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The language of poetry has left me

When the river of poetry has dried Like parched clouds waiting for warmth When the rain beats down on emptiness The god of rain demands to be penned I pour myself a glass of wet wine An offering to Bacchus to entreat My muse, but she ain’t listening Her torrent of words fall on deaf ears I light two cigarettes as an offering My sooty lungs are a poor sacrifice Still my muse refuses to talk sense The god of ash will not spill beans Poetry has dried, but I am faithful I’ll cup my hand in the pouring rain I’ll bind dissonant words like cold fusion Marry consonants and vowels online Anything to rise above the mundane I offer sooty words to show I’m here Do poets online get drenched like me Stumbling in the rain posting virtually? My eucharist is dipped in whine now Comments become sacramental breads Poetry is a vice best felt in the rain Washed clean by constant wringing So I’ve made a poem out of rain Turned water to prose like Jesus I’m on Golgotha with Him every day Extolling in the driving storm Both of us bleeding or crying Eli eli lama sabachthani? God, my gods why have you You abandoned me? You must know it's just a cross It's me counting rain drops When the parched clouds part Let the sunshine be though hard

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Date: 2/17/2024 11:15:00 AM
This entire poem is incredible, but the lines "So I’ve made a poem out of rain Turned water to prose like Jesus" are some of the best lines I've ever read in a poem. Very creative! Wonderfully written, Triny.
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Date: 1/29/2024 11:00:00 PM
Oh wow, this is such an evocative and heartfelt poem that dives in the emotions when one begins feeling if their light has abandoned them and the rays of healing are no longer proving cathartic.. Your words made me feel immense depth and I could resonate in some ways too. The use of metaphors and imagery is absolutely sublime.. "Her torrent of words fall on deaf ears", "I offer sooty words to show I’m here" Ahh, so poignant and intricately crafted.. Sending best wishes and light to you...
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Date: 1/22/2024 12:45:00 PM
I dont think it has dried in this poem.. This poem beautifully captures the essence of a poet grappling with the absence of inspiration, using evocative imagery and metaphors to convey the struggle to summon creativity. The opening lines, "When the river of poetry has dried, like parched clouds waiting for warmth," immediately draw the reader into a sense of longing and anticipation..
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Triny Xiang
Date: 1/22/2024 10:38:00 PM
Dear Silent One, your response is like poetry itself. You've illuminated what I've hidden in poor poetry. I am humbled by your excavation. Thank you.
Date: 1/22/2024 7:49:00 AM
You are so clever and talented but commenting on personal poems is difficult as pitching to commend a talent but not necessarily agree with some content is a tricky ask. Your poetry is perhaps hindered in the scope for comments by the real time nature of a site like this and you write of current torment (it seems) and a comment feels like an intrusion or in my case perhaps would be unwanted advice from someone that doesn't possess the facts or the understanding. You are a skilled poet.
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Triny Xiang
Date: 1/22/2024 10:41:00 PM
Thank you for your comment. I've reworked the poem by your advise. I welcome your intrusion, or rather your invited cup of tea with me. I hope to level up to your esteem of this penurious would be poet.

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