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The Old Pier

The Old Pier (a picture poem) beneath the boundary layer of air and sea twirling vortexes of frenzied waters incessantly corrode the aging pillars below the ravaged tired timbers emit anguished unholy screeching sounds as ocean swirls beat non stop in and about worn out planks attached beneath the weathered decking the riddled concrete sideling emerges perplexed and whistles out its protestations in echoes heard across the raging tide. in the bottoms underflow snail infested warped planks buffer incursions of countless schools of rabid predators that attack, conquer, and devour unsuspecting aquatic prey. above fishermen pray to the sea gods to hook their water worn lines and capture in songs of surrender the call of a waiting bucket. in timed release, ancient messages splash upon silicon sharpened shores that resonate the sounds of strident hungry seagulls rummaging for their next meal. wave upon wave of scattered foam wash over brash crayoned streaks of blue and green hews that seem to melt across and blend into a continuous pallet of assorted colors. at the same time the formidable forces of untamed waters compete in their final rush to win the race to land's end. C.A.K. 2-21-2013

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Date: 2/3/2014 12:53:00 PM
You have incredibly pervasive descriptiveness in these well-written verses. I live near many of these types of piers that can be found along the New Jersey coast.
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Date: 12/3/2013 1:41:00 PM
Hi Allan: "ravaged tired timbers emit", BEAUTIFUL! Thank you for your comment on Friends and Frenemies.
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Date: 10/30/2013 6:29:00 AM
You are a master of images. You painted a fantastic picture of the pier with strokes of your pen.
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Allan Koven
Date: 10/30/2013 3:51:00 PM
Thank you Monterey.
Date: 10/20/2013 11:02:00 PM
I agree with Andrea. Lines like"…..ravaged tired timbers.." and "silicon sharpened shores" The whole poem was an excellent write. Thank you for sharing.
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Date: 10/14/2013 12:23:00 PM
My dear friend you brought the pier to life! You gave it soul and breath! I have enjoyed your "picture" to the greatest degree possible! A 7 from me! Excellent!
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Date: 10/12/2013 2:11:00 AM
Allan i like the journey of one of the most iconic symbols of our lives and history, it covers all aspects of life on a pier, very well written....David
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Date: 10/11/2013 1:11:00 AM
Thanks, Allan, for your recent comments on my poem, Much appreciated. On my part, I like this poem of yours, which is very well written, picturesque, throbbing with life's activities and inexorable flow, very perceptive. Enjoy it very much. Excellent poem. Have a great weekend. Merton Lee
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Date: 10/1/2013 4:57:00 PM
This is a moveable feast Alan; It took me on a great ride of magical places in your mind and then opened memories of my own .Thank you this was as a joy.
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Allan Koven
Date: 10/1/2013 5:29:00 PM
Mucho gracias, Michael. Great to hear from you. Allan
Date: 10/1/2013 4:24:00 PM
Love this one. There are a number of old piers on the Carolinas and Virginia coast, each having their own story.
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Allan Koven
Date: 10/1/2013 4:53:00 PM
Each one speaks of worlds below and tells its tales in the sounds of creaking wood and concrete.
Date: 9/22/2013 8:50:00 PM
wow, What amazing descriptive writing. You have a flair for adjectives!! Way to bring the old pier to life.
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Allan Koven
Date: 9/23/2013 7:51:00 AM
Thank you Andrea, I appreciate your comments.
Date: 9/20/2013 9:28:00 PM
now that's a poem! I love old piers and you captured the scene very completely. thanks for posting this.
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Allan Koven
Date: 9/21/2013 3:44:00 PM
Thank you Wayne. I hope I did it justice. Allan
Date: 9/20/2013 8:14:00 PM
I bow to your eloquence, Allan. You paint such a vivid picture as to make it real. The ocean is one hectic force. An enjoyable write, my friend. Licia :-)
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Allan Koven
Date: 9/21/2013 3:45:00 PM
Appreciate your comments Licia.
Date: 9/20/2013 9:16:00 AM
Words are your friends. .you surely know how to manage them..I am inspired and impressed again :)
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Date: 9/19/2013 5:01:00 PM
If I could say it better, I would!
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Allan Koven
Date: 9/20/2013 8:32:00 AM
Thank you,Gerald
Date: 9/19/2013 3:15:00 PM
EXCELLENT PIECE I TIP MY HAT I ENJOYED
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Date: 9/19/2013 9:36:00 AM
well Allen, you know me, I think this picture poem is amazing. like the competing water ending images... reminds me that even nature loves a little game here and there... always loving your work... Linda
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Allan Koven
Date: 9/19/2013 10:39:00 AM
Linda, always first upon the scene. I look forward to your comments every time. Thank you for being a Poetry Soup "maven". Allan
Date: 9/19/2013 12:36:00 AM
Nicely penned picture of the old pier, Allan
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Allan Koven
Date: 9/19/2013 7:56:00 AM
Thank you. Allan

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