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The Man of the House

You left without saying goodbye
and now I'll never know what it was like,
to have you teach me, eye to eye.
You left without saying goodbye.
Now who will show me how to ride a bike
or chide me when I tell a lie?
You left without saying goodbye
and now I'll never know what it was like.



NOTE: Fictional.

Yet again, another old poem, but have some newer ones in the back-burner. There are so many things to write about, if only one is in the mood and state of mind to organize those thoughts into something tangible and readable.

Copyright © Timothy Hicks | Year Posted 2016

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Suzanne Delaney Date: 5/14/2016 11:30:00 PM Nice triolet, Timothy: Was thinking about you today. Getting ready for the packers. In a few weeks we'll be flying out of here. So many details to take care of. The Muse will return again when you are settled. Mine has taken a hike on me, often lol. SuZ Login to Reply Timothy Hicks Date: 5/18/2016 12:13:00 AM The Muse comes and goes ... I suppose we must make the best of it. When it gets closer to crunch time is when things get really hectic ... hope you can be settled in soon and all the craziness will soon be over.

Eve Roper Date: 5/14/2016 8:40:00 PM Love your poem, Timothy, Congratulations on Poem of the day :) Login to Reply Timothy Hicks Date: 5/18/2016 12:07:00 AM Long time no see, Eve ... thanks for visiting :)

Janet Runyan Date: 5/14/2016 4:51:00 PM So good. Especially for not being a true story. I heard a blues musician say the blues writers can get inspiration from anywhere, they aren't just sad people, they can take from other sad people. I think that's true for people who write poetry as well and you did a really good job Login to Reply Timothy Hicks Date: 5/18/2016 12:02:00 AM Why thank you Janet, for giving me such an insightful comment to read. Yes, I definitely agree with you ... we can envision ourselves in so many different situations (some we've never been in) that it feels real to the reader ... that's the blessing and the curse to the writer.

Cindi Rockwell Date: 5/14/2016 3:13:00 PM Nice write. Congrats on POTD! ~Cindi~ Login to Reply Timothy Hicks Date: 5/17/2016 11:53:00 PM Thank you Cindi!

Manmath Dalei Date: 5/14/2016 1:32:00 PM Timothy, I am very excited to read a new poem from u after a long gap. A big congrats from me on ur POTD............//:) hugs Login to Reply Timothy Hicks Date: 5/17/2016 11:47:00 PM That means a lot to me, Manmath ... I thank you for your kind support and encouragement!

Connie Marcum Wong Date: 5/14/2016 1:21:00 PM Congratulations on being honored with POTD Timothy! ; ) Login to Reply Timothy Hicks Date: 5/17/2016 11:40:00 PM Thanks Connie!

Sandra Haight Date: 5/14/2016 1:17:00 PM Sad but well-written Triolet, Timothy. Congratulations on Poem Of The Day! Sandra Login to Reply Timothy Hicks Date: 5/17/2016 11:31:00 PM Thanks Sandra!

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 5/14/2016 12:54:00 PM - Congratulations with your "old" poem that became "new" today, Tim :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Login to Reply Timothy Hicks Date: 5/17/2016 11:23:00 PM Thanks Anne the Sunshine Smile :) You just never know when POTD will show up ... I sure wasn't expecting it ...

Jan Allison Date: 5/14/2016 12:25:00 PM Sad poem Tim so glad its fictional for you - for other's it is a stark reality congrats on POD:-) hugs Jan xx Login to Reply Timothy Hicks Date: 5/17/2016 11:18:00 PM All too true, Jan. Thanks for the stop and the congrats ... was pleasantly surprised ...

Eileen Manassian Date: 5/14/2016 10:31:00 AM Congrats, dear one. Hugs Login to Reply Timothy Hicks Date: 5/17/2016 11:12:00 PM Thanks again Eileen!

