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The Old Gristmill

Down by the stream on the outskirts of town stands the old gristmill who’s facing sundown. The glory days bygone are but a dream, on the outskirts of town, down by the stream. ‘Twas a shining star way back in the day viewed by all as the town’s crowning bouquet, and so it’s written in the mill’s memoir way back in the day ‘twas a shining star. Today a dull grey, surrounded by weeds, this once majestic mill has many needs to bring her to life and save from decay, surrounded by weeds, today a dull grey. Her wheel no longer turns, rotted by age; the roof is sagging as time turns it’s page. To return to glory her yearning burns; rotted by age, her wheel no longer turns. The greatness is gone with passage of time, just like an old man who’s way past his prime. Only mem’ries remain, the future’s drawn; with passage of time, the greatness is gone. May24, 2018 Contest: The Gristmill Sponsor: Craig Cornish

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Date: 6/22/2018 9:16:00 AM
Yes! Sad...but true. Many congrats on your win, John. Elaine
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Date: 6/22/2018 6:54:00 AM
Congratulations on your win with this awesome well-written poem!
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John Gondolf
Date: 6/22/2018 7:06:00 AM
Thank you so much, Susan, I appreciate it. John
Date: 6/18/2018 9:25:00 PM
Back with congratulations John. Tom.
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John Gondolf
Date: 6/19/2018 4:23:00 AM
Thanks, Tom, I appreciate it.
Date: 5/28/2018 5:30:00 PM
Don't mind what I said. I was wrong on that!!
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John Gondolf
Date: 5/28/2018 5:46:00 PM
You gave me a scare for a second; I thought maybe I had missed something.
Date: 5/28/2018 4:48:00 PM
YOu did very well with the theme. For some reason I was thinking it was to be free verse but I may be completely wrong about that. Hope rhyme is right because it deserves a win.
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Date: 5/26/2018 4:11:00 PM
Excellent, John! You establish the gristmill as a human form in the second line by referring to it as "who." Acknowledging this influences the reader's perception throughout. Could not help but think of the signs of aging we encounter on our journey through life. Surely, where has the "greatness" gone? Life speeds by so quickly. Wishing you success in Craig's contest! Hugs, Carolyn
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John Gondolf
Date: 5/27/2018 6:25:00 AM
Thank you for your wonderful comments, Carolyn, I appreciate it. As we get older we start to reflect much more on the pains of aging. John
Date: 5/26/2018 1:22:00 AM
bravo. I see you did it in swap quatrain form. I think some of my finest work is in that form. It is working well for you too!
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John Gondolf
Date: 5/26/2018 6:18:00 AM
Thanks, Andrea, this was my first attempt at a swap quatrain; it worked well. I enjoy trying different forms, I am working on a 7/5 Trochee which I will post in a couple days, you did well with this form my friend! John
Date: 5/25/2018 7:05:00 AM
Fantastic! :)
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John Gondolf
Date: 5/25/2018 7:08:00 AM
Thank you so much, Yazmin, I appreciate it. John
Date: 5/24/2018 9:23:00 AM
A lovely tribute to the old Gristmill...well written would have loved to see it before and after...All the best John
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John Gondolf
Date: 5/25/2018 7:08:00 AM
Thanks, Arturo, I appreciate it.
Date: 5/24/2018 8:25:00 AM
A well written verse John, isn't it a shame when these old places fall into disrepair having served their purpose. Good luck. Tom.
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John Gondolf
Date: 5/24/2018 8:34:00 AM
Thanks for your comments, Tom, I appreciate it. John
Date: 5/24/2018 7:53:00 AM
Very well written John! Smooth to read. Good luck in the contest :)
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John Gondolf
Date: 5/24/2018 8:12:00 AM
Thank you so much, Heidi, I appreciate your comments and support. John

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