The Hands of Time-Rondeau

The Hands of Time


The hands of time stand eerie still
Where hearts chamber a cagey chill,
And whispers warn of shadows deep
With eyes that strain as shower’s sweep,
The sands of time a formless fill.

Disenchanting dreams pave their will
Seconds follow a timely till,
While the dormant lie counting sheep,
The hands of time.

Where voices scratch a shackled shrill
The hours' harbor a haunting thrill,
And the minutes tear as they weep
Behind the veils the walls of sleep,
Moon in sight above the foothill
The hands of time.



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The Rondeau consists of 13 lines of 8 syllables plus 2 refrains
AABBA - AAB with refrain C - AABBA with Refrain C


July.25.2018
Rondeau Poetry
Sponsored by: Joseph May 


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Copyright © | Year Posted 2018



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Date: 8/31/2018 10:36:00 AM
Great write WW, so very well done, congratulations...
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Date: 8/30/2018 7:59:00 PM
Congratulations on your #1 win. Well done!
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Date: 8/30/2018 2:47:00 PM
Wonderful write. .Congrats on your superb win.
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Date: 8/29/2018 3:54:00 PM
Congrats on your winning work ..Way to go.. Sara.This picture was eerie to me. You did a good job with making lines.
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Date: 8/29/2018 5:53:00 AM
This is excellent WW! Congratulations on your deserving top win! : )
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Date: 8/28/2018 6:13:00 PM
CONGRATULATIONS on your well-deserved win! Janice
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Date: 8/28/2018 6:07:00 PM
A haunting depiction as" the hands of time stand eerie still"..Congrats on your win WW..
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Date: 8/28/2018 5:13:00 PM
Congratulations for your win WW :)
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Date: 8/10/2018 4:48:00 PM
Hello WW, I have done a Rondeau in the past so I can certainly appreciate the set order of the rhyming scheme, the attendant verse syncopation, and the syllabication requirements to make one of these writes do what it's supposed to do. You have accomplished all of these most excellently!! "The Hands of Time" is a perfect theme, in this instance, to stage and perfect a Rondeau as you've done superbly here. A distinct pleasure to read. Outstanding!! A FAVE TOO!! Best Always, Gary (P.S. Best of Luck in the contest!!--GB)
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Date: 8/2/2018 9:58:00 PM
I almost chose this picture instead of the rose WW. I felt drawn to them both. A fascinating piece! Your poem is a bit dark. It match the picture. Very well done! : )
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Date: 7/26/2018 2:21:00 PM
I too got chills reading your wonderful rondeau, ^WW^, good luck in the contest:-) Hugs Jan xx
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Date: 7/26/2018 5:30:00 AM
I love the exquisite beauty, great depths and creative thought in this glowing gem my friend! A fav, a treasure too!
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Date: 7/26/2018 12:35:00 AM
Hi WW, You did justice to the Rondeau form. Your content brought chills down my spine. It looks like a winner to me. I wish you the best of luck in contest. Excellent job:-) Alexis
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Date: 7/26/2018 12:25:00 AM
This is exquisite, ^WW^, and must be added to my favs! I am new at this poetry (writing) thing, (I have loved poetry since my earliest years), and I don't believe I have ever written a Rondeau, but this is absolute perfection to the form, and sublimity as a poem in general. LOVE it! :-)
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Date: 7/25/2018 10:59:00 PM
WW.. this work shot chills up my spine and I loved that feeling)!
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Date: 7/25/2018 4:19:00 PM
WW, masterfully rendered in its gripping tone... winning wishes to you!...huggs
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Date: 7/25/2018 11:05:00 AM
Very good Rondeau, I love this form. It's a haunting poem, almost Poe-like, and it really goes well with the picture.
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