The Poem

it's the rarefied feelings where you linger in depths of mind becoming the chirography of my eternal soul in a climax of thoughts you become my poem and i the poet i lay you down on sheets of white in a fingered touch like a poet's pen play with you amidst words through confines of darkness as they erupt in the rise and fall of winded breaths leaving me lusting for more than metaphorical writes of poetry

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Caren Krutsinger

Date: 9/10/2019 3:34:00 AM

"i lay you down on sheets of white in a fingered touch like a poet's pen" - this is a sexy poem about writing! Wow! Great job!

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/10/2019 5:37:00 AM

Thank you so much Caren your comments were a bright spot to early morning dimness :) hugs

Brenda Chiri

Date: 9/9/2019 8:36:00 PM

Oh wow girl! Phew this was magnificent! Such gorgeous words and put together to make anyone catch their breath! WOW!;)

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/10/2019 5:36:00 AM

Thank you. This one was brewing inside me a few days :) hugs

Chris Green

Date: 9/9/2019 7:11:00 AM

Sigh! A poem that has feelings and emotions of it's own, one that tempts and teases, one that is soft and alluring, one that makes the reader breathless, one that creates dreams and one that speaks in a whispered tone for only the poem to hear. This was amazing, such a beautiful piece of writing.

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/9/2019 11:39:00 AM

wow... thank you for such a wonderful comment upon my page this morning...it made me smile :) hugs

CayCay Jennings

Date: 9/8/2019 3:04:00 PM

This wows me, beginning with my love for blank paper and its potential and my own romantic fantasy play this resonates with me. It is both erotic in intensity and innocent in truth to captivate a reader. Profound, too. Don't ever put that pen down! Poetry hugs ... CayCay

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/9/2019 5:00:00 AM

Thank you my friend... sometimes the pen rests for a little bit of time but I always find my canvas again :) hugs

John Hamilton

Date: 9/8/2019 2:37:00 PM

This is magnificent writing Sandy, no wonder everyone is raving about it, a seductive feel to writing poetry, love the playful imagery lay you down on sheets of white. Marvelous!!

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/9/2019 4:59:00 AM

Thank you my friend, it took a couple days to come forth... hugs :)

Silent One

Date: 9/8/2019 10:54:00 AM

Lusting for more than metaphorical writes of poetry... Wow great poem

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/8/2019 11:10:00 AM

thank you...i wasn't sure if i liked this after i finished it, seemed to be one of those poems that haunted the muse for days... hugs :)

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 9/8/2019 10:03:00 AM

A sensuous poem about writing a poem - clever. Hugs, jennifer.

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/8/2019 11:11:00 AM

Thank you Jen, it was one of those poems that kept trying to be written :) hugs

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 9/8/2019 1:20:00 AM

Enchantment for a poet's soul Sandra! I loved this poem that speaks to the poet in all of us! : ) xxoo

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/8/2019 11:13:00 AM

Thank you my friend...i wasn't sure if i liked it, but we are often our own worst critics :) hugs

Gershon Wolf

Date: 9/7/2019 10:29:00 PM

A poet's prescient prayer and payment here! Two thumbs up, Sandra! :) gw

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/8/2019 11:13:00 AM

Thank you Gershon...I am feeling better about this piece with wonderful comments such as yours :) hugs

David Mchattie

Date: 9/7/2019 5:03:00 PM

Well put. The creative dance we all do is time well spent. Have a great day my friend.

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/8/2019 11:14:00 AM

Thank you David, for your lovely comment and visit :) hugs

Vijay Pandit

Date: 9/7/2019 4:20:00 PM

WOW--becoming the chirography of my eternal soul..you become my poem and i the poet..your words are poetry, Sandy.

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/7/2019 4:26:00 PM

Thank you my friend. Wasn’t sure if I liked this one. Been trying to write it for a couple days. Kept saving it and going back to it. Your words made me feel better :) hugs