Get Your Premium Membership

The Phoenix Has Died

The phoenix has died I can see that now I can see it in your eyes. Those bright blue, youthful eyes once so hopeful, now restless...unfocused. Once you were a phoenix on the precipice of flight with the promise of love and life oh, how I yearn to see that life in you again! She pulled you back, yanked you strangled you with her apron strings hung you, squeezed the life out of you clingy, whining a cesspool of anxieties belched out and incessant. Too caring, too conscientious to resist you conceded, and the promptings the promptings of obligation overwhelmed. So you froze fast in a nightmare a nightmare of anxieties trapped sucked into a black hole believed the lies kept the security blanket and sank in the quicksands of stagnation. The phoenix's wings were clipped no longer a phoenix... no but a goldfish in a glass bowl. Now you languish in anonimity never to make your mark mugged by a mother's insecurities. The phoenix has died. Written on 2/11/2017

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018




Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem.

Please Login to post a comment

Date: 3/22/2018 5:50:00 PM
Wow! Such a deep and powerful poem Laura. The emotional sadness is expressed so elegantly and your last four lines pack quite a literary punch for a sorrowful yet stunning ending. A sadly beautiful and soulful poem. Congratulations on your superb win! Warmest wishes. ~Susan
Login to Reply
Date: 3/22/2018 12:05:00 PM
Congratulations on your well deserved win Laura with your beautifully written yet sad poem. :)
Login to Reply
Date: 3/22/2018 6:06:00 AM
such depth Laura! I loved this so much, it really made me think deeply about things .thank you and congratulations! :)-luloo
Login to Reply
Leiser Avatar
Laura Leiser
Date: 3/22/2018 11:26:00 AM
Thank you, Laura Loo, for my placement in your contest! Because this is true, and these are authentic emotions of a real situation, this poem really spilled out of my soul when I wrote it...glad it shows.
Date: 2/13/2018 11:30:00 PM
Heavy but gutsy. The line "you froze fast in a nightmare" is intriguing.
Login to Reply
Date: 2/12/2018 6:10:00 AM
I think this happens in so many people, but it has and needs to be rekindled.. i hope you can find a way to help him reignite his flame and rise from the ashes.. Great poem Laura..
Login to Reply
Leiser Avatar
Laura Leiser
Date: 2/15/2018 5:47:00 PM
Thanks so much, Sllent! I'm glad you liked this one :)
Date: 2/12/2018 3:27:00 AM
- A terrible sad story your poem tells, Laura - There are many who experience this ... never get the chance to use his own wings - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Login to Reply
Date: 2/11/2018 8:55:00 PM
This poem is on fire! Fantastic.
Login to Reply
Mcgreavy Avatar
Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/11/2018 10:16:00 PM
You have expressed with gripping eloquence Laura. It's hard to stand by and watch damage in progress. hugs
Leiser Avatar
Laura Leiser
Date: 2/11/2018 10:00:00 PM
Thank you, Maureen. I grieve, just grieve, for the life of this young man. He is a neighbor of mine that still lives at home at 33 yr. of age...I have known him since 24yr. old...he helped take care of our dogs when we were gone. I've seen the descent...it kills me :(
Date: 2/11/2018 8:52:00 PM
A very passionate depiction of hope and ambition held back and deprived. Quite touching discourse of how a parent can affect a life for ever. Well written, Laura.
Login to Reply
Leiser Avatar
Laura Leiser
Date: 2/11/2018 10:02:00 PM
Thank you, Vijay. I wish this were fiction, but no. This young man needs to fly away from home...and soon. It's been years...I grieve for his future if he doesn't go.

Book: Shattered Sighs