Charlie Smith Date: 5/14/2016 10:20:00 AM Unfortunately not uncommon for too many young men. Congratulations Master Tin for POTD honors... Login to Reply Timothy Hicks Date: 5/17/2016 11:12:00 PM Thanks Charlie ... I for sure wasn't expecting to get POTD!

Richard Lamoureux Date: 5/13/2016 6:13:00 PM All your pieces fall in the category of tangible and readable and we ar the benefactors. Login to Reply Timothy Hicks Date: 5/17/2016 11:05:00 PM Richard ... you just made my night ... thank you very much! :)

Paul Callus Date: 5/13/2016 3:58:00 PM A lovely and expressive triolet, touching, too. The loss of a parent at a young age leaves a big gap in a person's life. ~ Re Eileen's comment, what about 'chide'...Regards // paul Login to Reply Timothy Hicks Date: 5/17/2016 10:56:00 PM Thanks very much for your suggestion, Paul ... I like the word "chide" a lot better :) Thanks for the stop, as always, my friend.

Laura Breidenthal Date: 5/13/2016 2:17:00 AM Excellent one, Timothy. The repetition there makes the words even more powerful. To leave without a goodbye, that's a painful thing. Good job in illuminating that grief one may experience. Always, Laura Login to Reply Timothy Hicks Date: 5/17/2016 10:34:00 PM Thank you Laura! I don't do triolets very often, but they are fun for a change of pace ...

Red Fiery Date: 5/13/2016 1:10:00 AM A lot to ponder here ! Timothy, it's great to read your poems again...the words are just perfect and it flows brilliantly ! Hugs Red Login to Reply Timothy Hicks Date: 5/17/2016 10:08:00 PM Thanks Red! It's good to be back posting again ... hopefully I can keep it up :)

Andrea Dietrich Date: 5/12/2016 8:22:00 PM well, I'm glad it is fictional!! I like this older poem you are showing us. How many triolets have you done now? Yes, the list of what we can write about is ENDLESS Login to Reply Timothy Hicks Date: 5/17/2016 6:59:00 PM Perhaps about 6 or so ... haven't posted but a few, I believe. Thanks for visiting, Andrea.

James Marshall Goff Date: 5/12/2016 7:04:00 PM Timothy....the heaviness of this poem is such that I was almost glad to quickly finish! As one can feel the emotion, your expertise was succint and then exited....well done! jimbo Login to Reply Timothy Hicks Date: 5/17/2016 6:48:00 PM Thanks for your insightful feedback, my friend ... nice to meet you :)

Tim Smith Date: 5/12/2016 4:34:00 PM It is tough not having a parent there Tim. Even when one is around but it pulled from the family by work or alcohol. Excellent write Login to Reply Timothy Hicks Date: 5/17/2016 12:19:00 AM Very true, Tim ... parents can be absent in more ways than one. Thanks for reading and stopping by.

Eileen Manassian Date: 5/12/2016 3:33:00 PM Nice to read you again, Tim. Nice flow to your words....Scorn ...in the sixth line got to me. Would a softer word work as well? Just some thoughts. Hugs Login to Reply Timothy Hicks Date: 5/16/2016 11:56:00 PM Thanks for pointing that out, Eileen ... I'm taking Paul's suggestion and changed it to "chide" instead ... I think it's a softer word, more fitting for what I was going for.

Lin Lane Date: 5/12/2016 3:13:00 PM Don't organize them...just let em' flow. Nice to see you, Tim. Login to Reply Timothy Hicks Date: 5/16/2016 9:10:00 PM Nice to see you, too, Lin ... good advice. Organization is for filing cabinets ;)

Charmaine Chircop Date: 5/12/2016 3:09:00 PM Tucked on my heart- strings Timothy.Well done.. A fave.>> Charma Login to Reply Timothy Hicks Date: 5/16/2016 8:59:00 PM Thanks Charmaine for the lovely comment ... I don't often write in this form, so I'm happy it was well received.