The Narcissistic Sun NO MORE

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For Ink Empress's contest written March 9 2025

Son of a gun narcissistic With a personality pessimistic Everything resolves around you Victor or victim that you bruise When you look in silver mirror You can’t see because you fear me My natural beauty that you deface Graceful in defeat as you beat me again And yet somehow I still WIN I let you walk in my trap Recorded it all and sent it zap To the authorities for proof No more abuse wear your cell Meant for my mind on yours I’m forgiving me for loving YOU Parting ways is so sugary I have reasons to enjoy life No longer fearing empowered I am a black flower blooming

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Ink Empress

Date: 3/17/2025 10:57:00 PM

Dear Karen, a powerful poem this is and one that feels like it comes from a very sincere deep part of your soul! Narcissistic sun, the prompt, youv used it here so well! I absolutely love the flow and depth of what youve conveyed and the flame of resilience that dances across your page in such poetic eloquence! Brilliant! Thank you for sharing! Congratulations on your win. Thank you for joining in to raise awareness

Karen Jones
Date: 3/17/2025 11:02:00 PM

Dearest Inky your prompts are always inspiring and I am honored you found merit in my poem!

Jan Allison

Date: 3/10/2025 5:42:00 PM

what a powerful piece, write on and continue blossoming with your poetry and never let anyone deter you Karen! hugs jan xx (PS I've had black tulips and black orchids and they are beautiful just like you!!)

Karen Jones
Date: 3/10/2025 5:45:00 PM

Aw Jan thanks!