The Map

Glacial ice melting The climate suddenly changes Old relationships. When the blue jay sings Listen how wide it ranges The boundary of spring. After rain rainbow Thunder makes the coastland smile Faith provides the oil. So I map landscapes With audacity to see Change, a boomerang. I search through petals To find a woman's soft heart Felt a bumbled sting No bridge left to cross Love drowns everything in tears So the cuckoo sings

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Tyesha Ehigiator

Date: 4/7/2009 5:54:00 PM

Lovely series of Haiku's...Very unique with incredible images... GB Always, Tyesha

Carrie Richards

Date: 4/7/2009 5:40:00 PM

You took the haiku to a whole new level, L'nass!! Well done!! ~ Carrie

Nadia Shahwan

Date: 4/5/2009 2:29:00 PM

Lovely poem. You'd spiced up haiku. All the best.

Ernilando Tugaff

Date: 4/1/2009 1:12:00 PM

Hi L'nass, once again you hit the nail on the head. A very nice way of using the Haiku. Ernilando

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 4/1/2009 8:44:00 AM

Touch (melting) Sound (jay sings) Sight (rainbow) ..Earth, Water, Fire/Thunder..good contest entry here sweet one. Thanks for your welcome comments on no Son Shine..my son thought it was sad :(

Gwen Lemmens

Date: 4/1/2009 3:33:00 AM

Wonderful poetry. I especially like the sudden shift... So I map Landscapes, with audacity to see... change, a boomerang... love it. Greetz Gwen

Deborah Jarrell

Date: 3/31/2009 10:57:00 PM

This is a unique Haiku. It isrefreshing to read. Just so you'll know, I am the person who wrote cynical murderous man. I am the x-wife, and this was really done to my life and my children's lives in the city of new orleans, mine and my kids lives were stolen, and dangerous, sick things are still going on. Pass the word around the world. I am living worse than a horrow movie life.

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 3/31/2009 5:30:00 PM

wonderful write

Robin L. Gass

Date: 3/31/2009 10:57:00 AM

This is beautiful, L'nass! The visuals are stunning and the repetition of the form adds depth and richness. Lovely work! Love, Robin

Cheryl Mccall

Date: 3/31/2009 8:02:00 AM

I love the boundry of spring Thaks for your kind words on my poetry

Brian Strand

Date: 3/31/2009 2:42:00 AM

Thanks for your welcome comments today L'nass.Rgds Brian

Sami Al-Khalili

Date: 3/30/2009 7:17:00 PM

Enjoyed this very much. Love this form of Haiku, we see changes everywhere, from jungles to deserts and deserts to farm, everything is changing. Outstanding write =) Love, Sami.

Sangam Giri

Date: 3/29/2009 11:50:00 AM

gr8 job i must say it is by you

Lena Townsend

Date: 3/28/2009 1:27:00 PM

Great writing as usual. Your use of this form is amazing. I always look forward to reading your work it is such a delight. Thank you for all of your kind comments and since today is your birthday I send you a wish of Peace, Love and Light always. Smiles from Lolita~Happy Birthday!

Daver Austin

Date: 3/28/2009 5:50:00 AM

I am a big fan of the multiple haiku and tanka. This series is beautifully done. Love, daver

Daver Austin

Date: 3/28/2009 5:48:00 AM

Super poem. I like your use of the senses and the multi-interpretation possible. Love, daver

Belinda Parish

Date: 3/27/2009 6:40:00 PM

Wonderful series of haikus. Love the imagery. ...thanks for your comment on my write. Belinda

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 3/27/2009 8:04:00 AM

Beautiful images and an insightful message, Shango. Love this one!

Nola Perez

Date: 3/27/2009 6:44:00 AM

O, lovely poem. Thank you. And thank you for commenting on my poem about glasses. For a woman of " l'age certain, mais toujours jeune, j'espere!", and can't see to read without them, I need to keep better track. Right!!!!

Keith Bickerstaffe

Date: 3/26/2009 11:03:00 PM

A lovely HAIKU series... so much rich imagery with marvelous word use. Well done L'nass! Best wishes, Keith

K K Iloduba Jnr

Date: 3/26/2009 5:48:00 PM

suave piece.

Autumn Rose Wood

Date: 3/26/2009 4:29:00 PM

Beautiful.

Abe Lopez

Date: 3/25/2009 8:34:00 PM

nice series of haikus. the last one I especially like! good job

Lucinda Bulger

Date: 3/25/2009 7:54:00 PM

Very nice haiku series... It is very warm feeling and I like it alot, shows a bit of wisdom to the seasons. :) Nice job. Lucinda

Jim Wilson

Date: 3/25/2009 10:00:00 AM

I like the way this sequence covers a wide range of observations yet it holds together. I particularly like the second one, it has a great sense of rhythm.