The Other Self

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Somehow, her eyes expand with the disobedient sky
and there, she senses urchins filling water on the lake
her feet and thighs slide up changing hues,
with receding incarnations of the moon.

She bends down gazing at images on the lake
as limbs turn into seaweeds, a mermaid in pain
changing hues in the crystal white of sky…
and the moon with slices of split mirrors burn
on wiggles of unscented tresses in water.

She dips her hands to catch the sleek tail in a plunge
knowing not a word to describe the reflection on the lake,
and witness the need to flow randomly in its
entrance through the expanse of one silver sky…
trying to recover glimpses reflected in the water.

Without point of reference to unknown images,
she vaguely remembers how transparently liquid 
the changing hues of the moon become watery
like a  hint of coagulated  blood on a mermaid’s lake...
and the laughter of the sky drips into imaginings.

.......................................
* Written for a fantasy contest that was discontinued; 
its theme required entrants to describe one's mirrored
image of the self. Few comments ranged from " Nice, but I
didn't get it" to " You seemed to have overused the word
"water?" In hindsight, I asked myself," what
were you thinking? This is sloppy!"



Jerry T Curtis' This Poem S***s Contest
Copyright © | Year Posted 2014

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Allison Avatar
December 1, 2014 at 12:07 PM
dropping back with my congrats on your win in the poem that s****s contest:-) Hugs jan xx
Yvonne Avatar
December 1, 2014 at 8:44 AM
Congratulations on your win nette. You have to go back five pages to see the results of this contest. Now I will have to fav this poem.
Curtis Avatar
November 26, 2014 at 6:19 AM
The real truth nette is that "No poems s**k" sometime comments and contests do. Congratulations on your win
Bordner Avatar
November 16, 2014 at 8:43 PM
The sky is emblematical of the truth Nette...your reflection in the water a respect for creativity found more freely in the Past...interaction with the water's intangible meaning an expression of how you have complicated your life, pining for simple, honest beauty. I think this is a marvelous introspective poem that has a wonderful degree of dreamy surrealism Nette...J.A.B.
Nair Avatar
November 12, 2014 at 1:10 AM
Nette, it has got a redeeming quality about it, however much u think it sucks. I wish u bl in the contest, lol.
Siao  Avatar
November 11, 2014 at 12:14 AM
I like it.
Mcdaid Avatar
November 10, 2014 at 6:20 PM
very beautifully painted nette love how you drew this piece dear friend
Johnson-Saunders Avatar
November 10, 2014 at 9:16 AM
If the winning poem in this contest sucks, I'm sure this will be far from the top! You are incapable of writing a poem that sucks, Nette. This is a lovely fantasy...love and blessings, Rhonda
Goff Avatar
November 9, 2014 at 6:05 PM
Lines that take one off the page, spinning with fluorescent images of grace and beauty! Whew! Nette! To mine faves...with honor! Oh...also...thanks for visiting....bein' a bit political lately...what with our country broke & the warmongering neocons spending billions on created wars...the ones who suffer are the average citizens...jimbo out
Yvonne Avatar
November 9, 2014 at 1:24 PM
I can not believe people left comments like that. I would have to say they are the ones that S***K. Here is hoping you lose this poem S****s. Trust me mine is a shoe in, it is about vampires who sucks more than they do.
Andresen Avatar
November 9, 2014 at 11:59 AM
- A thought hits me ........... "This Poem S *** s" !!!!! :)))) - Bravo my friend! - Good luck in the contest! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
Allison Avatar
November 9, 2014 at 11:46 AM
Its very much a fantasy write Nette and do love the imagery:-) Sorry my dear you cannot pen a bad poem! Hugs jan xx
Lalion Avatar
November 9, 2014 at 11:42 AM
Somehow, I am drawn to this; a bit semi-abstract so I hope it's not that sloppy for you , Nette.
Datu Avatar
November 9, 2014 at 9:59 AM
Okay, it can be better, just need editing, editing.Nette, Great potential here!
Smith Avatar
November 9, 2014 at 8:38 AM
I loved this poem nette...they just don't know beauty when they see it...hugs Tim
A. Sharma Avatar
November 9, 2014 at 7:59 AM
Masterful write Nette! Luck in contest!
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