The Package

The package lay against the ground
Earthy in tones, neutral nothing to be desired
Hundreds walked by without as much as a glance
Until one slim muscular young man took notice
His creamy chocolate eyes could not look away from this simple package

Vanilla crème filled doughnuts were always his simple joy
Today his tender care brought a spark to this earthy package
The inside of the package was hidden behind a modest front
His love nurtured the inner spirit until....
A grand transformation produced his lovely vision.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011



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Date: 1/8/2011 1:26:00 PM
intruiging Doris, can't wait for more.
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Date: 1/8/2011 10:40:00 AM
Hello Doris, Wow, this is so well done, loved it. Hope you have a wonderful New Year Doris As Always, Shar
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Date: 1/7/2011 9:59:00 PM
I wonder what could it be? Awesome! felt like want to get my hands on the package myself. best wishes on the new year Doris :D
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Date: 1/7/2011 5:58:00 PM
U certainly perked up my attention Doris with the mention of anything creamy.. a fabulous message and write my friend.. if for any of the current contests..good luck with luv and happy weekend...
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Date: 1/7/2011 5:09:00 PM
Great vision..Soft sweet cream white interior..Mom
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Date: 1/7/2011 3:17:00 PM
Doris, I hope you entered this clever poem in Paula's "Not As It Seems" contest. It is filled with vision and truth. Awesome work, my dear. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 1/7/2011 10:43:00 AM
an eloquent display of vision transformed.. great wirte for any contest with winning colors, doris... :) nette
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Date: 1/7/2011 8:59:00 AM
A wonderful creme filled doughnut would be enough to draw my attention!!! (Not to mention the added prize !!) Nice one, Doris !! Good luck if this is for Carol's contest!??
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Date: 1/7/2011 8:28:00 AM
The Package brings to mind a fun-like welcome delivered anomynously. Thanks, Jan
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Date: 1/7/2011 8:09:00 AM
Well written Doris! "Hundreds walked by without as much as a glance" this happens too often! ....Thank you for your kind comments!...Gert
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