The Journey

Sight.
Sound.
Smell.
Taste.
The trains.
The tracks.
The rush, the haste.
The sweeties and toffees,
Newspapers and coffees,
Cases and bags, e-cigs and fags,
Pasty and tanned, iphone in hand,
The people who come and the people who go
And the Taxis that wait, as you cannot be late -
Spill out men in their ties, College kids in tie-dyes,
End of termers returning to their seat of learning,
The screeching of brakes and the slamming of doors, 
From the ‘barely awakes’ and the ‘ready to go’s -
The good lucks and goodbyes, fears and tears in the eyes, 
And the hugs that don’t end and the texts that they’ll send,
The lovers, the losers, the shakers and movers, the gap-year beginners and ‘nothing to prove’rs -
Step right into the mouth of the train as it stands, hoping this journey syncs with the ticket in hand -
To all points of the compass; South, West, East and North,
The disparate throng fast shuddering forth,
Frozen of face, their personal space.
Typical of the human race.
Lost in the crowd, all heads bowed.
Silent fears, screaming loud …..
Break out the ‘Hello’s -
And ban ‘Goodbye’
Journeys end
Hovers,
Nigh.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015



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Date: 9/1/2015 1:53:00 AM
Wonderful write and a superb win! Big congrats Bill!
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Date: 8/11/2015 6:04:00 AM
Great win with this one!
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Date: 8/11/2015 9:27:00 AM
Thanks Dan ... I enjoyed writing it! ;)
Date: 8/10/2015 7:25:00 AM
Great poem, enjoyed the read. Welcome!
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Date: 8/10/2015 1:57:00 PM
Thanks, James - hopefully more to come ;)
Date: 8/10/2015 1:09:00 AM
Brilliant take Bill, Congrats on first place win!U took us to the splendid train journey!
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Date: 8/10/2015 1:58:00 PM
Thank you so much - hopefully more to come ;)
Date: 8/9/2015 5:20:00 PM
wow what a journey we went on many congrats Bill - love the creative form you used here too:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 8/10/2015 1:58:00 PM
Thanks Jan, it was a real pleasure to write ;)
Date: 8/9/2015 1:04:00 PM
Wonderful write, Bill, congratulations on your win Hugs eve
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Date: 8/10/2015 1:57:00 PM
Thanks, Eve ... ;)
Date: 8/9/2015 8:33:00 AM
Well Bill, you certainly sounded the whistle in this one....ALL ABOARD.....pretty well covered the gamut of riders on a train. This reads like a "people watchers" guide. Welcome to the Soup you have made quite an entrance.
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Date: 8/9/2015 8:37:00 AM
Thank you, John - but how to top it?
Date: 8/4/2015 9:22:00 PM
Bill, Congratulations on having your poem featured this week. **SKAT**
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Date: 8/10/2015 2:00:00 PM
Bless you ;)
Date: 8/4/2015 7:43:00 AM
Very clever interesting write. Enjoyed
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Date: 8/1/2015 5:32:00 AM
Thanks, everyone - it's an encouragement for a beginner ;)
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Date: 8/1/2015 3:55:00 AM
Loved the image, cadence and the rhyme. Loved your first post. I checked your list and wow...Prolific! Welcome to PoetrySoup, Bill! Keep posting and start visiting other pages to be an encouragement as well. Kim
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Date: 7/29/2015 4:22:00 AM
I closed my eyes and remembered every train I enjoyed in my youth; the rhythm was particularly soothing and lent itself beautifully to the poem. WH Auden was obviously captured by it. Thanks for the encouragement ;)
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Date: 7/29/2015 4:17:00 AM
A 'nod' to WH Auden's 'This is the Night Train'
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Date: 7/26/2015 10:17:00 PM
Hi Bill, A nice warm WELCOME to poetry soup. I hope you have fun with this wonderful community. You'll find many friendly poets who are ready to support and give positive feedback. I will enjoy following you and your poetry when you are ready :) We are Lucky To Have you. Enjoy Poetry Soup:) Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@
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Date: 7/26/2015 1:43:00 PM
Bill, Welcome to Poetry Soup. It will be a delight to read and become familiar with your poems in the future. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile others passed when I first joined the soup. Wishing you and your poetry the best. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here STARTING with me- SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs* SKAT
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Date: 7/29/2015 4:27:00 AM
Hi Skat! I couldn't work out how to respond, but at last the 'reply' option has appeared ! Apparently, I cannot post a bio, so you'll have to work me out via my work for now ... but I am in my 50's, married with 5 children and 10 gchildren. A full-time carer for my dear wife and a Magistrate in my local community, my special gift is proofreading. You are my 1st PS Pal x
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