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The mind of a madman

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This poem is a work of fiction and not taken from personal experience.

This is done in the Rubaiyat style. The mind of a madman Lurking deep within my mind, Are demons, sometimes hard to find, They go by many names, And they come out to visit from time to time. The demons are angry with me, Transformed me into what you see, Their names are Anger and Rage, They haunt me deeply. These two emotional fiends, Make me seem awful and mean, That’s not me! It’s these two, they go unseen. Anger and Rage are brothers; Twins, They have hideous faces, evil grins, They fight with each other, all day, I am always the villain; I can’t win. God put me in this room, A nice little padded tomb, They make me bang my head against the wall, ” God, birth me from this horrid womb.” These people come at night, You know, the ones in white, They stick me with needles, They have to tie me down, the demons hate the light. Anger and Rage did a bad thing; awful. One day, they started to rumble, Things got way out of control, Cain killed Abel. Now, they think I’m a danger. Justice is what they hunger, For the bad things these demons did. Why can’t they understand my horror? I want to end this pain, It is time for me to kill Cain, But the people in white won’t let me! They just call me insane. Written By: Samual Ronthorpe © 2011

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012

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Date: 5/20/2013 9:58:00 PM
You are not insane. You are insanely good poem, love your wave of emotions and personification of the emotions making them personal and separate beings. great mind indeed
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Date: 5/20/2013 7:25:00 PM
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Date: 2/22/2012 8:15:00 AM
Thank you for your comments on my poem,Samual.Your poem is well crafted one.It is thought provoking.Lovingly,Fabiyas
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Date: 2/22/2012 7:30:00 AM
I am stopping by to thank you so much for your kind comments on my poetry. I enjoyed reading yours today. Have a wonderful day and please continue sharing your poetry Samual. Love, Carol
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Date: 2/22/2012 5:52:00 AM
Chilling Poem, Samual, but excellent to read, really enjoyed this. harry
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Date: 2/22/2012 3:29:00 AM
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Date: 2/22/2012 12:56:00 AM
i haven't done a rubaiyat for a long while, samual, and this enthralling piece gives much inspiration to revisit this form...a fine, eerie write with such depth and poetic artistry.. beautiful!.. :) huggs!
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Date: 2/21/2012 4:57:00 PM
I have never read a Rubaiyet style poem, its rather dark expressed story poem, well written, I enjoyed reading it.God bless you. Erich
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Date: 2/21/2012 2:13:00 PM
We all have our 'demons' it is how we chose to deals with them which shows our true character! nice one! [Ahhh a purist LOL..yes like all of us can't write unless there's a contest..I always dislike being asked what contest is this for!] ps being emotional has to have some positive value aye? ;) re the comment on my write. Light & Love
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Date: 2/21/2012 1:44:00 PM
This is an outstanding piece on a theme like this.. and rubaiyat seems to be one of the toughest forms, because of its narrative length and all. You did amazingly well here.. re: chestnut tree, thanks for your kind remarks, glad you liked it. Best wishes, gautami
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Date: 2/21/2012 11:19:00 AM
Wow, excellent, Samual. I am not familiar with this form, but that didn't matter. Anger and rage get us into a lot of trouble. The verse about the demons coming at night to stick you with needles is especially powerful. You're going on my favorite poets' list too. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 2/21/2012 9:29:00 AM
I agree with Rhonda...this would be ideal to enter in the Jeckyl /Hyde contest! such power of emotion! Wow!
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Date: 2/21/2012 9:31:00 AM
And ps.....Samual....I saw your comment on one of my poems, and if I can be of any help, please let me know. (Hope you are not considering leaving the Soup)! You have always been most kind to me and my efforts to write...I have noticed each one, and appreciate more than you might know! Thank you very much as always...Carrie
Date: 2/21/2012 2:07:00 AM
Samual I see a schizophrenic personality in this interesting piece of yours. Nicely written. Your work leads me to read rubaiyat form. Hey thanks for reading my work. Dalila
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Date: 2/20/2012 11:12:00 PM
This would be great for the Jeckyl and Hyde contest. I think I remember reading you don't enter them much, but this would be a winner, I'm sure. I really enjoyed the form (which I have never read before) and the content. Thanks for reading my poems and giving such wonderful feedback. You have been very encouraging. Blessings, Rhonda
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Date: 2/20/2012 10:50:00 PM
This is the first example of a rubaiyat poem I have ever seen on the soup. You have expressed yourself quite well with this style.
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Date: 2/20/2012 7:38:00 PM
Brilliant poem samual, love it, best wishes, love Elizabeth
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Date: 2/20/2012 6:29:00 PM
Are you kidding me????? This is insanely stunning pal! Wow! I think I am provoked to write a poem on insanity, too. Thanks for inspiring and for your uplifting comment on my poem In My Nightmare I wore a Wedding Gown. I am overwhelmed! But hey you're such a fantastic poet yourself! keep writing. I am gonna watch for you. =)
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Date: 2/20/2012 6:27:00 PM
I rather enjoyed this, I hope that don't say much about my personality! hehe Thanks for the kind words on my poetry! :) ~Amanda~
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Date: 2/20/2012 5:25:00 PM
good portrayal of an insane person, Sam. I found this very interesting to read.
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Date: 2/20/2012 4:52:00 PM
very bloody goood ol mate, sidestep dem white coats, spring on ya skates, flash off into the night, love your poem a great delight, look out it's bloody cain:) orright...
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Date: 2/20/2012 1:57:00 PM
Creative way to write about these two human emtional that uncontrolled cause all kinds of problems..Enjoyed reading ..Sara
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