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Written inspired by the song " the look in your eye" by Glenn Hughes for the contest  sponsored by Robert James L

The Look In Your Eye

When the sky is a 
   sequestered sanctuary,
and the clouds croon 
for sinking star-beams,
listen to the euphoric hymns of silence,
for seething storms throned 
beneath rainbow castles
shall never obscure the 
crystalline colors of compassion,
amidst thickened fangs 
of dwelling darkness,
constantly trying to 
     seize peacock pigments
within violet-blue seas
     of sequined sentiments…

O’ beloved white rose~
perfumed in vanilla love,
let not the wolf-spider gaze,
mirroring envy within black widow hearts,
  confuse your diamond vision.
It’s just another day,
  enveloped in a warm sakura sunrise, 
there the gales of greed 
   looming in ghostly flecks, 
question the redolence of rivulets 
   behind your veiled vigor.

There’s no reason to fear
  when hope flows and drifts
like comets flying as fluttering butterflies
across the butterscotch horizon.
Remember, when the sage sun 
seeps into foggy crevices,
and deserted dunes
   speak in ashen accents,
their choice of words do not define 
the rhythm of your seraphic symphony.
Your merlot wine spirit is 
the whimsical wand turning unspoken
  tales into wildflower wishes.
There’s no need for an alchemist
  nor a sorcerer to concoct 
spells that rearrange constellations,
as your voice swirls in magical mists.
You and I, are every last thing
we need to conquer the bewitching
     perimeters we truly deserve.

Tonight, when my lids rest upon the 
dreamscape of daffodils and dahlias,
   I see that look in your eye.
I ponder, is it me that you long for?
Am I the unfading ink 
   within your saccharine sonnets?
I yearn to be the one you talk 
about in sweet seclusion.
This trembling canvas longs 
for no other skin to caress the acrylic 
 edges of my aching soul,
and I do not need 
the wind and water
    beneath whistling willows
    to write my destiny 
             in green and gold. 

We don’t need shades of shadows
following our intertwined silhouettes,
yet I let these metaphors 
merge with the heat of 
 your passionate presence,
as you and I break through 
the landscapes of grief
  with mutual attraction 
  like the mulberry rays 
         between the moon and earth.. 
Copyright © | Year Posted 2024

