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The Leaves Are Gone

Autumn is taking its last breath But the leaves are all raked and gone The bareness reminds me of death As autumn is taking its last breath, Cold winds blowing in, I am bereft No cheer, [well] my account’s overdrawn, Autumn is taking its last breath But the leaves are all raked and gone. The bareness reminds me of death Cold winds blowing in, I am bereft As autumn is taking its last breath, But, the leaves are all raked and gone No cheer, [well] my account's overdrawn, But at least I can see my front lawn! written December 12, 2021 [this is a trionet, a form I invented to combine the triolet and the sonnet. See New Poetry Forms.]

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Anselmo Boles

Date: 12/12/2021 6:12:00 PM

Winter's arrival confirmed, and the cycle of life churns. At least you have a semi-desert looking lawn! Enjoyed it Milt!...ab

L Milton Hankins
Date: 12/12/2021 6:16:00 PM

That's so true, Anselmo. Thanks for your comment.

Bill Baker

Date: 12/12/2021 6:00:00 PM

Nice Triolet, Milt. Congrats on the form. Nice mixture with a sonnet. Good imagery and description in this end of autumn poem. Bill

L Milton Hankins
Date: 12/12/2021 6:17:00 PM

Thanks, Bill. I appreciate your thoughts on the form. Give it a try.

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 12/12/2021 4:50:00 PM

I like your trionet and your explanations of how to write a trionet.

L Milton Hankins
Date: 12/12/2021 5:51:00 PM

I use it when I write a triolet and am just not quite satisfied with it. It basically gives me six lines and a fresh, new line to end with.

Jenna Logan

Date: 12/12/2021 10:39:00 AM

What an intriguing form, and your emotions are shared by many. Congrats on your invented form, Milt.

Jenna Logan
Date: 12/12/2021 11:29:00 AM

Sometimes they get things right.

L Milton Hankins
Date: 12/12/2021 11:19:00 AM

Thank you, Jenna. It wasn't really so complex. I would write a triolet and then feel like it wasn't quite complete. I found this little addition helped me bring them to a conclusion. It was sort of surprising that Poetry Soup recognized it as a New Type of Poetry.