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The Last Conversation of a Dying Father To His Son

When I die, take care of your mum, don't stand by my grave to cry I see everything, they say that I'm dead, but I don't sleep, it s a lie You can find me in thousand winds that blow, in the flakes of snow I am in the happiness which falls like rain, I am in the fields of ripening grain I am the bird that sings, I come in dreams to say thousand splendid things I am the rotten night where as you are a morning, you have to live without me 18 June 2018 For the contest " when line six is a perfect fix " Sponsor " Silent one "

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Kai Michael Neumann

Date: 9/26/2018 2:04:00 AM

Wow, that touches me deeply. I never had such a conversation with my late father, which is really sad. To find in a thousand winds that blow...Great write. Thnak you, Kai

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/29/2018 4:44:00 PM

This is wonderful poetry, Faraz. And a belated Congrats for your win. I enjoyed your thoughts on the afterlife, but I think nobody can really prove anything until they get to the other side!!

Darren White

Date: 7/28/2018 9:27:00 AM

You have a way with words and imagery. And the anaphora emphasizes the highly emotional poem. It sings and is beautiful. Thank you.

Eve Roper

Date: 6/23/2018 8:45:00 PM

Congratulations Faraz, on a great win.. heartfelt with great imagery and flow . Hugs Eve ~`*

Susan Ashley

Date: 6/23/2018 5:00:00 PM

Faraz, your poem is so sadly beautiful with poignant, heartfelt emotional imagery that takes my breath away. A very powerful, deep and impactful poem that caused me to linger and read again.. Congratulations on your wonderful win with your soulful write that poured forth from your loving heart. A fav! Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Susan Gentry

Date: 6/22/2018 9:06:00 PM

Congratulations on your win with this sorrowful poem of six lines. Well done.

Probir Gupta

Date: 6/22/2018 2:10:00 AM

Congratulations on your placement in the contest ...

Pashang Salehi

Date: 6/21/2018 2:43:00 AM

The poem, I like. It is sad and real... and I think congratulation is in order.

Gershon Wolf

Date: 6/20/2018 7:08:00 PM

Powerful poetry, Faraz. Many fine turns of phrases and imagery that makes an impact! Congrats on your winner in the contest! Best wishes, Gershon

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 6/20/2018 6:48:00 PM

- A skilled and great 6 line poem, from you Faraz :) - It must have been difficult to judge, I think everyone is amazing, with different themes - Congratulations on a well deserved 2nd place in the contest :) - hugs // Anne -Lise :)