The Midnight Train

Feeling like a lost soul I sit, as the train rocks me to and fro 
the woman next to me is jovial and pleasant, with a glow   

We  chat and pass the hours sharing amicably without restraint
then she tells me she is heading for London to marry, oh how quaint 

Perhaps your marriage will be blessed from heaven?  this I say 
as the gentlemen across from me smiles, cool as the month of May 

I can see from his polished shoes and his gray fedora hat 
that he's a  man of well to do, much accustomed to small pratt 

Later in the evening as I sip my tea with clotted cream 
I notice how he stares at me, as if I were a dream 

Feeling lonely and quiet daring I invite him to sit down 
it is then that I do notice, that his eyes are chestnut brown 

"Going to London to visit my grandma" I say, "she lives by the sea" 
"I can escort you Mademoiselle," he says, then tips his hat at me.  

 Chose # 3  a passenger on a train
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Date: 10/2/2023 2:00:00 AM
Well composed. All the best
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Date: 9/25/2023 11:17:00 PM
Loved this gem Mystic!!!!
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Date: 9/26/2023 3:38:00 AM
Thank you Arthur God bless you
Date: 9/25/2023 8:22:00 PM
Woah, this is brilliant storytelling dear Rose! I truly loved reading this as it captivated my heart and created an interesting ambience... Wow! And the wordplay has been so precisely done with impactful imagery.. And I particularly love that ending with. 'Mademoiselle' adds a special touch.. :) sending love
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Date: 9/26/2023 3:38:00 AM
thank you for always taking the time to leave a brilliant comment Hiya. I appreciate you : )
Date: 9/25/2023 6:43:00 PM
Mademoiselle say's it all.
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Date: 9/26/2023 3:38:00 AM
Smile, yes it does T S, thanks for the visit :)
Date: 9/25/2023 12:02:00 PM
- Congratulations on your lovely winning poem, Vie Rose :) - hugs
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Date: 9/26/2023 3:37:00 AM
thank you so much for reading and commenting love
Date: 9/25/2023 5:51:00 AM
This is brilliant storytelling, one of those writes that i ddnt want it to finish, so captivating and your descriptive flow is seamless. Imagery at its finest. Do you write alot of stories? And this one sounds like there will be more to come! So good! I loved reading this.
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Date: 9/26/2023 3:36:00 AM
Yes I wrote a long one for a competition for seniors, it rated high but didn't win, if you want to read it please message me on soup, love
Date: 9/25/2023 2:00:00 AM
wonderful,scenery in a british train, so special trains there, sentiments should always prevail, when i was younger, trains were full of surprises, like this emotionnal poem, thank you Rose for your win,
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Date: 9/26/2023 3:35:00 AM
I always loved trains too Yann, thank you for your lovely comment: )
Date: 9/24/2023 8:37:00 PM
Congratulations on your win, Vienna . Such a pleasant poem of friends meeting on a train for the first time and sharing their lives. Many blessings to you
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Date: 9/26/2023 3:35:00 AM
Thank you Eve, honored that you loved it, have a blessed day dear friend :)
Date: 9/24/2023 1:23:00 PM
You are a great story teller. I was engaged from start to end and left wanting to read more! Good job!
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Date: 9/24/2023 2:16:00 PM
Glad you enjoyed the story Karen God bless u
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