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The Play Bill falls from my sweaty palm to the floor September 8, 2001 and I'm still alive; it's a miracle. Pushing my bifocals back up my nose, I frown. I can't remember the play at all? A cell phone rings. I stumble toward the closed doors. Bending over, I'm approached from the wing and tackled. My heel slip-rolls on a broken pencil; I'm down. What did you do you bastard, he bawls. the curtains part revealing a pool of blood: a chord is struck My arm's wrenched to my back the pain's hard to ignore. Arms back, I feel cold metal, he puts on shackles From the outside, there's a shout; a cop's siren sounds; he lifts and shoves me to the wall.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 11/4/2014 9:51:00 AM
Your intrigue is priceless and unique. Staying on the edge of my seat for some few seconds is what this great piece has done to me. Thanks for the share
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Date: 11/3/2014 6:37:00 PM
Excellent Debbie. Turning this into a mystery! Well you certainly have my attention. Congratulations on your win.
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Date: 11/3/2014 10:39:00 AM
Wow Debbie that's a brilliant masterpiece! Congrats on huge win!
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Date: 11/3/2014 4:59:00 AM
I had no idea what this was about, until I read the comments below. So, this is the introduction to something? It is a good start and captures our attention! Arrested at a play, pool of blood but on the stage... someone who expected to be dead three days before 9/11, who wears bifocals... and he must have done something horrible (or cops THINK he has done something) to be called a bastard by them. Then of course the broken pencil... a writerly thing... what you got up your sleeve?
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Date: 11/2/2014 6:56:00 PM
Great write, Debbie...I am waiting for the sequel. Congratulations.
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Date: 11/2/2014 8:39:00 AM
Love your unconventional take on this Debbie...not sure how i'm tackling part II yet...thanks for the comment on mine as well
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Date: 11/2/2014 8:06:00 AM
Congratulations Debbie on this refreshing approach, very creative indeed, good luck on the next round of this contest.
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Date: 11/1/2014 6:50:00 PM
Congrats on your win Debbie....
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Date: 11/1/2014 4:32:00 PM
Read your response. I guess you want to write your entries like a serial, all part of a consistent theme, then. That is certainly an original approach. It will be interesting to see how you work in the next set of ingredients for sure.
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Date: 11/1/2014 4:06:00 PM
A mystery inside a riddle wrapped in an enigma... I'm clueless. So many ways to interpret this one. Real, or part of the play? Actor or assassin? Congratulations, Debbie!
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Date: 11/1/2014 4:21:00 PM
well I figured Craig wants us to keep going so I had to have plenty of room to GO! Thanks Roy
Date: 11/1/2014 2:48:00 PM
This is nice Debbie,can you just imagine how dangerous tiny pencil can be! Congrats.
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Date: 11/1/2014 1:26:00 PM
very descriptive write Debbie many congrats on your win:-) Hugs jan xx
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Date: 10/21/2014 4:14:00 PM
wow, Debs, very descriptively put! the party is indeed over!!!
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Date: 10/20/2014 4:12:00 PM
Plays we like can be lots of fun, Debbie .enjoyed yours! ;) Hugs! xxx D.
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