L'Nass Shango Poet Haiku

The Map

Glacial ice melting
The climate suddenly changes
Old relationships.

When the blue jay sings
Listen how wide it ranges
The boundary of spring.

After rain rainbow
Thunder makes the coastland smile
Faith provides the oil.

So I map landscapes
With audacity to see
Change, a boomerang.

I search through petals
To find a woman's soft heart
Felt a bumbled sting

No bridge left to cross
Love drowns everything in tears
So the cuckoo sings

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Tyesha Ehigiator April 7, 2009 at 5:54 PM Lovely series of Haiku's...Very unique with incredible images... GB Always, Tyesha

Carrie Richards April 7, 2009 at 5:40 PM You took the haiku to a whole new level, L'nass!! Well done!! ~ Carrie

Nadia Shahwan April 5, 2009 at 2:29 PM Lovely poem. You'd spiced up haiku. All the best.

Ernilando Tugaff April 1, 2009 at 1:12 PM Hi L'nass, once again you hit the nail on the head. A very nice way of using the Haiku. Ernilando

Debbie Guzzi April 1, 2009 at 8:44 AM Touch (melting) Sound (jay sings) Sight (rainbow) ..Earth, Water, Fire/Thunder..good contest entry here sweet one. Thanks for your welcome comments on no Son Shine..my son thought it was sad :(

Gwen Lemmens April 1, 2009 at 3:33 AM Wonderful poetry. I especially like the sudden shift... So I map Landscapes, with audacity to see... change, a boomerang... love it. Greetz Gwen

Deborah Jarrell March 31, 2009 at 10:57 PM This is a unique Haiku. It isrefreshing to read. Just so you'll know, I am the person who wrote cynical murderous man. I am the x-wife, and this was really done to my life and my children's lives in the city of new orleans, mine and my kids lives were stolen, and dangerous, sick things are still going on. Pass the word around the world. I am living worse than a horrow movie life.

Charmaine Chircop March 31, 2009 at 5:30 PM wonderful write

Robin L. Gass March 31, 2009 at 10:57 AM This is beautiful, L'nass! The visuals are stunning and the repetition of the form adds depth and richness. Lovely work! Love, Robin

Cheryl Mccall March 31, 2009 at 8:02 AM I love the boundry of spring Thaks for your kind words on my poetry

Brian Strand March 31, 2009 at 2:42 AM Thanks for your welcome comments today L'nass.Rgds Brian

Sami Al-Khalili March 30, 2009 at 7:17 PM Enjoyed this very much. Love this form of Haiku, we see changes everywhere, from jungles to deserts and deserts to farm, everything is changing. Outstanding write =) Love, Sami.

Sangam Giri March 29, 2009 at 11:50 AM gr8 job i must say it is by you

Lena Townsend March 28, 2009 at 1:27 PM Great writing as usual. Your use of this form is amazing. I always look forward to reading your work it is such a delight. Thank you for all of your kind comments and since today is your birthday I send you a wish of Peace, Love and Light always. Smiles from Lolita~Happy Birthday!

Daver Austin March 28, 2009 at 5:50 AM I am a big fan of the multiple haiku and tanka. This series is beautifully done. Love, daver

Daver Austin March 28, 2009 at 5:48 AM Super poem. I like your use of the senses and the multi-interpretation possible. Love, daver

Belinda Parish March 27, 2009 at 6:40 PM Wonderful series of haikus. Love the imagery. ...thanks for your comment on my write. Belinda

Carolyn Devonshire March 27, 2009 at 8:04 AM Beautiful images and an insightful message, Shango. Love this one!

Nola Perez March 27, 2009 at 6:44 AM O, lovely poem. Thank you. And thank you for commenting on my poem about glasses. For a woman of " l'age certain, mais toujours jeune, j'espere!", and can't see to read without them, I need to keep better track. Right!!!!

Keith Bickerstaffe March 26, 2009 at 11:03 PM A lovely HAIKU series... so much rich imagery with marvelous word use. Well done L'nass! Best wishes, Keith

K K Iloduba Jnr March 26, 2009 at 5:48 PM suave piece.

Autumn Rose Wood March 26, 2009 at 4:29 PM Beautiful.

Abe Lopez March 25, 2009 at 8:34 PM nice series of haikus. the last one I especially like! good job

Lucinda Bulger March 25, 2009 at 7:54 PM Very nice haiku series... It is very warm feeling and I like it alot, shows a bit of wisdom to the seasons. :) Nice job. Lucinda

Jim Wilson March 25, 2009 at 10:00 AM I like the way this sequence covers a wide range of observations yet it holds together. I particularly like the second one, it has a great sense of rhythm.

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