Eileen Manassian Poet Rhyme

The Iceberg and the Titanic

You were the iceberg and I the Titanic
You were a sparkling gem on the water
Waiting to turn everything tragic
I flirted with you, awestruck by your charm
Little did I know my lust would do me harm
You were the iceberg and I the Titanic

You were the iceberg and I the Titanic
I was all confidence on my maiden voyage
But it soon all turned to sheer panic
You gouged a fatal wound in my heart
The pain flooded to every part
You were the iceberg and I the Titanic

You were the iceberg and I the Titanic
Unmoved, you watched my death throes
The tear in my side ghastly... horrific
You watched me sink down to the abyss
When you could’ve patched me with a kiss
You were the iceberg and I the Titanic.

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Richard Lamoureux September 24, 2013 at 8:23 PM This is such a great metophor! 777777777 you never cease to amaze me with your creativity. Eileen Manassian September 25, 2013 at 1:02 PM What a lovely comment, Richard...I'm so so touched that you would take the time to read my older work. Very very kind of you..... The 7s.....bringing smiles to this face!

Juli- Michelle December 8, 2012 at 10:22 PM nice metaphor and poem. much enjoyed! -JuliMichelle Eileen Manassian December 8, 2012 at 11:51 PM Thanks, Juli! :) Nice to hear from you. Have a great evening!

Poet Destroyer A December 8, 2012 at 7:35 PM Eileen, I like the way you created a vivid and gripping cascade of a story and comapison in my mind. Love all the wonderful and devestating images that lead to the sheer panic.. Well done! good night PD Eileen Manassian December 8, 2012 at 7:40 PM PD...thank you for your post. Again, I'm honored to hear from you! God bless! :)

Jon A Cavanaugh December 8, 2012 at 6:59 PM Yes, lovely metaphor. I also loved the word play in your use of the word "sheer" very witty. Bravo! Eileen Manassian December 8, 2012 at 7:04 PM Jon...always a pleasure. Your opinion is very important to me. :)

Ilene Bauer December 8, 2012 at 4:19 PM a wonderful metaphor and i love the way you wove it throughout the poem. great ending, too! Eileen Manassian December 8, 2012 at 6:43 PM Thanks, dear Ilene. I wrote this some time ago, but wasn't sure about posting it. Thought maybe people would think it is overdone. Your affirmative post has done me worlds of good! Thank you! :) Hugs