirational take from the story. Enjoyed! Good luck in the contest. Peace. :)
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Date: 2/25/2014 8:55:00 PM
brilliant and hilarious! you really nailed this one, andrea!
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Date: 2/25/2014 6:27:00 PM
You can't please everyone with your verse. Do you know the song by Rick Nelson which goes"You can't please everyone so you've got to please yourself?" Good luck in the contest! Peace & Love Matthew Anish
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Date: 2/25/2014 3:41:00 PM
Let me take you to the Yorkshire Dales, Share a glass or two of our finest ale . Then whisper sweet words that never fail. My lady of Shalott , lol Loved it as usual princess.
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