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The Murder Mystery

Daybreak, the sun breaks into his room. A pulsing headache. He moves towards the bathroom, bleary eyed he stumbles. A dead body on the floor. Panic. He looks at his hands, but they are clean. What happened in the darkness of the night? He suppresses a scream. Hysteria comes without warning. Vague memories arise. He was in a cheap hotel. Why? He hangs his head in shame. Should he escape? He turns the body. A young woman stares up at him, a knife in her chest. Fool, don’t touch it, remember your fingerprints. He rushes into the bathroom, his stomach churning. Why all this? Who is he? There’s knock on the door. Police have come. He opens the door. He longs to die. Instead he cries. NB Not for any contest. 31 January 2021

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Date: 2/2/2021 1:19:00 AM
Wow! You captivate me, a mystery indeed, waiting for the sequel to this, there must be one:)
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Date: 2/1/2021 2:37:00 AM
Great write. Feelings beautifully captured.
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Date: 1/31/2021 8:40:00 PM
Etc, etc, i hope you continue with this Victor, excellent write.
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Date: 1/31/2021 8:40:00 PM
I just hope he didn't touch the knife! The killer's fingerprints may have already been on it, and the police are at the door. A fine mystery tale, Victor. :=)
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Date: 1/31/2021 1:25:00 PM
Creative and intriguing story penned in poetic form. Enjoyed reading this one. Sara
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Date: 1/31/2021 10:43:00 AM
Well said and enjoyed reading, Victor. Hope your weekend is going well. Hugs Eve
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Date: 1/31/2021 10:11:00 AM
- "What happened in the darkness of the night?" ... yes, a mysterious murder ... excellently written, Victor :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 1/31/2021 9:41:00 AM
The mystery remains, Very nicely penned Victor..
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Date: 1/31/2021 8:30:00 AM
for me the mystery is how they knew it happened and were at his door!! Hmm, I wonder if he were set up and the real killer called the police!!
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Date: 1/31/2021 8:19:00 AM
Love the way you keep the reader in suspense over how the woman died. The panic he feels upon discovering her body is very well expressed and the short lines give the poem a nice, quick tempo. Well done, Victor. You could probably enter it in one of Brian's contests. Hugs, Carolyn
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Date: 1/31/2021 8:18:00 AM
A mystery indeed. Awaiting the sequel. ;0)
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Date: 1/31/2021 6:50:00 AM
WoW!Victor, What a well-written write that is mysterious and intriguing. The perfect “ who done it” type of write. It's also a cliffhanger. Having the reader begging for more. Well done. Have a great day, my friend:-)Alexis
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Date: 1/31/2021 5:55:00 AM
Creative story telling, Victor. You aptly named it a mystery. Certainly happens in the environment he was in.
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Date: 1/31/2021 4:54:00 AM
Well penned story of murder Victor...Interesting one scene after the other... God bless.. ~ Ani
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Date: 1/31/2021 3:40:00 AM
Great poem Victor... scary! God bless you with love and prayers
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Date: 1/31/2021 3:14:00 AM
Imagine that happening to you and you couldn't remember. Well written Victor. Tom
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Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 1/31/2021 8:20:00 AM
It is hard to imagine, Tom. Who knows what led up to the woman's death. Love the suspense in Victor's poem.

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