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The Last Petal

Walking barefooted along the shoreline, in one purple sunset; The tepid seawater like summer kisses on my weary feet. I sighed... As I took the scarlet hyacinth attached to my rosy ears and began to pluck each petal One by one... He loves me, He loves me not; He loves me... The last one... I couldn't pluck, So closed my eyes like a clamshell in distress; When I opened my eyes the last petal vanished in my hand. 3RD PLACE BRIAN'S SELECT J, any form, any theme Contest Judged: 6/16/2020 7:32:00 AM 4th PLACE N-A re-run 7 Contest Judged: 6/15/2020 9:24:00 AM Sponsored by: John Hamilton |

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Mahtab Bangalee

Date: 6/18/2020 6:10:00 AM

He loves me, He loves me not; He loves me... The last one... I couldn't pluck,...fabulous expression....great pleasure to read

Aditi Mishra

Date: 6/17/2020 2:13:00 AM

I love how you pictured the hyacinth and then deciphered the interpretation of layers with an open end. This is gorgeous! Congratulations on your win :)

Sam Kauffman

Date: 6/15/2020 6:48:00 PM

Love the mystical - mysterious ending JCB. You set up the last line so well with beautiful, pensive and romantic imagery. Congratulations on your win in John's contest!

John Hamilton

Date: 6/15/2020 10:25:00 AM

Nice write JCB, this time you got a nice placement, thanks for entering!

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 5/31/2020 9:01:00 AM

Love can do that sometimes. Thanks for your visit.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 5/29/2020 9:48:00 PM

Well done, JCB! A mystery.

Jc Hawkens

Date: 5/27/2020 9:38:00 PM

Such grace is in this expression. Beautiful, JCB

Jcb Brul
Date: 5/28/2020 5:27:00 AM

Thanks JC for the appreciation. MOre power.

Malabika Ray Choudhury

Date: 5/27/2020 6:44:00 AM

Wow! Love this romantic poem! To my favourites!

Jcb Brul
Date: 5/28/2020 5:28:00 AM

ohh, thank you dear poet Mala for the heart-warming comment and for putting it to your faves.

Gershon Wolf

Date: 5/26/2020 3:42:00 PM

Very nice! Love the denouement. Hurrah! :) gw

Jcb Brul
Date: 5/28/2020 5:24:00 AM

Thanks dear poet Gershon for your inspiring comment.

Arturo Michael

Date: 5/26/2020 8:29:00 AM

Well done...You left it a mystery...

Jcb Brul
Date: 5/28/2020 5:24:00 AM

Thank you dear poet Arturo for your visit .

Vijay Pandit

Date: 5/26/2020 7:30:00 AM

Loved the mystique of your poem--a tender touch, JCB!

Jcb Brul
Date: 5/26/2020 7:44:00 AM

Thank you dear poet Vijay for such heartwarming feedback.

John Watt

Date: 5/26/2020 1:03:00 AM

JCB, I love the magic and mystique of this. The rose petals make it so romantic and it's easy to relate to the familiar "he loves me, he loves me not". Love the open-ended ending. Well-done!

Jcb Brul
Date: 5/26/2020 1:08:00 AM

Thank you dear poet John for your insightful feedback..More power!