The Laysan Albatross

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Poetic Form: Personified

Inspired: 2023 November 16

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We are mislabeled as sea birds and should be called big birds, like that yellow one but we're not yellow. We never land on land for a year or longer, and we been told that we have known God since he was a little boy. The unfeathered say that for a very long time we're like many fishes in the sea, but now we are like whales. The few of us left, live in the north atolls of Hawaii. There's no other place in the world except for oceans, seas, bays ... forget what I said.

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Ink Empress

Date: 11/17/2023 10:23:00 AM

Ah seabirds, i love how you’ve written this, ah id like to read more about this bird that is found in your island. How creative and intriguing. Your poem flows very well too, and is an excellent personification, i especially loved “ The unfeathered say that for a very long time we're like many fishes in the sea, but now we are like whales. “ very interesting! Goodluck for the contest dear poet. Always a pleasure reading you. Sending you light

Hilo Poet
Date: 11/17/2023 8:06:00 PM

Alas, Ink Empress. I wait for judgment day as our days are no longer numbered, for the forces in play shadow us. At that exacting hour, there'll be nothing hidden beneath the sun. I'm in the midst of the light with gladness. Aloha, William