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The Neck Is Broken

The Doll Collection



The necklace scattered: all into little pieces
Another quiet doll for my collection
I twisted her throat until her eyes shown dead
Into the night they stare so very red

I stand her up, on a small doll chair
Crafted with loving hands that freed her from breathing air
They are all in a row, so pretty they are, staring at my wife
She is paralyzed you see, her neck would not even tear for me

I collect dolls, for my loves doll collection
She doesn’t move, only stares in murky recollections
Small pieces of deep anguish leak from her eyes
She recoils at the new dolls I give her as a surprise

They sit in chairs; the doll house is so pretty
With amber and gold, I wrap a necklace around each
Such pretty dolls, that me and my love keep
Each doll face is my path towards guilty redemption

No one knows the secrets we have hidden so deep
No one knows the dolls that we collect and keep
No one knows I have saved them all, they shall never weep
No one knows my wife, paralyzed; so shall never speak

That fateful night she refused to die
Her necklace so beautiful wrapped in blood so dry
In our doll house, my shrine devoted to her
Her tears rain down her face mercilessly clear




Notes: I had just purchased a book called “The Doll Collection” a compilation of short stories edited by Ellen Datlow. For one purpose, I was sure it would inspire me some poetry, of course on the dark side. Then I read a poem by Andrea Dietrich called “The Necklace Broke” From that I had my idea and off I went. I borrowed a few words from Andrea with her permission, and did so on purpose to pay tribute to another great poet here on Soup! Even a poem is so completely different, I think its wonderful that reading other poets provides such great inspiration. I would also ask that people read her poem, and here I provide the link!

http://www.poetrysoup.com/poem/the_necklace_broke_831425

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Date: 9/27/2016 8:05:00 AM
A chilling write, Arthur, with great inspiration from an amazing person:) congratulations on Poem of the day:)
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 10/2/2016 8:06:00 PM
Thank you! :)
Date: 9/25/2016 4:03:00 PM
A trademark chiller from you, Arthur! Darkly appreciated! Congrats on p.o.t.d. Regards // paul
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 10/2/2016 8:05:00 PM
Thank you so much Paul!
Date: 9/24/2016 10:28:00 PM
Great Job!!! My eyes kept getting bigger as I was reading it!!!
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 10/2/2016 8:05:00 PM
Thank you, glad you enjoyed!
Date: 9/24/2016 10:25:00 PM
Many congrats on POTD:-) hugs Jan xx
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 10/2/2016 8:04:00 PM
Thanks Jan!!
Date: 9/24/2016 5:15:00 PM
What a house of horrors Arthur.
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 10/2/2016 8:04:00 PM
Welcome to the house! :)
Date: 9/24/2016 1:21:00 PM
Hi Arthur, I'm just coming back to say congratulations on getting the poem of day:-) Alexis
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 10/2/2016 8:04:00 PM
So very kind of you, thank you! Hugs!
Date: 9/24/2016 9:09:00 AM
Arthur, wonderful congratulations on poem of the day :-)
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 10/2/2016 8:03:00 PM
Thank you you Eve!!!! :)
Date: 9/24/2016 6:44:00 AM
- A first class deep poem, Arthur - Congratulations on your p.o.t.d. ! (7) - Good luck in the contest - Happy weekend :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 10/2/2016 8:03:00 PM
Hello there Anne-Lise thank you so much!!!! :)
Date: 9/24/2016 4:03:00 AM
Definitely on the dark side, Arthur...Brought chills. You do this type of write so well. I'm glad Andrea sparked something in you. Congrats on POTD. This poem is dark...and foreboding. Well written.
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 10/2/2016 8:02:00 PM
Thank you Eileen, as you know, I am the dark side!
Date: 9/24/2016 2:49:00 AM
Arthur, Brilliant write. Well penned every line. A7 from me. Congrats for POTD...........// hugs//Manmath//
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 10/2/2016 8:02:00 PM
Thank you Manmath, much appreciated!
Date: 9/23/2016 8:14:00 PM
applause to Andrea for inspiring such a wonderful write. Seren
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 10/2/2016 8:01:00 PM
No applause for me? :)
Date: 9/23/2016 7:10:00 PM
Hi Arthur, This is a well written dark and creepy poem. I was never really into dolls. I will go check out Andrea's poem. A without a doubt seven- Alexis
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 10/2/2016 8:01:00 PM
Thanks Alexis!
Date: 9/23/2016 11:47:00 AM
Great poem Arthur....brings a feeling of sadness and love
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 10/2/2016 8:00:00 PM
Yes those two words are often married each other.
Date: 9/23/2016 11:09:00 AM
wow...awesomely dark
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 10/2/2016 8:00:00 PM
Thank you Cas! Hugs!
Date: 9/23/2016 11:03:00 AM
This is an amazing write, Arthur! Definitely dark and chilling. Great work! Blessings!
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 10/2/2016 7:59:00 PM
Thank you so much Kim!
Date: 9/23/2016 5:59:00 AM
Now here is the Dark Vaso I remember well!!Creepily awesome, Arthur. I will take the time to read Andrea's poem, she is a fav of mine as well as yourself...yes sir, I really dig how other poets have inspired me....sometimes I'll identify with the poet, others seem wriiten just for me [EGO! LOL). Other times poets paint pictures with their words that move me to write..thanx 4 sharing..peace & light, jill
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 9/23/2016 9:52:00 PM
Thanks Jill Glad to see you back!!!! Hugs!!!!
Date: 9/23/2016 4:37:00 AM
I really love it, Arthur. You've captured a darkness few ever get to see. It made me look over my shoulder. Very well written. Scott
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 9/23/2016 9:51:00 PM
Thank you Scott, much appreciated!
Date: 9/23/2016 3:52:00 AM
WOW ... its fabulous that Andrea's poem inspired you to pen this dark write ... a chill ran down my spine at the graphic imagery. Bravo Arthur and its a lovely tribute to Andrea that her original lines resulted in such a different poem being written :-) hugs Jan xx7
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 9/23/2016 9:51:00 PM
Thanks Jan!
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