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The Orchestra

The Orchestra Best heard alone in the silence of blackness pre-dawn. The hall, redolent of memories, lighted by a single bulb- log walls fashioned from old larch; a metal roof above. The orchestra of rain, wind. Initially a hesitant patter; Almost individual drops, far away, distant, then the building crescendo of speed and intensity. Becoming a persistent cadence accompanied by the gurgle of the gutter as the rain courses through it to splash and echo on the rocks below. Then decrescendo of sound as the rain retreats to the darkness from whence it came. Finally, the coda: Intermittent, hesitant sprinkle of drops punctuating the silence. David Holmes December 30, 2021

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Date: 3/1/2022 11:29:00 PM
You touched my senses with your beautiful poem about the sounds of rain, David. Well written, and very enjoyable to read. Bill
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David Holmes
Date: 3/5/2022 7:24:00 AM
Bill, thank you for your comments - I enjoyed working with this poem - so glad you enjoyed, David
Date: 2/17/2022 1:06:00 AM
A sound piece of sound. Lovely poem. Enjoying it.
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David Holmes
Date: 2/22/2022 9:30:00 AM
Andrew - thank you and so glad you enjoyed - David
Date: 2/16/2022 8:54:00 AM
Oh I love this poem...the auditory imagery, as it were, takes me back to rainy nights of my youth and what a sweet lullaby rain on a tin roof sang! Beautifully written!
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Date: 2/22/2022 9:30:00 AM
Janice - thank you - so glad it brought back some wonderful memories of youth! David
Date: 2/16/2022 2:59:00 AM
A beautiful poem of nature’s orchestral sounds David. Congratulations! Belle
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Date: 2/22/2022 9:29:00 AM
Belle - thank you, I really enjoyed working with these metaphors. David
Date: 2/16/2022 1:35:00 AM
Love this.
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Date: 2/22/2022 9:28:00 AM
Julie - thank you!! David
Date: 2/15/2022 4:57:00 PM
Wow, David. Cabin memories in rain, an orchestra of the soul out in nature. This is a well-developed poem with poetic detail. I enjoyed it very much. Carol Louise
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Date: 2/22/2022 9:28:00 AM
Carol - thank you - I enjoyed working on this poem - I appreciate your comments. David
Date: 1/19/2022 12:55:00 PM
Wow . Amazing detail. So much brings this to life and as the reader, I am living through it. Congratulations . Well done :)
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David Holmes
Date: 2/22/2022 9:28:00 AM
Heidi - thank you for your comments, I really appreciate you taking the time to read and send comments - David
Date: 1/5/2022 8:29:00 AM
I love the metaphor. Congrats!
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David Holmes
Date: 2/22/2022 9:27:00 AM
George - thank you, David
Date: 1/2/2022 3:24:00 AM
Hi David. I meant to comment on this when I read this on New Year's Day. I love how you lead the reader into your poem like a painter leads a viewer. Great atmosphere. Great build up. Worthy winner in Brian's contest. I hope this poem gets the views and great comments it so rightly deserves.
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Date: 2/22/2022 9:26:00 AM
Gary - thank you and thank you again - you always send such wonderful comments (sorry for the delay in getting back). Your comment on this poem means a great deal - David
Date: 1/2/2022 2:39:00 AM
"Best heard alone in the silence" - Beginning well, the whole poem is very beautiful. Congratulations!
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Date: 2/22/2022 9:25:00 AM
Christuraj - thank you and sorry for the delay - I appreciate your kind words, David