The Pitch

THE PITCH why I ask did she do that i console myself sun got in her eyes trying to remember is it mary lou or carrie never mind whichever just gave me the finger this english class so big yet so small sitting back of that long shiny black hair all i said was could i borrow a piece of paper then she blew tossed the wet rag over her shoulder that awful night I asked her out no reply just a face that belongs on rushmore Dave Austin

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Shirley Hudson

Date: 10/19/2021 5:38:00 PM

Oh those days of young love and what might have been. Your poem brought back so many memories bringing a smile to my face. Remembering that young girl that did say yes taking me back to a time I want to relive again.

James Peranteau

Date: 1/19/2015 9:51:00 PM

Now, I could ask....was she pretty, if the answer was yes, I would agree for a prettier face on Rushmore ! *smiles* Love the write my poetic friend ! .....headed for #2

Joe Maverick

Date: 1/19/2015 12:21:00 PM

Hello Daver, I sent you mail a bit back..' (hope you are good there.)

Monterey Sirak

Date: 1/19/2015 9:00:00 AM

Wow! I love these especially the first one. I well remember days when I made up explanations to console myself.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/18/2015 4:53:00 PM

Hey, Daver. May the sun be grinning down on your very soon!!

Skat A

Date: 1/17/2015 9:45:00 PM

I'm getting old Daver, however, that will never change my love for poetry. And I sure love this write, the stare and the placement you gave her. Love ~SKAT~

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/15/2015 10:45:00 PM

oh wow, these are so cool to read. My favorites are the third one and the last one. A fave for Rushmore. SO interesting!!!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/15/2015 10:44:00 PM

hey, did you have a warm December too, my friend? Let me read this poem now.

Daver Austin
Date: 1/16/2015 11:41:00 AM

December was wonderful. January? BUMMER! Love, daver

Jan Allison

Date: 1/14/2015 5:53:00 AM

humourous but tinged with sadness Daver:-) hugs Jan xx

Jan Allison
Date: 1/14/2015 3:32:00 PM

Maybe its just my 'British' sense of humour lol:-) Hugs Jan xx

Daver Austin
Date: 1/14/2015 3:30:00 PM

Are you kidding? These are for humor. I've never had enough courage to make a pitch. Love, daver

Michelle Mac Donald

Date: 1/13/2015 6:12:00 PM

LOL! Oh, that would be a cold, hard, granite face, Daver! Asked her out to return her 'wet rag'? Might have been a gesture of chivalry on your part. An amusing write! Keep well, love, Mikki

Daver Austin
Date: 1/14/2015 3:33:00 PM

These are just for fun. I was so handsome, no girl would ever turn me down. Hardy harr, harr. Love, daver

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 1/13/2015 3:15:00 PM

Oh Daver, this is funny and tragic at the same time. Young feelings can be so intense. Did she really blow and throw? BG

Daver Austin
Date: 1/14/2015 3:35:00 PM

If a girl had blown and thrown I'd have dipped her curls in the ink well. These are for laughs only. Love, daver

Emile Pinet

Date: 1/13/2015 2:08:00 PM

The author slowly opens his heart to the reality confronting him and shuns his naivety and wants relief from his hurt. Emile.

Daver Austin
Date: 1/14/2015 3:37:00 PM

I was a fat kid and could have cried had any of this happened, but I was a fat kid with a good humor. I'd have laughed. Love, daver