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Glacial ice melting The climate suddenly changes Old relationships. When the blue jay sings Listen how wide it ranges The boundary of spring. After rain rainbow Thunder makes the coastland smile Faith provides the oil. So I map landscapes With audacity to see Change, a boomerang. I search through petals To find a woman's soft heart Felt a bumbled sting No bridge left to cross Love drowns everything in tears So the cuckoo sings

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009




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Date: 4/7/2009 5:54:00 PM
Lovely series of Haiku's...Very unique with incredible images... GB Always, Tyesha
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Date: 4/7/2009 5:40:00 PM
You took the haiku to a whole new level, L'nass!! Well done!! ~ Carrie
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Date: 4/5/2009 2:29:00 PM
Lovely poem. You'd spiced up haiku. All the best.
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Date: 4/1/2009 1:12:00 PM
Hi L'nass, once again you hit the nail on the head. A very nice way of using the Haiku. Ernilando
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Date: 4/1/2009 8:44:00 AM
Touch (melting) Sound (jay sings) Sight (rainbow) ..Earth, Water, Fire/Thunder..good contest entry here sweet one. Thanks for your welcome comments on no Son Shine..my son thought it was sad :(
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Date: 4/1/2009 3:33:00 AM
Wonderful poetry. I especially like the sudden shift... So I map Landscapes, with audacity to see... change, a boomerang... love it. Greetz Gwen
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Date: 3/31/2009 10:57:00 PM
This is a unique Haiku. It isrefreshing to read. Just so you'll know, I am the person who wrote cynical murderous man. I am the x-wife, and this was really done to my life and my children's lives in the city of new orleans, mine and my kids lives were stolen, and dangerous, sick things are still going on. Pass the word around the world. I am living worse than a horrow movie life.
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Date: 3/31/2009 5:30:00 PM
wonderful write
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Date: 3/31/2009 10:57:00 AM
This is beautiful, L'nass! The visuals are stunning and the repetition of the form adds depth and richness. Lovely work! Love, Robin
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Date: 3/31/2009 8:02:00 AM
I love the boundry of spring Thaks for your kind words on my poetry
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Date: 3/31/2009 2:42:00 AM
Thanks for your welcome comments today L'nass.Rgds Brian
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Date: 3/30/2009 7:17:00 PM
Enjoyed this very much. Love this form of Haiku, we see changes everywhere, from jungles to deserts and deserts to farm, everything is changing. Outstanding write =) Love, Sami.
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Date: 3/29/2009 11:50:00 AM
gr8 job i must say it is by you
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Date: 3/28/2009 1:27:00 PM
Great writing as usual. Your use of this form is amazing. I always look forward to reading your work it is such a delight. Thank you for all of your kind comments and since today is your birthday I send you a wish of Peace, Love and Light always. Smiles from Lolita~Happy Birthday!
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Date: 3/28/2009 5:50:00 AM
I am a big fan of the multiple haiku and tanka. This series is beautifully done. Love, daver
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Date: 3/28/2009 5:48:00 AM
Super poem. I like your use of the senses and the multi-interpretation possible. Love, daver
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Date: 3/27/2009 6:40:00 PM
Wonderful series of haikus. Love the imagery. ...thanks for your comment on my write. Belinda
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Date: 3/27/2009 8:04:00 AM
Beautiful images and an insightful message, Shango. Love this one!
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Date: 3/27/2009 6:44:00 AM
O, lovely poem. Thank you. And thank you for commenting on my poem about glasses. For a woman of " l'age certain, mais toujours jeune, j'espere!", and can't see to read without them, I need to keep better track. Right!!!!
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Date: 3/26/2009 11:03:00 PM
A lovely HAIKU series... so much rich imagery with marvelous word use. Well done L'nass! Best wishes, Keith
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Date: 3/26/2009 5:48:00 PM
suave piece.
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Date: 3/26/2009 4:29:00 PM
Beautiful.
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Date: 3/25/2009 8:34:00 PM
nice series of haikus. the last one I especially like! good job
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Date: 3/25/2009 7:54:00 PM
Very nice haiku series... It is very warm feeling and I like it alot, shows a bit of wisdom to the seasons. :) Nice job. Lucinda
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Date: 3/25/2009 10:00:00 AM
I like the way this sequence covers a wide range of observations yet it holds together. I particularly like the second one, it has a great sense of rhythm.
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