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Liguori Avatar
September 9, 2024 at 8:13 PM
‘ and I do not need the wind and water beneath whistling willows to write my destiny in green and gold’. And your destiny shall be written in green and gold! I love it. This was a good contender for first… but happily made it to second place. I always love reading your poems. Great job. Keep up the excellent writing.
Dietrich Avatar
August 18, 2024 at 12:05 AM
Wow, you really got inspired by that song. I wonder if it's the song I am thinking of about eyes,but what I am thinking of doesn't suit Glenn's style. This is so romantic.. Big congrats, Ink, now you need to do a new Glenn poem.
La France Avatar
August 16, 2024 at 8:46 PM
Ink, beautiful writing, excellent win, congratulations, Constance
Croft Avatar
August 16, 2024 at 7:17 PM
Big congratulations on your win! what a beautiful poem.
George Avatar
August 9, 2024 at 3:48 AM
Love is a beautiful thing sometimes. With love, a lot is overcome. And there's nothing two souls bonded cannot achieve if they want. I also love your longing and yearning for love, the rhetorical questions asked. What is love if those questions aren't asked? We all want to know if we stir up the butterflies in our lover's stomach or if they would die or live for us. "You and I, are every last thing we need to conquer the bewitching perimeters we truly deserve." Very powerful lines Dear Ink.
Buhagiar Avatar
August 3, 2024 at 1:42 AM
I cannot sing with your poem if that was the intention. I am not a fan of Hughes. Still, I wish you the best of luck and as usual marvel at your poetic talent. I am not much in contests these days. Great metaphors and alliteration embellish your poem. A love story that intrigues.
Greenhough Avatar
August 2, 2024 at 9:52 PM
A passionate landscape carries me to its rich depths where grief can bind two people. The initial hesitancy adds to the hopeful conclusion. This was a very delightful poem.
Alhemaidy Avatar
August 2, 2024 at 5:52 AM
Very nice!
Empress Avatar
August 3, 2024 at 7:00 AM
Thank you so much AA
George Avatar
August 2, 2024 at 5:23 AM
Wow.... ! I am speechless, not equipped with enough words to comment on the beauty of this poem. I can only say.... this is unmatched and goes right into my FAVE. Some expressions like 'peacock pigments within violet blue seas, sakura sunrise, saccharine sunsets, sequined sentiments' are typical of yours with no peers to come closer in beauty. "There’s no need for an alchemist nor a sorcerer to concoct spells that rearrange constellations, as your voice swirls in magical mists." So powerful and romantic. As you come to the end of the poem, an unbeatable possessiveness takes hold of you ."This trembling canvas longs for no other skin to caress the acrylic edges of my aching soul,"
Empress Avatar
August 3, 2024 at 6:27 AM
Dear sweet valsa, your comments really make my heart full! So sincere ans generous and i have not enough words to thank you really . Truly grateful
Kendrick Avatar
August 1, 2024 at 6:28 PM
Reads like a good contender for the contest to me. Way to go. Some very interesting lines especially in the last stanza. Sara K
Empress Avatar
August 3, 2024 at 6:20 AM
Thank you so much dear Sara
Parker Avatar
August 1, 2024 at 4:07 PM
The majesty of your words are a sensual feast to be read and felt by lovers who have crossed the shadowed moods of desire, finding the compassionate eyes of intimacy a welcomed pool to drown in...
Empress Avatar
August 3, 2024 at 6:06 AM
Your comments are as poetic as your poem dear frederick thank you so much for your kind comment
Onclaud Avatar
August 1, 2024 at 3:46 PM
with rich content and flamed mood, this piece is near epic , ink. ..your images slay!
Empress Avatar
August 3, 2024 at 6:04 AM
Awn so kind of you thank you dear nette always
Hind Avatar
August 1, 2024 at 2:34 PM
This is powerful, Ink; wise to your core. With a sweet tone... gives hope, just beautiful....<3 hugs
Empress Avatar
August 3, 2024 at 6:03 AM
Thank you so much sweet paige
Onpaper Avatar
August 1, 2024 at 1:46 PM
Oooo this piece is absolute smash!!! sky is a sequestered sanctuary, and the clouds croon for sinking star-beams.. the flow of elegance !! sky is a sequestered sanctuary, and the clouds croon for sinking star-beams, mmm butterscotch horizon. dreamscape of daffodils and dahlias, look at how you making the elements bend to ur will!! trembling canvas longs for no other skin to caress the acrylic edges of my aching soul, awwwn me too!! metaphors merge with the heat of your passionate presence, Ooo damn papi!!! This piece flows like a perfect breeze!! Gorgeous
Empress Avatar
August 3, 2024 at 6:03 AM
Awn thats so sweet of you papi! Thank you
One Avatar
August 1, 2024 at 1:22 PM
Woah... You always do these Glenn Hughes contests so well.. You must be a massive fan.. No wonder the judge loves them so much... Not sure I will write now, as this one looks like a winner ;). I like how your poem shifts to a more personal and intimate tone, exploring a deep longing and connection. The imagery of "dreamscape of daffodils and dahlias" suggests a peaceful and beautiful internal world. Your contemplation of being the "unfading ink" in the beloved's "saccharine sonnets" conveys a desire for a lasting and meaningful presence in their life... I hope your ink never fades in his or her life... Your metaphors as always are brilliant.. The poem is a lush and emotive exploration of beauty, hope, love, and the complexities of the human experience.
Empress Avatar
August 1, 2024 at 1:30 PM
Biggest fan after fanning you haha
Rhymes Avatar
August 1, 2024 at 1:16 PM
Wow… it’s been a while since I wrote something like this …. It’s truly magnetic . Love it
One Avatar
August 1, 2024 at 1:18 PM
Why don't you write then?
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