Faraz Ajmal Poet Rhyme

The Last Conversation of a Dying Father To His Son

When I die, take care of your mum, don't stand by my grave to cry
I see everything, they say that I'm dead, but I don't sleep, it's a lie
You can find me in thousand winds that blow, in the flakes of snow
I am in the happiness which falls like rain, I am in the fields of ripening grain
I am the bird that sings, I come in dreams to say thousand splendid things
I am the rotten night where as you are a morning, you have to live without me


18 June 2018
For the contest " when line six is a perfect fix "
Sponsor " Silent one "

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Kai Michael Neumann September 26, 2018 at 2:04 AM Wow, that touches me deeply. I never had such a conversation with my late father, which is really sad. To find in a thousand winds that blow...Great write. Thnak you, Kai

Andrea Dietrich July 29, 2018 at 4:44 PM This is wonderful poetry, Faraz. And a belated Congrats for your win. I enjoyed your thoughts on the afterlife, but I think nobody can really prove anything until they get to the other side!!

Darren White July 28, 2018 at 9:27 AM You have a way with words and imagery. And the anaphora emphasizes the highly emotional poem. It sings and is beautiful. Thank you.

Eve Roper June 23, 2018 at 8:45 PM Congratulations Faraz, on a great win.. heartfelt with great imagery and flow . Hugs Eve ~`*

Susan Ashley June 23, 2018 at 5:00 PM Faraz, your poem is so sadly beautiful with poignant, heartfelt emotional imagery that takes my breath away. A very powerful, deep and impactful poem that caused me to linger and read again.. Congratulations on your wonderful win with your soulful write that poured forth from your loving heart. A fav! Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Susan Gentry June 22, 2018 at 9:06 PM Congratulations on your win with this sorrowful poem of six lines. Well done.

Probir Gupta June 22, 2018 at 2:10 AM Congratulations on your placement in the contest ...

Pashang Salehi June 21, 2018 at 2:43 AM The poem, I like. It is sad and real... and I think congratulation is in order.

Gershon Wolf June 20, 2018 at 7:08 PM Powerful poetry, Faraz. Many fine turns of phrases and imagery that makes an impact! Congrats on your winner in the contest! Best wishes, Gershon

Anne-Lise Andresen June 20, 2018 at 6:48 PM - A skilled and great 6 line poem, from you Faraz :) - It must have been difficult to judge, I think everyone is amazing, with different themes - Congratulations on a well deserved 2nd place in the contest :) - hugs // Anne -Lise :)

Silent One June 20, 2018 at 3:58 PM Beautiful and emotive six lines Faraz.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest..

Richard Lamoureux June 20, 2018 at 8:12 AM Beautiful and sad.

Charles Messina June 19, 2018 at 10:07 AM Succinct and profound Faraz, a wonderful verse! Good Luck in the contest...All the best...Charlie

Probir Gupta June 18, 2018 at 7:43 AM Profound and lovely ...