The One That Survived

She stands
In the graveyard
Where he sleeps forever
Beneath the heavy weight of all 
Her tears.
 ~~~

For:  Cinquain contest
Awarded:  First Place

Written:   Feb. 6, 2016
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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Makama Avatar
May 20, 2016 at 6:53 AM
Awesome and refreshing. A jaw breaking 7.
Milliner Avatar
February 16, 2016 at 11:42 AM
Great write!!
George   Avatar
February 17, 2016 at 2:33 PM
Thank you so much, Sarita. Elaine
Rycroft Avatar
February 15, 2016 at 11:19 AM
Congrats well done xxx
George   Avatar
February 17, 2016 at 1:04 PM
Thank you so much, Wendy. Elaine
Adams Avatar
February 13, 2016 at 10:58 AM
stopping by again to offer you congrats on your big win :)
George   Avatar
February 13, 2016 at 2:16 PM
Thank you so much, Sandra.
Kimathi Avatar
February 13, 2016 at 3:11 AM
Greetings Elaine. I love the emotional imagery that you have impacted in your verse.... Congrats for your well, deserved #1 placement in the contest!!! ;-)
George   Avatar
February 13, 2016 at 7:00 AM
Thank you Teddy.
Johnson Avatar
February 11, 2016 at 10:50 PM
So sad and so well done. Congratulations. Love, Joyce
George   Avatar
February 12, 2016 at 9:47 AM
Thank you, dear Joyce. So nice to see you here and still gracing us with you beautiful poetry. Elaine
A   Avatar
February 11, 2016 at 10:24 PM
Hello Elaine, this is a fine win. I love how you got the top spot. Well deserved... Love Linda
George   Avatar
February 12, 2016 at 9:39 AM
Thank you for your support, Linda. It is much appreciated. Elaine
A. Sharma Avatar
February 11, 2016 at 9:48 PM
Very powerful.. congrats on ur first place win with this awesome write Elaine.
George   Avatar
February 11, 2016 at 9:56 PM
Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments, Dr. Upma. Elaine
Haight Avatar
February 11, 2016 at 1:48 PM
So sad and powerful, Elaine. Congratulations on your well-deserved First Place win. Hugs, Sandr
George   Avatar
February 11, 2016 at 2:00 PM
Thank you so much, Sandra. Elaine
Callus Avatar
February 11, 2016 at 12:41 PM
This is sad, but lovely, Elaine. You made each word count! Congratulations on a deserved first place:) Regards // paul
George   Avatar
February 11, 2016 at 12:45 PM
Thank you so much for your kind comments, Paul.
Roper Avatar
February 11, 2016 at 12:39 PM
Amazing how much you got in just a few words! Great write! My brother in law did the same every night when my sister passed always left a rose. Congratulations on your win!
George   Avatar
February 11, 2016 at 12:44 PM
Thank you for much for your kind comments, Eve. Much appreciated. Elaine
Canerdy Avatar
February 11, 2016 at 12:22 PM
Congrats on your top win! Janice
George   Avatar
February 11, 2016 at 12:24 PM
Thank you, Janice
Kendrick Avatar
February 11, 2016 at 12:17 PM
Thank you for participating in my contest “The One Who Survives”..It was an honor to read your entry..I can feel the pain of the survivor..Sara
Richards Avatar
February 11, 2016 at 12:05 PM
Oh yes.......this is top notch and filled with emotion! Well done!
Gentry Avatar
February 11, 2016 at 11:28 AM
Congratulations on your win! So sad. Last 2 lines got me.
Onclaud Avatar
February 11, 2016 at 10:42 AM
from a point of view who is at the receiving end of a tragedy, wow... top congrats, elaine.. huggs
Lane Avatar
February 11, 2016 at 9:56 AM
Quite sad but lovely, Elaine. Congratulations on your win.
Dietrich Avatar
February 9, 2016 at 4:00 PM
love how you did this. Outstanding.
George   Avatar
February 9, 2016 at 4:04 PM
Thank you Andrea. In answer to your question re: Cannon. Cannon is the name of the lover who was lost at sea. I sent you a soup mail on that, but I don't know if you got it. Elaine PS I am going to study the Quatern and give it another go. Thanks for inspiring me.
Whatley Avatar
February 9, 2016 at 11:36 AM
Very touching write indeed, Elaine!
George   Avatar
February 9, 2016 at 11:50 AM
Thank you, Michael.
Canerdy Avatar
February 8, 2016 at 6:22 PM
Very moving message--in the few syllables allowed for this form. Janice
George   Avatar
February 9, 2016 at 11:50 AM
Thank you for stopping by, and for your very kind comments, Janice.
Deschler Avatar
February 7, 2016 at 8:26 PM
A deeply touching and beautiful poem, Elaine... So well written! Good luck in the contest!
George   Avatar
February 8, 2016 at 4:59 PM
Thank you so much, Kelly. Elaine
Adams Avatar
February 7, 2016 at 7:02 PM
a very poignant piece, wonderfully penned!
George   Avatar
February 8, 2016 at 4:55 PM
Thank you, Sandra.
Marcum Wong Avatar
February 6, 2016 at 6:24 PM
Oh Elaine, this is worded with such eloquence! Gave me chills! Beautiful entry for the contest. It should be a top winner my friend! #7
George   Avatar
February 8, 2016 at 4:49 PM
Thank you, Connie, for your vote of confidence. Much appreciated. Elaine
Allison Avatar
February 6, 2016 at 12:06 PM
Sad imagery Elaine good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx
George   Avatar
February 8, 2016 at 4:43 PM
Thank you for stopping by and for your vote of approval, Jan. Much appreciated. Elaine
Williams Gault Avatar
February 6, 2016 at 7:59 AM
My goodness, you've captured the weight of the sadness so succinctly. Wow...
George   Avatar
February 6, 2016 at 8:05 AM
Thank you Dineen, for dropping by and for your kind comments. Elaine
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