The Man Who Dreamed His Life Away

THE MAN WHO DREAMED HIS LIFE AWAY

When I was young the Moon was lifted    
Hung with tacks and thread 
On a mystical ceiling of dreams

She in her skyward place    I in my bed
We lay so tightly wed    we two sure lovers
That all my years flew round    passed us by
While from out our eyes some angels gathered dust

At length    proud man at work by day    by night
His busy light in flood on tissue walls   
Tried describe to she and me a smoking glory in steel

And a prophet raved – “Hear!    Heed!
Faith is the one checkered King
On this fantasian board a playing.”

But I    like my Moon    bearing such pale light
Long dead    a mere reflection of life
Was old and could not rise

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011



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Date: 12/23/2011 10:05:00 AM
quite marvelous. Thanks.
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Date: 11/7/2011 5:25:00 PM
As a child I was fascinated by the moon, Daver. "Moon" was my first word and I swear I remember exactly when I said it. Faith does help many of us get through tough times, even though there are false prophets. A very sad and compelling last verse, my friend. Thank you for sharing this "journey" through your life. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 11/6/2011 4:55:00 PM
Well, you have good taste - if I could choose what to dream with, it would surely be the moon. So remote and mysterious. Love the imagery Daver. Hugs, Lizzie
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Date: 11/6/2011 3:15:00 PM
Well expressed Daver...(enjoyed..
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Date: 11/4/2011 8:51:00 AM
Sad! Yet majestic, sir.
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Date: 11/4/2011 12:14:00 AM
Awwww...so much missed opportunity!! Makes me wanna not waste too much time, Daver! Inspiring is what U do best! .....I want u to write me a poem on Lincoln for February so put your thinkin cap on...lol. Gwendolen
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Date: 11/3/2011 9:53:00 PM
wow, Daver, so tinged with sadness. Like my recent post of my unique lines of poetry for PD"s contest. focusing on the plight of getting old! I just loved that final verse here.
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Date: 11/3/2011 3:10:00 PM
* “Thank You Daver * For The Kind Visit * Have A Wonderful Day * Always * Sarah.” *
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Date: 11/3/2011 2:38:00 PM
Enjoyed reading your work..I could go several ways in the interpertation of this one which equals great writing..Sara
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Date: 11/3/2011 1:36:00 PM
Brilliant, Daver. The prophets are sometimes false, but faith is the one thing that helps us get through the chess game of life. YOU certainly have not "dreamed (your) life away," Daver. Look at your contributions to the arts and be assured you left your mark. I predict you'll outlive me because of your perspective on life -- you know how to have fun and make a living in the arts. Awesome poem, my friend. Love, Carolyn (Look for a new "scample" partner LOL)
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Date: 11/3/2011 11:41:00 AM
I am just loving this poem, Daver :) As I read it, I was thinking, "fave"--You reeled me in with your title and I didn't let go til the last line-- hugs to you :D
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Date: 11/3/2011 11:36:00 AM
* “Owww, Tis Very Nice to Behold Your Gifted Verse Once More * My Dear Precious Daver * A Rare Quality & This Gems Reflection Fits Securely Its Mold * But What Is Wasted Amid A Blink When That Eternity Does So Wait * Very Beautiful * Always * Sarah.” *
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