The Journey Within

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Constance LaFrance, J with 4 options, 8/15/2025

I don’t want to wall myself in with mixed-up theology,
but set myself on the narrow path towards heaven.
—quote by poet

The Journey Within

      Finding out, you’re all wrong;
   mixed-up theology is quaint.
Did you forget the part about suffering saints?
   This is why your anger erupts;
       mindful, this is the test.
Any prophet that found it profitable to
lose his own soul in “Thus saith the Lord,” dooms
followers and his “white-washed tomb” to the abyss.
The journey within finds favor with God,
not by believing in treasures on earth. Be still
and have hope amidst suffering; admit
your weakness, expose your pride; cling to the cross. Hide
your face in Jesus’ hem; don’t haw; glory
in salvation - that the Most Holy would save us.
We can get “what we don’t deserve.” This “sinner-saint”
      reads the holy scriptures,
   looks for the truth, abides in Christ.
I have and have not, either way I am blessed by
   knowing my treasure’s in heaven,
      when my journey’s complete.

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Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 8/15/2025 4:55:00 PM

I enjoyed your spin on The Journey Within. I found this words compelling: The journey within finds favor with God, not by believing in treasures on earth. Be still and have hope amidst suffering; admit your weakness, expose your pride; cling to the cross. Best wishes with the contest, dear Kim, hugs, Sara

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 8/15/2025 6:04:00 PM

Thank you, Sara! You are a dear friend!

Paige Hind

Date: 8/15/2025 2:51:00 PM

You quote right. Your words are so honest - they speak to me. :)

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 8/15/2025 3:26:00 PM

Thank you, Paige <3

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 8/15/2025 1:12:00 PM

Dear Kim, What struck me most is how you balance conviction with humility. You don’t write as if you’ve “arrived,” but as someone walking that narrow path, eyes fixed on the eternal, still aware of your own weakness. Yes it is so important, the stakes, the hope, and the reward. You’ve made “the journey within” feel both urgent and beautiful. Blessings, Dear Kim, Daniel

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 8/15/2025 2:15:00 PM

Thank you, Daniel, for stating your thoughts as you read mine, letting me know what you see. I appreciate you greatly! God bless you and yours!