Nette Onclaud Poet Cinquain

The One Who Survived

child pinned
under ruins…
hands feel the kiss of death
mute … until sand-stoned light opens
breaths twitch


2/ 10/2016
Contest:The One Who Survives
Sponsor: Sara Kendrick

*Based on an strong earthquake with a magnitude
of 7.2 in 2013. The daughter of our family friend
was dug alive after a few days.

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Eve Roper February 13, 2016 at 3:56 PM Nette, heartbreaking; congratulations on your placement in survivor contest!!!

Sara Kendrick February 12, 2016 at 5:22 PM Thank you for participating in my contest “The One Who Survives”..It was an honor to read your entry..Thank you so much for stopping by my page and reading my work..Your encouragement is so uplifting.Sara

Poet Destroyer A February 11, 2016 at 10:30 PM NETTE, Congratulations on your awesome win. XOX ~LINDA~

Dr. Upma A. Sharma February 11, 2016 at 10:02 PM Miracles do happen nette.. strong words n awesome win.. big congrats!

Sandra Haight February 11, 2016 at 1:52 PM What an amazing miracle, Nette, and your words image it so well. Thank God for a happy ending. Congratulations on your nice win. Hugs, Sandra

Elaine George February 11, 2016 at 12:26 PM Many congrats on your win, dear Nette, with this excellent Cinquain. Elaine

Susan Gentry February 11, 2016 at 12:08 PM Congratulations on your win with this excellent poem. Tragic event but happy outcome in this case.

Lin Lane February 11, 2016 at 10:15 AM What relief to have saved that child. Well written for your contest placement, Nette.

Arthur Vaso February 10, 2016 at 5:11 PM Wow, what a great poem! Hugs

Robert Heemstra February 10, 2016 at 5:59 AM No one like seeing a child suffer. Earthquakes are very damaging! Great poem!

Tim Smith February 9, 2016 at 4:16 PM Enlightening news nette. There is always a silver lining

Andrea Dietrich February 9, 2016 at 3:33 PM so awesome that she stayed alive. WELL DONE. I have mine to put up very soon!!

Keith Bickerstaffe February 9, 2016 at 3:19 PM Very dramatic... thank heavens she was saved. Stunning imagery! Well done nette. Best wishes, Keith

Carly Lalion February 9, 2016 at 2:38 PM The latest one occurred in Taiwan, so think. Your significant poem impeccably paints the blessing of surviving a tragic event in a visual and stirring language!

Bl Devnath February 9, 2016 at 1:07 PM Excellent Cinquain my lovely friend. Good luck in the contest. Loved always,bl

Anne-Lise Andresen February 9, 2016 at 12:21 PM - Amazing that they manage to survive - Great written, Nette - Good luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)