The Mystery Be

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The Mystery Be Mistral freedom o'er stakes waged before, destined mortal souls their reposed earth, spent sepulchers clips tales from postwar, nonetheless, facts become one back door, proves everywhere their tribute got worth, bestill main doors naught their mailboxes, the rumors naught onshore, farther berth, winds from war, peace checks, paradoxes. *Rhyme Scheme abaabcbc 2020 October 02 *Honorable Mention* COMPLETELY YOUR CHOICE (31)any form any theme ~~Brian Strand *5th Place* IN PRAISE OF THE ODE ~~nette onclaud #5

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/16/2020 7:09:00 PM

Very well done in the contest, William. I love the internal rhyme in that last line and that beginning phrase Sam mentions. Congrats!

Hilo Poet
Date: 10/16/2020 9:52:00 PM

Thank you knidly, Andrea, nicely thought through, Aloha! William

Sam Kauffman

Date: 10/16/2020 3:48:00 PM

As always, William, your poem is chock full of bright, visual images. "Mistral freedom" got me at the first line. So glad to find it on the winners list. Congratulations my friend! Aloha!

Hilo Poet
Date: 10/16/2020 4:55:00 PM

Thanks, Sam, as yours was unerring overall, capturing the essence of the theme magnificently, "Misty clues on cobweb ridden eyes...", cannot be said any better my friend, Aloha! William

Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 10/16/2020 6:08:00 AM

Nice William. Congratulations on the win! Linda

Hilo Poet
Date: 10/16/2020 10:35:00 AM

Thanks, Linda, Aloha! William