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The Intruder

The Intruder (Footle)

Pitch-dark
Dogs bark

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A Footle Contest hosted
by James Edward Lee Sr.

© 10th March 2018

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John Michaels

Date: 11/15/2018 11:36:00 AM

I love this form - great job, Paul!! Regards, John.

Paul Callus
Date: 11/15/2018 4:21:00 PM

Thank you, John. Regards // paul

Sandra Haight

Date: 4/4/2018 6:38:00 PM

An ominous warning in four words, Paul! Well-done! Congratulations on your win! Sandra

Paul Callus
Date: 4/5/2018 4:06:00 PM

Thank you, Sandra. I enjoyed your winning entry, too. Regards // paul

Eve Roper

Date: 4/3/2018 9:03:00 PM

Back with congratulations on your win, Paul, excellent footle. Hugs Eve ~`*

Paul Callus
Date: 4/4/2018 4:42:00 PM

Thank you Eve. A repeat visit is much appreciated. Hugs // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 4/3/2018 1:30:00 PM

an excellent footle Paul, congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 4/4/2018 4:41:00 PM

Many thanks, Jan. Having read all the winning entries I am left with a sense of incredulity:) Silly me...I thought it was a Footle Contest! Hugs // paul

Line Gauthier

Date: 4/3/2018 9:44:00 AM

Back with congrats, Paul. Well deserved win.

Paul Callus
Date: 4/4/2018 4:34:00 PM

Thank you for a repeat visit, and the congrats, Line:) Regards // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 4/3/2018 12:38:00 AM

- Congratulations on your 5nd place in the contest, Paul :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Paul Callus
Date: 4/4/2018 4:33:00 PM

Thank you, Anne-Lise:) Hugs // paul

Eve Roper

Date: 3/16/2018 1:33:00 PM

I'm with Victor, "Hope barking dogs do not bite." they hurt.. good one Paul .. Luck in the contest. Hugs Eve ~`*

Paul Callus
Date: 3/16/2018 2:09:00 PM

Dogs only bite once they stop barking, Eve:) Thank you for stopping by. Hugs // paul

Supraja Kannan

Date: 3/14/2018 7:47:00 AM

Wow...Great... So much said in few words... Good luck in the contest...

Paul Callus
Date: 3/14/2018 3:41:00 PM

Thank you, Supraja. Best regards // paul

Viv Wigley

Date: 3/14/2018 2:17:00 AM

chilling, in two lines. I'm going back under the blankets. Nice footle, Paul, good luck. Regards, Viv

Paul Callus
Date: 3/14/2018 3:41:00 PM

Thank you, Viv...it will take more than dogs barking to scare you:) Keep the rolling pin ready:) Regards // paul

Laura Leiser

Date: 3/13/2018 10:01:00 PM

Very cute! GL in the contest, Paul :)

Paul Callus
Date: 3/14/2018 2:58:00 PM

Thank you, Laura; a pleasure to have you visiting:) Regards // paul

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 3/12/2018 8:37:00 AM

Title and footle perfectly paired.

Paul Callus
Date: 3/13/2018 3:18:00 PM

I rely on your critique, Richard:) Thank you. Regards // paul

Ravi Sathasivam

Date: 3/12/2018 12:37:00 AM

Excellent and brilliant image you have created in couple of words. Enjoyed reading it. All the best for the contest.

Paul Callus
Date: 3/13/2018 3:17:00 PM

Thank you, Ravi. Your support is appreciated, my friend. Regards // paul

Rhoda Tripp

Date: 3/11/2018 6:51:00 PM

I got chills!

Paul Callus
Date: 3/13/2018 3:16:00 PM

Now, I wonder...is that a good or a bad sign!:) Hope you have not been having sleepless nights:) Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/11/2018 6:12:00 PM

Nicely done. I gave a series to the contest, just oldies. I wonder how he will choose a winner.

Paul Callus
Date: 3/13/2018 3:14:00 PM

Thanks Andrea. I was thinking along the same lines as you, but I was afraid that adding on to this footle would have spoilt it. Regards // paul

Eileen Manassian

Date: 3/11/2018 4:47:00 PM

Oh...what is afoot? ;) Good one, dear Paul. Good luck in the contest, dear.

Paul Callus
Date: 3/13/2018 3:13:00 PM

Thank you for stopping by, Eileen; lovely to see you back, and posting new poems. Hugs // paul

Mick Talbot

Date: 3/11/2018 10:25:00 AM

4 words and I'm locking all my doors, amazing footle... Mick

Paul Callus
Date: 3/11/2018 11:11:00 AM

Love your reaction, Mick! Thank you. Regards // paul

Maria Williams

Date: 3/11/2018 12:14:00 AM

Oooh scary, amazing how in just 4 words you can instil such a chilling image. This is your forte as July Morning says, you truly excel in these writes Paul. Good luck in the contest....Maria

Paul Callus
Date: 3/11/2018 9:03:00 AM

Thank you for the generous comments, Maria. Hope you've been having a lovely weekend. Regards // paul

CayCay Jennings

Date: 3/10/2018 9:16:00 PM

At my house it is, pitch dark, cats yawn! I am going to ponder this write long after I've clicked away. Susan's right, so much from so little and, further, I suspect there will be many different perspectives derived from those words. You've stirred the Soup! All the best ... CayCay

Paul Callus
Date: 3/11/2018 8:39:00 AM

At least you have cats (is it 4?) to keep you good company, CayCay:) If the house is dark on the inside, you'll be able to see better outside! Best regards // paul

Susan Ashley

Date: 3/10/2018 8:47:00 PM

You've created an eerie mood with your effective and succinct title and imagery Paul. It's amazing how only four carefully chosen words can establish the feeling of fear in one's mind.. Best wishes for a win - I love it! Warmest wishes always my friend.. ~Susan

Paul Callus
Date: 3/11/2018 8:35:00 AM

Thank you, Susan. I am glad that I achieved what I set out to do...your feedback is proof of that. ~ Warm regards // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 3/10/2018 6:05:00 PM

dogs bark and security lights go on Paul.. such a sad world we live in when our home is no longer our sanctuary:-( hugs jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 3/11/2018 8:21:00 AM

Yes, Jan...times change. When I was young most houses in the village had a key in the lock during the day, and visitors just knocked and entered! Hugs // paul

Silent One

Date: 3/10/2018 5:26:00 PM

short, but so true... I do not have a dog, I have bunnies and CCTV lol

Paul Callus
Date: 3/11/2018 8:17:00 AM

Dogs used to be our alarms, S-1. Nowadays we rely on technology! // paul

Line Gauthier

Date: 3/10/2018 5:26:00 PM

Excellent footle, Paul - and no intruder goes unnoticed in your neighbourhood.

Paul Callus
Date: 3/11/2018 7:42:00 AM

Thank you, Line. The problem is that some dogs bark for fun, so when a real intruder comes people might ignore the danger:) Regards // paul

Tom Cunningham

Date: 3/10/2018 5:02:00 PM

Brilliant image you've created in four words. Good luck in the contest.

Paul Callus
Date: 3/10/2018 5:07:00 PM

You are too kind, Tom:) Thank you! Regards // paul

Sunlite Wanter

Date: 3/10/2018 4:26:00 PM

When the 10:00 o'clock news comes on, all the backyard dogs visit each other. Fun to hear. I need to get familiar with footles like your clever one.

Paul Callus
Date: 3/10/2018 5:02:00 PM

Thank you, Sunlite; your pleasantly generous visit is appreciated:) Enjoy the weekend. // paul

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