The Island of Alcatraz - Sg

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The Island of Alcatraz

Startled clouds lurk midst a gate
beams stretch crossed a bay
pylons yon the sneaky fog
dreams fetch castaway.
Deserted prison
vagary hopes long entombed
averted risen.

2021 June 14

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Anisha Dutta

Date: 6/29/2021 9:03:00 PM

Gone through both the examples. 'll try on my own way. Blessing

Hilo Poet
Date: 6/29/2021 9:27:00 PM

Hoping the best to you, Anisha, Aloha!

Krish Radhakrishna

Date: 6/27/2021 1:53:00 PM

A fascinating place but one that fills you with horror and sadness! san Francisco is one of the most fascinating places that I have visited!! Thanks for this example. Shall see if I can think of something.

Hilo Poet
Date: 6/27/2021 2:31:00 PM

I frequent northern California annually visiting family thereabout and elsewhere, never missing lobster and prime rib combo dinners at pier 49. Appreciate your comments, Krish, hoping that you give it a whirl my friend, Aloha!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/15/2021 3:12:00 PM

A great example for us, William. I visited this place and it was a wonderful day on the Bay and seeing the other sites nearby. Thanks for the example.

Hilo Poet
Date: 6/15/2021 7:32:00 PM

Posted soupmail yet this went awry while Gary's (below) came via the old way--email? Hmm? Anyhow, you and Gary non-SF'ers, got there and I haven't after yrs in the bay area, glad you guys made it my friend, Aloha!

Constance La France

Date: 6/15/2021 6:14:00 AM

William, beautiful and another great example for your new contest, peace _Constance

Hilo Poet
Date: 6/15/2021 11:11:00 AM

I am grateful, Constance, thank you, my friend, Aloha!

Gary Radice

Date: 6/15/2021 5:18:00 AM

Your poem brings back the memories and images from our visit to San Francisco in '92 William. There was always an early morning mist shrouding the Golden Gate Bridge. We took the boat trip and walked around Alcatraz. There's a great atmosphere created by your words and I feel I'm there now :) Cheers - Gary

Hilo Poet
Date: 6/15/2021 5:41:00 AM

I wrote a short story on PS about my sad days living in SF till the '80s, tho' I've never gone there, Gary, glad you enjoyed the times you had there and SF in general, my daughter now lives in my home her older siblings had grown up in during those times. Anyhow, enjoy your day my friend, Aloha!