The Orchestra

The Orchestra

Best heard alone in the silence
of blackness pre-dawn.

The hall, redolent of memories,
lighted by a single bulb-
log walls fashioned from old larch;
a metal roof above.

The orchestra of rain, wind.
Initially a hesitant patter;
Almost individual drops, far away, distant, 
then the building crescendo of speed and intensity.

Becoming a persistent cadence
accompanied by the gurgle
of the gutter as the rain courses through it
to splash and echo on the rocks below.

Then decrescendo of sound as the rain 
retreats to the darkness from whence it came.
Finally, the coda:
Intermittent, hesitant sprinkle of drops
punctuating the silence.

David Holmes
December 30, 2021
Copyright © | Year Posted 2021

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Baker Avatar
March 1, 2022 at 11:29 PM
You touched my senses with your beautiful poem about the sounds of rain, David. Well written, and very enjoyable to read. Bill
Holmes Avatar
March 5, 2022 at 7:24 AM
Bill, thank you for your comments - I enjoyed working with this poem - so glad you enjoyed, David
John Avatar
February 17, 2022 at 1:06 AM
A sound piece of sound. Lovely poem. Enjoying it.
Holmes Avatar
February 22, 2022 at 9:30 AM
Andrew - thank you and so glad you enjoyed - David
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February 16, 2022 at 2:59 AM
A beautiful poem of nature’s orchestral sounds David. Congratulations! Belle
Holmes Avatar
February 22, 2022 at 9:29 AM
Belle - thank you, I really enjoyed working with these metaphors. David
Sands Avatar
January 19, 2022 at 12:55 PM
Wow . Amazing detail. So much brings this to life and as the reader, I am living through it. Congratulations . Well done :)
Holmes Avatar
February 22, 2022 at 9:28 AM
Heidi - thank you for your comments, I really appreciate you taking the time to read and send comments - David
Stathakis Avatar
January 5, 2022 at 8:29 AM
I love the metaphor. Congrats!
Holmes Avatar
February 22, 2022 at 9:27 AM
George - thank you, David
Radice Avatar
January 2, 2022 at 3:24 AM
Hi David. I meant to comment on this when I read this on New Year's Day. I love how you lead the reader into your poem like a painter leads a viewer. Great atmosphere. Great build up. Worthy winner in Brian's contest. I hope this poem gets the views and great comments it so rightly deserves.
Holmes Avatar
February 22, 2022 at 9:26 AM
Gary - thank you and thank you again - you always send such wonderful comments (sorry for the delay in getting back). Your comment on this poem means a great deal - David
Alex Avatar
January 2, 2022 at 2:39 AM
"Best heard alone in the silence" - Beginning well, the whole poem is very beautiful. Congratulations!
Holmes Avatar
February 22, 2022 at 9:25 AM
Christuraj - thank you and sorry for the delay - I appreciate your kind words, David
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