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Published: 3rd August 2021

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This poem was placed 1st in Line Gauthier's 'Bitesize Poem No. 16' Poetry Contest.


outside this stupa* where I stand upon this earth I sense a land where no malevolent cruel wind blows and stillness reigns where water flows where zeal on fire creates a space to live and love the human race. * stupa: A Buddhist commemorative monument usually housing sacred relics associated with the Buddha or other saintly persons.

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Date: 8/18/2021 1:02:00 AM
So beautiful and soothing to the mind Gary Radice... Hearty congrats on your win.. God bless... ~ Ani
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Date: 8/18/2021 1:29:00 AM
Thank you Anitha. I think the world needs more soothing right now. Cheers - Gary
Date: 8/11/2021 1:40:00 PM
A moving, endearing 6 lines. Congratulations, Gary! A most enjoyable read. Be well. Brian
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Date: 8/12/2021 12:54:00 AM
Hi Brian! Thank you for your visit, read and great comments. It's funny, when I wrote this I put it down to being one of those poems that would get quickly lost somewhere in the PS void never to be read or seen again so all the comments have been a real bonus. Cheers - Gary
Date: 8/10/2021 9:18:00 PM
Very calming and yet intense poem....Congrats on your top win Gary :)
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Date: 8/11/2021 12:57:00 AM
Hi Carol. Thank you for your visit and kind comments. It was a nice surprise finding out my top win. Cheers - Gary
Date: 8/10/2021 7:24:00 PM
A peaceful, calming vision with excellent rhyme and flow! Congrats on your 1st place win, Gary! Blessings, Kim M
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Date: 8/11/2021 12:54:00 AM
Thank you for your very kind comments Kim. Cheers - Gary
Date: 8/10/2021 9:09:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. What a creative Rhyme write. Few words with much said. Love your line "to live and love the human race." We can dream. Have a blessed day with your win...............
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Date: 8/10/2021 10:09:00 AM
Paula, thanks so much. Agreed, we can dream. You have a great day too. Cheers - Gary
Date: 8/10/2021 12:32:00 AM
You certainly were inspired to write this wondrous poetry. Must seek out my own 'stupa' and hopefully create something as good as this. A deserve winner in the contest, Gary.
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Date: 8/10/2021 2:05:00 AM
Thanks Harry. I can't tell you how many times I made amendments to this poem and nearly decided not to publish it at all. I just worry for the world at the moment and am deeply disturbed by some of its political leaders. Thanks for reading. Cheers - Gary
Date: 8/9/2021 6:50:00 PM
vision of a heavenly place. Well-written brevity, congratulations on a fine write and placement in the contest.
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Date: 8/10/2021 2:06:00 AM
Hi Reason! Yes, a heavenly place indeed. Thanks for your visit, read and lovely comments. Cheers - Gary
Date: 8/9/2021 12:59:00 PM
I feel a sense of calm with your imagery , congrats on your win gary:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 8/9/2021 2:37:00 PM
Thank you Jan. It was a lovely surprise. Cheers - Gary
Date: 8/9/2021 10:12:00 AM
Back with top congrats, Well deserved too, cheers David
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Date: 8/9/2021 12:51:00 PM
Thanks again David. I'm glad you like it. It was one of those poems that I sometimes write and then have doubts about just before I publish. I made the right decision in this case. I need to catch up on reading a few Soupers' poems as I'm lagging behind a bit. Read you soon. Cheers - Gary
Date: 8/9/2021 1:38:00 AM
This is excellent, Gary, congratulations on top win:)
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Date: 8/9/2021 3:51:00 AM
Thank you Jo for your kind and encouraging comments. Much appreciated. Cheers - Gary
Date: 8/7/2021 2:07:00 AM
Well am I the big numpty? I had no idea what a Stupa is and even briefly wondered if all my life I’ve spelt stupour/ stupor wrong. My first couple of reads were with that in mind and I had visions ranging from Japanese gardens to the inside of God’s head - yes, really! Then I looked up Stupa.... aha!. Smashing write Gary. Love it. Terry - the newly learned one.
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Date: 8/7/2021 2:13:00 AM
Terry, just a few minutes ago I was wondering whether to change the spelling of stupa to stupour and have it written in italics or enclosed with quotation marks as a play on the word stupa...if you get my drift?? :) I believe a stupa has a hemispherical roof and you can't enter..a Pagoda is, well, a pagoda and you can enter it but, yes, I think I got away with using the word as I read somewhere that there is no clear distinction between the two...
Date: 8/6/2021 12:22:00 PM
Your a kind soul Gary, because you write these gentle poems with sincerity, and it’s no harm being able to look on the bright side of life, the alternative is just darkness, listen to me I can talk lol, cheers David
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Date: 8/6/2021 1:52:00 PM
Don’t do it there’s no going back, keep focused on what you do well, the main thing is that your not deluded you know it exists, bbc news today the mother who left her child home alone, disturbing stuff indeed.
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Gary Radice
Date: 8/6/2021 12:41:00 PM
You've made me think now David..yes..I don't write many dark poems do I? ..I think the darkest I've written are the Wonderland series of poems here at The Soup....but other than that...no..not many at all. You do realise what you've done now don't you? :) Cheers - Gary
Date: 8/5/2021 2:22:00 PM
Sounds like utopia , heaven spring to mind Gary. All for 1 and 1 for all
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Date: 8/6/2021 2:07:00 AM
I wish there was such a place that I describe. Cheers - Gary
Date: 8/3/2021 2:43:00 PM
Gary, simply brilliant. You have said so much in this small poem. Best~ Warren
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Date: 8/3/2021 3:02:00 PM
Thanks Warren! I managed to include the five elements from Chinese philosophy of earth, wind, water, fire and space which is what I set out to do. I'm really glad you like the poem. Cheers - Gary
Date: 8/3/2021 12:56:00 PM
You put an image of a Buddhist monk in my head Gary, looking out on the landscape in deep reflection and at peace with himself and all mankind. Tom
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Date: 8/3/2021 1:20:00 PM
Thanks Tom. After the sense of foreboding I created in my last poem I thought an element of tranquillity and calm was called for. :) Cheers - Gary
Date: 8/3/2021 12:29:00 PM
Beautiful short and sweet rhyme.
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Date: 8/3/2021 12:41:00 PM
Thank you Christuraj. For some strange reason I find the shorter poems take me longer to write than the longer poems. :) Cheers - Gary