JC Brul Poet Free verse

The Last Petal

Walking barefooted
along the shoreline,
in one purple sunset;
The tepid seawater
like summer kisses
on my weary feet.

I sighed...
As I took the scarlet hyacinth 
attached to my rosy ears
and began to pluck each petal
One by one...

He loves me, 
He loves me not; 
He loves me...

The last one...
I couldn't pluck, 
So closed my eyes
like a clamshell in distress;
When I opened my eyes
the last petal
vanished in my hand.

3RD PLACE
BRIAN'S SELECT J, any form, any theme
Contest Judged:  6/16/2020 7:32:00 AM

4th PLACE
N-A re-run 7
Contest Judged:  6/15/2020 9:24:00 AM
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Mahtab Bangalee June 18, 2020 at 6:10 AM He loves me, He loves me not; He loves me... The last one... I couldn't pluck,...fabulous expression....great pleasure to read

Aditi Mishra June 17, 2020 at 2:13 AM I love how you pictured the hyacinth and then deciphered the interpretation of layers with an open end. This is gorgeous! Congratulations on your win :)

Sam Kauffman June 15, 2020 at 6:48 PM Love the mystical - mysterious ending JCB. You set up the last line so well with beautiful, pensive and romantic imagery. Congratulations on your win in John's contest!

John Hamilton June 15, 2020 at 10:25 AM Nice write JCB, this time you got a nice placement, thanks for entering!

Richard Lamoureux May 31, 2020 at 9:01 AM Love can do that sometimes. Thanks for your visit.

Kim Rodrigues May 29, 2020 at 9:48 PM Well done, JCB! A mystery.

Jc Hawkens May 27, 2020 at 9:38 PM Such grace is in this expression. Beautiful, JCB JC Brul May 28, 2020 at 5:27 AM Thanks JC for the appreciation. MOre power.

Malabika Ray Choudhury May 27, 2020 at 6:44 AM Wow! Love this romantic poem! To my favourites! JC Brul May 28, 2020 at 5:28 AM ohh, thank you dear poet Mala for the heart-warming comment and for putting it to your faves.

Gershon Wolf May 26, 2020 at 3:42 PM Very nice! Love the denouement. Hurrah! :) gw JC Brul May 28, 2020 at 5:24 AM Thanks dear poet Gershon for your inspiring comment.

Arturo Michael May 26, 2020 at 8:29 AM Well done...You left it a mystery... JC Brul May 28, 2020 at 5:24 AM Thank you dear poet Arturo for your visit .

Vijay Pandit May 26, 2020 at 7:30 AM Loved the mystique of your poem--a tender touch, JCB! JC Brul May 26, 2020 at 7:44 AM Thank you dear poet Vijay for such heartwarming feedback.

John Watt May 26, 2020 at 1:03 AM JCB, I love the magic and mystique of this. The rose petals make it so romantic and it's easy to relate to the familiar "he loves me, he loves me not". Love the open-ended ending. Well-done! JC Brul May 26, 2020 at 1:08 AM Thank you dear poet John for your insightful feedback..More power!