The Instrument's Hiss

She wanted a baby more than life
So she went and booyah’d 50 guys
Her smile dazzled everyone she met
When she finally learned she was pregnant 
Her breasts grew larger, her belly too
She decorated the nursery with pink and blue
But at the doctors, something was amiss
The only sound was the instrument’s hiss
There wasn’t a heartbeat; her eyes grew wide 
“Doctor is my baby, dead inside?”
“Let’s do a sonogram, see what it shows”
But his eyes were sad, his movements slow
As the sonogram screen lit up the womb
It wasn’t as they’d thought, a baby’s tomb
Because in fact, there was no baby there
Just an aching hole, and a woman’s despair
Copyright © | Year Posted 2012

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Rivenbark Avatar
April 23, 2014 at 7:50 PM
So heartbreaking. Congratulations on your win.
Dietrich Avatar
April 22, 2014 at 3:27 PM
Yes, I remember this tragic sonnet, Susan. BIG congrats with another win for you with it. One of your best sonnets. Is it your only sonnet? Luv, Andrea
Callus Avatar
April 22, 2014 at 2:03 PM
Deep and heartfelt. joy and disillusion. congrats on your win. // paul
Mehta Avatar
April 22, 2014 at 9:37 AM
Congratulation again on the fine win with this lovely poem,
A   Avatar
April 21, 2014 at 9:37 PM
Susan, Congratulations, --Enjoyed your awesome win. Thank you so much for the support... Always & forever *Linda
Dietrich Avatar
December 25, 2012 at 7:30 PM
Merry Christmas, Susan. WHAT's UP?
Horne Avatar
November 10, 2012 at 2:16 PM
love this clever write, Susan - so glad to see it was a winner. Thanks very much - loved your contest : )
Babcock Avatar
October 27, 2012 at 2:24 PM
Very nicely penned and congrats on your win. love phyl
Horsman Avatar
October 25, 2012 at 10:43 AM
glad i found this poem, Susan, it is so profound, so heartfelt, yet one as to reasd it again and again.... wow the captcha is cubs
Horsman Avatar
October 25, 2012 at 10:43 AM
that is read
Dufresne Avatar
October 21, 2012 at 5:21 AM
what an array of feelings this poem conveys or produces in the reader. Grabbed me and wouldn't let go . very well done.! and thanks for the comments...
Johnson Avatar
October 18, 2012 at 4:58 PM
I've heard of the phenomenon of false pregnancies. Great story for the contests and congratulations on your win. Love, Joyce
Dietrich Avatar
October 18, 2012 at 2:52 PM
susan, you did really well with one of your first sonnets. Congrats. I have not seen the specific winners list yet. I will check it out if I have time. Luv, andrea
Kendrick Avatar
October 18, 2012 at 11:11 AM
Enjoyed reading this creative work..Congrats on your win..Sara..It was sad but not as sad if it had been an actual baby..Sara
Sweetheart Avatar
October 18, 2012 at 8:22 AM
CONGRATS SUSAN ON A MARVELOUS WRITE AND WIN LUV .. AWESOME POEM ..
Grisetti Avatar
October 18, 2012 at 7:54 AM
Congratulations on your win.
Brown Avatar
October 18, 2012 at 6:27 AM
Congratulations on your 4th place win in Cyndi's contest Susan. Love, Carol XXXX
May Avatar
October 17, 2012 at 10:37 PM
congrats on a great win Susan
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October 15, 2012 at 8:40 PM
Hola, Susan, wow... you could have entered this in scribes contest... I love what you did here, last year, they could not find my babygrandaughter heart beat. The doctors gave us a scare for over a week. after the second sonogram, we finally heard a heart beat. thanks God, .. your poem has a very heart felt ending. maybe it is for the better for there not to be a baby in the tomb, than one dead inside of her. still a sad tale. God luck, xox~pd
Williams Avatar
October 15, 2012 at 9:02 AM
oh Susan this is just brilliant and riveting all at the same time, the amount of women who must be able to relate to this, the very best of luck...all is improving, my wife comes home a week today so I will dissapear for a while to give her all of my attention she will need 24 hour care, so all is good, hope you are well....David
May Avatar
October 12, 2012 at 7:42 PM
well penned Susan....best wishes...
Sweetheart Avatar
October 12, 2012 at 9:11 AM
SUPER ENTRY SUSAN .. GREAT WORK WITH SONNET FORM LUV .. WINNING WISHES .. AM SURE CYNDI WILL LUV IT .. THANKXX SO MUCH FOR MY WINNING TANKS .. WITH OUR NEW GRANDSON IN OUR HOME FOR HOLIDAYS IT WAS SO EASY TO WRITE ABOUT OUR BUNDLE OF JOY ..
Collins Avatar
October 12, 2012 at 8:37 AM
Susan - Think I read this at PFT, but the second time is the charm. Love it. Kathy
Kearley Avatar
October 9, 2012 at 11:20 PM
Wow! That is quite the write ya got there... Good luck in the contest. Jeepers! I had to read it again before I posted this.
Dietrich Avatar
October 8, 2012 at 1:57 PM
susan, I really like this by the way. And I think Cyndi ought to love it because I think she admires the modern way that you write. You really did well following her rules for a contemporary sonnet contest. Luv, andrea
Dietrich Avatar
October 8, 2012 at 1:54 PM
Oh, good it is here. I was looking for this because you asked me something about it at hotmail. Soupmail.
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