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The Last Petal

Walking barefooted along the shoreline, in one purple sunset; The tepid seawater like summer kisses on my weary feet. I sighed... As I took the scarlet hyacinth attached to my rosy ears and began to pluck each petal One by one... He loves me, He loves me not; He loves me... The last one... I couldn't pluck, So closed my eyes like a clamshell in distress; When I opened my eyes the last petal vanished in my hand. 3RD PLACE BRIAN'S SELECT J, any form, any theme Contest Judged: 6/16/2020 7:32:00 AM 4th PLACE N-A re-run 7 Contest Judged: 6/15/2020 9:24:00 AM Sponsored by: John Hamilton |

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Date: 6/18/2020 6:10:00 AM
He loves me, He loves me not; He loves me... The last one... I couldn't pluck,...fabulous expression....great pleasure to read
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Date: 6/17/2020 2:13:00 AM
I love how you pictured the hyacinth and then deciphered the interpretation of layers with an open end. This is gorgeous! Congratulations on your win :)
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Date: 6/15/2020 6:48:00 PM
Love the mystical - mysterious ending JCB. You set up the last line so well with beautiful, pensive and romantic imagery. Congratulations on your win in John's contest!
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Date: 6/15/2020 10:25:00 AM
Nice write JCB, this time you got a nice placement, thanks for entering!
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Date: 5/31/2020 9:01:00 AM
Love can do that sometimes. Thanks for your visit.
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Date: 5/29/2020 9:48:00 PM
Well done, JCB! A mystery.
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Date: 5/27/2020 9:38:00 PM
Such grace is in this expression. Beautiful, JCB
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Date: 5/28/2020 5:27:00 AM
Thanks JC for the appreciation. MOre power.
Date: 5/27/2020 6:44:00 AM
Wow! Love this romantic poem! To my favourites!
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Date: 5/28/2020 5:28:00 AM
ohh, thank you dear poet Mala for the heart-warming comment and for putting it to your faves.
Date: 5/26/2020 3:42:00 PM
Very nice! Love the denouement. Hurrah! :) gw
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Date: 5/28/2020 5:24:00 AM
Thanks dear poet Gershon for your inspiring comment.
Date: 5/26/2020 8:29:00 AM
Well done...You left it a mystery...
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Date: 5/28/2020 5:24:00 AM
Thank you dear poet Arturo for your visit .
Date: 5/26/2020 7:30:00 AM
Loved the mystique of your poem--a tender touch, JCB!
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Date: 5/26/2020 7:44:00 AM
Thank you dear poet Vijay for such heartwarming feedback.
Date: 5/26/2020 1:03:00 AM
JCB, I love the magic and mystique of this. The rose petals make it so romantic and it's easy to relate to the familiar "he loves me, he loves me not". Love the open-ended ending. Well-done!
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Date: 5/26/2020 1:08:00 AM
Thank you dear poet John for your insightful feedback..More power!