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The Perfect Storm

A storm is brewing...

If you listen closely
Hold your breath
Close your eyes
Cock your head
And…really listen,
You’ll hear it –
You’ll hear 
the deafening sound of silence!
There’s a reign of hush
all over the landscape
engulfed in deep shadows,
And your heart starts pounding
You get a feeling of foreboding,
There is no wind
No rustling of the leaves,
You look up
The sky hanging heavy and laden,
Thick rolling clouds
gray and pregnant with moisture
Bursting at the seams—
There’s this state of brooding disquietude.

Then you hear a slight rustle,
Suddenly you look up in time
to see a leaf quiver,
But again, a breath-taking silence…
And then, in the gathering gloom,
A blinding lightning,
Like someone just flashed
a giant camera in your face!
For a split second you see
all the trees standing dark
and hunched over like chained slaves,
Standing in a row
tired, beat and hopeless 
of what’s to come next.

The earth beneath your feet
tremble under an ear-splitting,
earth-shattering clap of thunder
rumbling like a distant cannon fire.

And then like a thousand Niagaras
The rain starts bearing down
with jihadi fervor
water-logging the earth,
Like the heavens bursting into tears,
Like the ocean caught up in a spasm;

Then you understand, you feel,
In every pore of your skin,
The awesome fury of Nature.


~03/25/16
~A Storm is Brewing contest by Kelly Deschler

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016




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Date: 5/18/2016 7:12:00 AM
Greetings Abdul. Congrats for your placement in the contest!! ;-)
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Date: 5/17/2016 1:53:00 AM
Wow Abdul, Your entry is one of my favorites because of your fantastic imagery, and you seem to have first hand knowledge of what it is like being near a storm like this! It makes your hair stand up and chills of fear run through your body. Contd.
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Abdul Malik
Date: 5/18/2016 9:51:00 AM
Wow Connie, I appreciate your comment very much. You explained my poem better than I would have. Thanks.
Date: 5/17/2016 1:53:00 AM
Contd....You convey this well with great lines like: "For a split second you see all the trees standing dark and hunched over like chained slaves, Standing in a row tired, beat and hopeless of what’s to come next." This would have been at the top for me. Still a really great placement for this contest and I congratulate you my friend! #7 ; )
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Date: 5/16/2016 10:19:00 AM
Can feel the storm,congratulation!
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Date: 5/15/2016 11:07:00 PM
Congratulations Abdul well deserved honors my friend...
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Abdul Malik
Date: 5/16/2016 9:22:00 AM
Thanks Charlie.
Date: 5/15/2016 10:45:00 PM
Congratulations Abdul on the placement of the contest
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Abdul Malik
Date: 5/16/2016 9:22:00 AM
Thanks Nayda.
Date: 5/15/2016 9:28:00 PM
You give the reader the experience of being there by using all of their senses as they read this poem... I like that very much! Nicely done, Abdul. Congrats on a win!
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Abdul Malik
Date: 5/16/2016 9:21:00 AM
Thanks Kelly, for being there when the storm hit me!
Date: 4/16/2016 8:11:00 PM
Wow! Abdul what an awesome description of natures fury loved the rain bearing down with jihadi fervor. One suggestion I think you're missing an s after heart start- earth tremble- rain start would sound more grammatically correct, flow better. But a wonderful piece of poetry. a 7 for me
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Abdul Malik
Date: 4/16/2016 10:18:00 PM
Roger that. Thanks. Appreciate your comment.

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