The Iceberg and the Titanic

You were the iceberg and I the Titanic
You were a sparkling gem on the water
Waiting to turn everything tragic
I flirted with you, awestruck by your charm
Little did I know my lust would do me harm
You were the iceberg and I the Titanic

You were the iceberg and I the Titanic
I was all confidence on my maiden voyage
But it soon all turned to sheer panic
You gouged a fatal wound in my heart
The pain flooded to every part
You were the iceberg and I the Titanic

You were the iceberg and I the Titanic
Unmoved, you watched my death throes
The tear in my side ghastly... horrific
You watched me sink down to the abyss
When you could’ve patched me with a kiss
You were the iceberg and I the Titanic.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2012


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Date: 9/24/2013 8:23:00 PM
This is such a great metophor! 777777777 you never cease to amaze me with your creativity.
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 9/25/2013 1:02:00 PM
What a lovely comment, Richard...I'm so so touched that you would take the time to read my older work. Very very kind of you..... The 7s.....bringing smiles to this face!
Date: 12/8/2012 10:22:00 PM
nice metaphor and poem. much enjoyed! -JuliMichelle
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 12/8/2012 11:51:00 PM
Thanks, Juli! :) Nice to hear from you. Have a great evening!
Date: 12/8/2012 7:35:00 PM
Eileen, I like the way you created a vivid and gripping cascade of a story and comapison in my mind. Love all the wonderful and devestating images that lead to the sheer panic.. Well done! good night PD
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 12/8/2012 7:40:00 PM
PD...thank you for your post. Again, I'm honored to hear from you! God bless! :)
Date: 12/8/2012 6:59:00 PM
Yes, lovely metaphor. I also loved the word play in your use of the word "sheer" very witty. Bravo!
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 12/8/2012 7:04:00 PM
Jon...always a pleasure. Your opinion is very important to me. :)
Date: 12/8/2012 4:19:00 PM
a wonderful metaphor and i love the way you wove it throughout the poem. great ending, too!
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 12/8/2012 6:43:00 PM
Thanks, dear Ilene. I wrote this some time ago, but wasn't sure about posting it. Thought maybe people would think it is overdone. Your affirmative post has done me worlds of good! Thank you! :) Hugs
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