The Old Gristmill

Down by the stream on the outskirts of town
stands the old gristmill who’s facing sundown.
The glory days bygone are but a dream,
on the outskirts of town, down by the stream.

‘Twas a shining star way back in the day
viewed by all as the town’s crowning bouquet,
and so it’s written in the mill’s memoir
way back in the day ‘twas a shining star.

Today a dull grey, surrounded by weeds,
this once majestic mill has many needs
to bring her to life and save from decay,
surrounded by weeds, today a dull grey.

Her wheel no longer turns, rotted by age;
the roof is sagging as time turns it’s page.
To return to glory her yearning burns;
rotted by age, her wheel no longer turns.

The greatness is gone with passage of time,
just like an old man who’s way past his prime.
Only mem’ries remain, the future’s drawn;
with passage of time, the greatness is gone.


May24, 2018
Contest: The Gristmill
Sponsor: Craig Cornish
Copyright © | Year Posted 2018

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George   Avatar
June 22, 2018 at 9:16 AM
Yes! Sad...but true. Many congrats on your win, John. Elaine
Gentry Avatar
June 22, 2018 at 6:54 AM
Congratulations on your win with this awesome well-written poem!
Gondolf Avatar
June 22, 2018 at 7:06 AM
Thank you so much, Susan, I appreciate it. John
Cunningham Avatar
June 18, 2018 at 9:25 PM
Back with congratulations John. Tom.
Gondolf Avatar
June 19, 2018 at 4:23 AM
Thanks, Tom, I appreciate it.
Dietrich Avatar
May 28, 2018 at 5:30 PM
Don't mind what I said. I was wrong on that!!
Gondolf Avatar
May 28, 2018 at 5:46 PM
You gave me a scare for a second; I thought maybe I had missed something.
Dietrich Avatar
May 28, 2018 at 4:48 PM
YOu did very well with the theme. For some reason I was thinking it was to be free verse but I may be completely wrong about that. Hope rhyme is right because it deserves a win.
Devonshire Avatar
May 26, 2018 at 4:11 PM
Excellent, John! You establish the gristmill as a human form in the second line by referring to it as "who." Acknowledging this influences the reader's perception throughout. Could not help but think of the signs of aging we encounter on our journey through life. Surely, where has the "greatness" gone? Life speeds by so quickly. Wishing you success in Craig's contest! Hugs, Carolyn
Gondolf Avatar
May 27, 2018 at 6:25 AM
Thank you for your wonderful comments, Carolyn, I appreciate it. As we get older we start to reflect much more on the pains of aging. John
Dietrich Avatar
May 26, 2018 at 1:22 AM
bravo. I see you did it in swap quatrain form. I think some of my finest work is in that form. It is working well for you too!
Gondolf Avatar
May 26, 2018 at 6:18 AM
Thanks, Andrea, this was my first attempt at a swap quatrain; it worked well. I enjoy trying different forms, I am working on a 7/5 Trochee which I will post in a couple days, you did well with this form my friend! John
Malik Avatar
May 25, 2018 at 7:05 AM
Fantastic! :)
Gondolf Avatar
May 25, 2018 at 7:08 AM
Thank you so much, Yazmin, I appreciate it. John
Michael Avatar
May 24, 2018 at 9:23 AM
A lovely tribute to the old Gristmill...well written would have loved to see it before and after...All the best John
Gondolf Avatar
May 25, 2018 at 7:08 AM
Thanks, Arturo, I appreciate it.
Cunningham Avatar
May 24, 2018 at 8:25 AM
A well written verse John, isn't it a shame when these old places fall into disrepair having served their purpose. Good luck. Tom.
Gondolf Avatar
May 24, 2018 at 8:34 AM
Thanks for your comments, Tom, I appreciate it. John
Sands Avatar
May 24, 2018 at 7:53 AM
Very well written John! Smooth to read. Good luck in the contest :)
Gondolf Avatar
May 24, 2018 at 8:12 AM
Thank you so much, Heidi, I appreciate your comments and support. John
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