The Mouse And The Moon

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When an owl with a scowl had his eyes on the prowl
In search of a savoury bite
A little brown mouse poked his nose from his house
Unafraid as a full moon shone bright

And the owl rocked his head till his night vision said,
“My supper just came into sight.”
But cicadas don’t sing when owls take to the wing
So, in silence, the mouse stood to fight.

A screech in the night as the owl got a fright
And an end was put to his endeavours
A most gruesome sight as the ground left and right 
Was carpeted with blooded feathers

The mouse ate his fill of his ill fated kill
Then dragged the remains to a warehouse 
The cats and the rats will be glad of the meal
Supplied courtesy of the Weremouse

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Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 2/10/2024 7:17:00 PM

Terry, your poem is a deliciously dark twist on classic predator-prey tales! The rhyming scheme adds a playful melody to the gruesome encounter. I love the image of the "unafriad" mouse standing his ground under the full moon, hinting at his secret power. The surprise reveal of the "Weremouse" throws readers off balance, adding a layer of unexpected mythology. The final image of the shared feast among scavengers leaves a chilling yet satisfying punchline. - Daniel

Terry Flood
Date: 2/11/2024 5:46:00 AM

Glad you saw so much in this, Daniel. Thanks so much for your visit and your positive comments. Terry

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/8/2024 1:08:00 PM

haha. Love it!

Terry Flood
Date: 2/9/2024 4:29:00 PM

Thanks Andrea. I saw the views building up, but the comments were a while in coming. I thought I’d missed the target and perhaps it was simply too Halloweeny. So I’m chuffed that yourself and a few others got the gag.

Gershon Wolf

Date: 2/7/2024 7:04:00 PM

Ha, ha, ha, ha. A new relative! Yippee! ~ Gershon the Werewolf

Terry Flood
Date: 2/9/2024 4:27:00 PM

You sure have a lot of identities GW… I thank all of you for your visit. ;-)

Bill Baker

Date: 2/7/2024 6:11:00 PM

Fun read and a dynamite last line! Thanks for sharing this gruesome tale of the hungry owl the mouse did impel. Engaging poetry, my friend. Write On! Bill

Terry Flood
Date: 2/9/2024 4:25:00 PM

Thanks, Bill. I clearly remember the expression ‘Weremouse’ popping into my head, but I’m blowed if I can remember where I was or what inspired the notion. Glad you enjoyed. Terry

Beryl Edmonds

Date: 2/7/2024 4:03:00 PM

Enjoyed the story/poem of the mouse and the moon, and the picture you’ve painted is fantastic too. Beryl

Terry Flood
Date: 2/7/2024 4:06:00 PM

Thanks, Beryl. Glad you enjoyed. Bit of a David and Goliath theme going on, I think.

Ilene Bauer

Date: 2/7/2024 1:18:00 PM

you had me from the very first line, terry, but the ending was very cool as well (as was everything in between!)

Terry Flood
Date: 2/7/2024 2:38:00 PM

Thank you, Ilene. Might seem ill-timed with Halloween so far away but I wasn't gonna hang on to it for nine months ;-) Glad you enjoyed my little tale of ‘tables turned’. Terry