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The Ice Man

That Winter night, he slipped on ice and, sobbing, lay there in the snow; he feared he'd catch another cold. He couldn't stand but felt so cold, his hands and feet had turned to ice; he shivered, covered by more snow. He looked just like a man of snow. Oh, to experience such cold! He lamely struggled on the ice. He died on ice and snow, so cold... written 21st February for Charles' Tritina contest

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Date: 3/8/2019 9:04:00 PM
I loved this clever poem Jack. We had such a cold February that it is the coldest we have had in 83 years. Frozen can feel that coldness. Well done. love phyl
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Date: 2/28/2019 11:25:00 PM
Jack congratulatuions on your win! A clever and sad poem which made for excellent reading, poetry hugs, Jennifer.
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Date: 2/28/2019 4:22:00 PM
Congrats on your winning work. Way to go. Enjoyed reading this one. Thanks for all the visits to my page. Sara
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Date: 2/25/2019 5:14:00 PM
Very unorthodox, Jack. Nobody ever called you dull. Congrats on your win.
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Date: 2/24/2019 4:17:00 PM
Dropping back to say many congrats on your win Jack:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 2/24/2019 3:55:00 PM
Such a sad poem, Jack. A great write and very well penned. Congratulations on your win in my contest. All the best...Charlie
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Date: 2/24/2019 2:34:00 PM
Back with Grats for Jack!!!
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Date: 2/21/2019 9:47:00 PM
Jack, excellent write, sadly that happens here in my cold world all the time especially with the homeless ~
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Date: 2/21/2019 8:42:00 PM
you went for a "dark" one too, I see. I liked this very much, Jack.
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Date: 2/21/2019 4:49:00 PM
oh so sad Jack it is truly and awful way to end your days - nearly happened to someone we know he was nissed as a pewt and found with hypothermia outside his house he was off work for about 6 weeks:-( hugs jan xx
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Date: 2/21/2019 1:34:00 PM
Sad, but that's what makes this poem a winner, Jack. Regards // paul
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Date: 2/21/2019 1:01:00 PM
So sad Jack - this is a certain winner - I was close to tears! Poetry hugs, Jennifer
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Date: 2/21/2019 11:54:00 AM
ohh, this is an illustrative work with a greeat end line, jack... yes to this !...huggs
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