The Last Bee Dances Sos

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Inspiration: bees voted to be the most important living beings on earth

I never work in darkness friend
Evil hunts in shadows
Give me a sunny meadow
dancing jolly, kissing flowers 
now I stand quivering gossamer wings
narcissistic greed mongers, corrupted
build towers where neons flash
sold their putrid souls for cash
the prophet said perish thee
for you can’t eat money
words of change died in silence

Trees don’t tremble, flowers don’t cry
I know my time is near
Last night I had a dream
the last bee dead
I’m mounted on display
10,000 drones replaced me
doing what I gave for free
there is no hope in silence

Wastrels write on tenement walls
their words failed to convey
blind and deaf to my dismay
communications more than words
deathly silence screams the answer

Written 5/8/2019
NA the Day Away - Sponsor Lu Loo
Placed 3rd with thanks

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Lu Loo

Date: 9/7/2019 2:28:00 AM

the last line really wrapped up the poem perfectly, great poem lovely Georgia. Thank you for your participation and congratulations on your placement :)-luloo

Georgia Kereopa
Date: 4/24/2020 5:03:00 AM

love and light luloo

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 8/21/2019 1:11:00 AM

Gorgeous write, Georgia. Beautifully done; a wow for me.

Georgia Kereopa
Date: 8/22/2019 7:35:00 AM

Caren, so grateful for feedback. Did not make it in to the comp in time. I was reading it to my partner and got teary. He did say Im pretty intense. Some poems have a tiny sliver of heart injected in to them.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 8/6/2019 1:33:00 PM

This is really good, I too didn’t place but got a thoughtful note from John. I enjoyed your piece very much.

Georgia Kereopa
Date: 8/6/2019 4:20:00 PM

Thank you for your compliment Richard. I enjoyed yours too. I cut it too fine. Alas, I did not make it in to the contest.